issue52 一道大家写的较多的题,麻烦大伙帮忙看看,谢谢

kkytUID: 188814

issue52 好多同学写了这篇,大家帮忙看看我的.谢谢了

52. "Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."
教育鼓励学生们提出问题和进行批判，这样做的结果无助于促进社会的和谐。

Will education lead to social discord since it encourage the students to question and criticize, as the speaker's claim? I concede that education will indeed nourish the students' criticism and innovation, but in my opinion, this behavior is beneficial to the social stability.

The reasons that I agree with the speaker’s assertion that education stirs the students to question and criticize are stated below. First, education foster the students' critical thinking by instilling them some of the paragons. This kind of examples is innumerable. For instance, as we know, we have already learned the story of the famous physics Galileo who had courage to challenge the authority, since we were still primary school students. It is no doubt that the spirits of Galileo will unavoidable affects us. Second, in class, we are often encouraged to discuss the pressing issue such as terrorism, globalization, and environment and so on and express our own ideas. Obviously, all of the things the teachers do are conducive to cultivate the students’ skepticism.  

However, our questions and critics function as a negative feedback to conciliate the problems and resentments already existing in the society, and will therefore eliminate the disharmony. History is laded with the examples that support my assertion. Considering the four freedoms we still cherish today as example. The first is freedom of speech and expression as the President Franklin Roosevelt’s address to congress. Everyone has the right to point out the mistakes of the governments. Thanks to the comments of the teachers and students about the problems in education, the government had realized the consequence of the educational issues and enacted the project of “America 2000: an educational strategy” that aims at increasing the educational appropriation and improving the quality of the education. In fact, America has always been nourished by men and women who are not afraid to go against the grain. To the contrary, if the government suppressed the voice of the students and enforced the autocracy, it would inevitably go to wrack and ruin. The Qing Dynasty (1644-1911) is a good illustration. As the power confined the content of education and executed the literary inquisition, the conflict between the government and the people accumulated to the acme, and thus the revolution of 1911led by Dr Sun Yat-sen broke out and overthrown the authority. Hence, never will an integrate system be harmonious without the interaction of its components, so is the systematical society.

Admittedly, we must see the negative effect that such encouragement will bring. It is no denying that education may shape cynical persons who will be accustomed to questioning and criticizing anything that they face. In some cases, their exaggeration may evoke a panic in the demos. For this account, we must resort to the strict censorship to prevent such irrational critics disseminated by the mass media.

In sum, the criticism serves as the “lube” of the government. The goal of our education is to incubate the students' ability of moderate critical thinking and this object will eventually facilitate the development the society if we implement properly.

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

占座,现在太困,明天提交作业.^^

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

52. "Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."
教育鼓励学生们提出问题和进行批判，这样做的结果无助于促进社会的和谐。

Will education lead to social discord since it encourage the students to question and criticize, as the speaker's claim? I concede that education will indeed nourish the students' criticism and innovation, 这个意思最好直接说 就是 criticism is beneficial。。。but in my opinion, this behavior is beneficial to the social stability.

The reasons that I agree with the speaker’s assertion that education stirs the students to question and criticize are stated below.直接说：education does encourage students to question and criticize: (用冒号表示解释) First, education foster the students' critical thinking by instilling them some of the paragons. This kind of examples is innumerable. For instance, as we know, we have already learned the story of the famous physics Galileo who had courage to challenge the authority, since we were still primary school students. It is no doubt that the spirits of Galileo will unavoidable affects us. Second, in class, we are often encouraged to discuss the pressing为什么是pressing issue such as terrorism, globalization, and environment and so on and express our own ideas. Obviously, all of the things the teachers do are conducive to cultivate the students’ skepticism. 两个理由不至于用first second 直接来个also就好了

这一段论证的两个分层有点勉强，首先题目给出的quesion和critisize并不一定就是要你分两个层次来说，你看很多其他的issue题目里面and并不是完全并列有时候只是补充一下而已 比如ethical and moral

However, our questions and critics function as a negative feedback什么意思？ to conciliate the problems and resentments already existing in the society, and will therefore eliminate the disharmony. History is laded with the examples that support my assertion. Considering the four freedoms we still cherish today as example. The first is freedom of speech and expression as the President Franklin Roosevelt’s address to congress. Everyone has the right to point out the mistakes of the governments. Thanks to the comments of the teachers and students about the problems in education, the government had realized the consequence of the educational issues and enacted the project of “America 2000: an educational strategy” that aims at increasing the educational appropriation and improving the quality of the education. In fact, America has always been nourished by men and women who are not afraid to go against the grain. To the contrary, if the government suppressed the voice of the students and enforced the autocracy, it would inevitably go to wrack and ruin. The Qing Dynasty (1644-1911) is a good illustration. As the power confined the content of education and executed the literary inquisition, the conflict between the government and the people accumulated to the acme, and thus the revolution of 1911led by Dr Sun Yat-sen broke out and overthrown the authority. Hence, never will an integrate system be harmonious without the interaction of its components, so is the systematical society.
例子很好，写的有点乱，很多话比较多余，比如Ais a good illustration. 直接说什么事情导致什么就好，都知道你在举例子呢。

Admittedly, we must see the negative effect that such encouragement will bring. It is no denying that education may shape cynical persons who will be accustomed to questioning and criticizing anything that they face. In some cases, their exaggeration may evoke a panic in the demos. For this account, we must resort to the strict censorship to prevent such irrational critics disseminated by the mass media.

In sum, the criticism serves as the “lube” of the government. The goal of our education is to incubate the students' ability of moderate critical thinking and this object will eventually facilitate the development the society if we implement properly.

我的看法是题目既定的事实（似乎是一个肯定好的假设）不用太费力的证明，而如何加强你的观点（尤其你持不同观点的时候）才是关键。我经常看到习惯性的为了表明自己思考的全面而加一个让步，其实如果是我写我会尽量避免让步，最好是得存进尺^_^ 怎么做呢，就是讲让步变成一种情况：在这道题我会说之所以会有disharmony出现就是因为没有正确得对待criticism呢，这样以来往往不利得角度变成我们的磨刀石。
语言还算通畅，连接词不要太死板了。

kkytUID: 188814

谢谢＂乒乓球爱上九月＂了，偶是受宠若惊啊，看过imong的得寸进尺，一直不明白什么意思，今天有点明白了．思考ing