ISSUE61 好几天没写了 大家帮忙指教一下 谢谢

chrisyUID: 160364

好几天没写了 大家指正谢谢
61. "High-profile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."

高级别的奖项如诺贝尔奖实际上对社会是有害的，因为这些奖项暗示只有极少数人才有资格获得如此殊荣。

极少人才能达到的过高的目标，其对社会大多数人的激励效果不佳


Great academic achievements are not only concerned by scholars, but also attract more and more social attention. Whether high-profile awards such as the Noble Prize are actually damaging to society as the speaker mentioned, for the reason that they suggest only a few people deserve such recognition is a interesting topic to be discussed. Considering actual social attitudes about such awards and the positive influence of it to our society, I disagree the speaker's assertion to a large extent.

To begin with, in the society which uphold contribution and achievement of individuals to the public, it is necessary to set up some singificant awards in order to praise such excellent people. There is no evidence that high-profile awards such as Noble Prize can be damaging to society. It is true that one a few people can get such highest awards in all social fields, and that is just the meaning of such prizes.  It is the appreciation and praise of our whole society to the heroes and heroines. If any people in our society can easily get such awards, it will lose its significance. As the most important academic awardsm once a year, Noble Prize is a popular topic in contemporary society. Common people respect the people who win Noble Prize and regard them as academic heroes and heroines in our times. There are seldom complain or dissatisfaction about such awards. The speaker's statement seems  unfounded and unnecessary.

Moreover, the speaker totally neglects the positive influence of the high-profile awards on the advancement of society. The aim of such awards to promote and  people who make great contribution to our society. It does not means scientists only work for winning a prize, but to some extent it really stimulates the advancement in academic fields even the whole society. The winner of Noble Prize are set up as examples and their life stories are talked and praised everywhere.
They give inidivduals even the whole society the power to pursue and endeavor. Great objective is the power and orientation of endeavor for people. We often hear little kids sweared to win the Noble Prize after they heard the story of the winners.
Such beliefs often lead them to get over difficulties adn achieve great success. Such conception will benefits our society a lot in the long run.

However, The emphasis of great contribution to society does not mean that we neglect the effects of common people. we should also underscore the significance of common social work as well as great contributions which deserve high-profile awards. As an integrate  Common people is indispensable as welll as scientists for the development of society. Without the endeavor of countless people, academic achievements cannot take effect in the process of production, and cannot turn to productivity eventually. Moreover, any kind of jobs is equal and we should respect everyone's labor. Someone once said that the person who works is most beautiful. Our society appreciation and praise such conception as well.

To sum up, on contrary to what the speaker's statement, high-profile awards such as the Noble Prize have more positive influence rather than destroy to our society.  We should advocate and praise people who make great contribution to society. Meanwhile, it is also important for us to reallize the significance of common people's endeavor in their daily work positions. They all make effects to the prosperity and development of society.

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谈不上指教,晚上看以下,莫急

chrisyUID: 160364

谢谢楼上:)

kkytUID: 188814

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61. "High-profile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."

高级别的奖项如诺贝尔奖实际上对社会是有害的，因为这些奖项暗示只有极少数人才有资格获得如此殊荣。

极少人才能达到的过高的目标，其对社会大多数人的激励效果不佳


Great academic achievements are not only concerned by scholars, but also attract more and more social attention. Whether high-profile awards such as the Noble Prize are actually damaging to society as the speaker mentioned, for the reason that they suggest only a few people deserve such recognition is aan interesting topic to be discussed. Considering actual social attitudes about such awards and the positive influence of it their to our society, I disagreewith the speaker's assertion to a large extent.你的观点是大正小负，还是完全反对，要是大正小负在开头加点让步会更清楚

To begin with, in the society which uphold contribution and achievement of individuals to the public, it is necessary to set up some singificant significant, 这种错不应该啊awards in order to praise such excellent people. There is no evidence that high-profile awards such as Noble Prize can be damaging to society. 这么绝对？象生物技术，核技术方面的，It is true that one a few people can get such highest awards in all social fields, and that is just the meaning of such prizes. It is the appreciation and praise of our whole society to the heroes and heroines. If any people in our society can easily get such awards, it will lose its significance. As the most important academic awardsm？ once a year, Noble Prize is a popular topic in contemporary society. Common people respect the people who win Noble Prize and regard them as academic heroes and heroines in our times. There are seldom complain or dissatisfaction about such awards. The speaker's statement seems unfounded and unnecessary. 感觉完全说理，而且层次不清楚，好象想起一句写一句的感觉，没有很好支持论证你的ts, 可以举例啊 高投入高回报么，科学家为科学工作呕心沥血，为人类进步作出了巨大贡献，他们理应的到荣誉与奖赏。举一个科学家就能说明问题。

Moreover, the speaker totally neglects the positive influence of the high-profile awards on the advancement of society. The aim of such awards to promote and people who make great contribution to our society.这句没谓语啊It does not means scientists only work for winning a prize, but to some extent it really stimulates the advancement in academic fields even the whole society. The winner winnersof Noble Prize are set up as examples and their life stories are talked and praised everywhere. They give inidivdualsindividuals even the whole society the power to pursue and endeavor. Great objective is the power and orientation of endeavor for people. We often hear little kids swearedswore  to win the Noble Prize after they heard the story of the winners. Such beliefs often lead them to get over difficulties and achieve great success. Such conception will benefits benefit our society a lot in the long run. 应该举个例子

However, The emphasis of great contribution to society does not mean that we neglect the effects of common people. we should also underscore the significance of common social work as well as great contributions which deserve high-profile awards. As an integrate Common people is indispensable as welll as scientists for the development of society. Without the endeavor of countless people, academic achievements cannot take effect in the process of production, and cannot turn to productivity eventually. Moreover, any kind of jobs is equal and we should respect everyone's labor. Someone once said that the person who works is most beautiful. Our society appreciation and praise such conception as well. 这段跟主题有关么？偶觉的你既然是让步就应该讲一下奖赏的缺点，如好多的体育明星获的奖励太多

To sum up, on contrary to what the speaker's statement, high-profile awards such as the Noble Prize have more positive influence rather than destroy to our society. We should advocate and praise people who make great contribution to society. Meanwhile, it is also important for us to reallize realize the significance of common people's endeavor in their daily work positions. They all make effects to the prosperity and development of society.

你这篇是限时写的吧，偶觉的这篇问题不少（一家之言），如有不对敬请原谅

chrisyUID: 160364

别这么说 楼上辛苦给我修改已经很感激了:)
是限时写的 但老实说不限时也好不到哪去

写这篇最大的问题就是没有例子
说理和逻辑分析 说白了就是车轱辘话是我的强项 一想例子就头脑空白
十分头疼 真是想求助大家

而B3楼上提出的疑问我是这么想的 其实题目的担忧也并不是没有道理的 对最卓越成就的社会崇拜很有可能导致忽视普通人的社会贡献 这就是我以为的高端奖励的弊病 所以想强调一下普通社会工作的重要性

这篇写的的确不是很好 好好修改
谢谢楼上指点:)