Issue171 个人与社会 还有18天就考了，帮忙看看吧，谢谢！

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Issue171

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People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the public good.

――提纲――
1、        个人对兴趣的追求能够导致巨大的成功
2、        个人的成功促进了整个社会的进步
3、        在一些特殊时期，勇于承担责任的个人往往能获得巨大的成功。

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Which kind of people is more likely to benefit the world, those who pursue their own intellectual interests or the ones trying to act for the public good? The speaker's answer is the former. I essentially agree with the speaker that the former ones make great contributions to the society in various aspects. However, in my point of view, the latter ones are needed sometimes to the society and can also achieve their goals of better serving the public.

First of all, it is the personal interests that often lead to greatest individual success. In the history of science, for instance, many scientists succeeded in their fields by purely pursing their own intellectual interests. Einstein, the greatest physicist in 20th century, started his quest to science after he saw the compass for the first time. The curiosity and craving for knowledge motivated him to devote all his life to physics. No one can deny that the significant contribution about Relativity is partly related to his personal interests. Similarly, the fact that Bill Gates built the empire of software Microsoft is largely because of his passion and enthusiasm for computer and business. History and contemporary society are replete of these examples in almost every field.

Second of all, in a democratic society an individual should have the freedom to make the choices concerning his career and future according to his favorite. Although some intellectual inquiries did not immediately address current social problems, the individual success together amounts to overall success of the society in the long term. The United States serves as a good example of individualism in which the personal achievements of members of the society foster the great prosperity of the whole national, making the US the most powerful country in contemporary world.  

However, when it comes to some situations such as economic crisis and war, people who take responsibility of the society usually make greatest contributions. US president Roosevelt is a case in point. In order to save American people in the Great Depression, Roosevelt tried all his best for the public: he reformed the free economic system and put the New Deal in practice. In the end, the reform successfully let America return to prosperity and the achievement Roosevelt made is remembered by American forever. Other US presidents, including Washington and Lincoln, are also heroes in the hearts of American, for they considerably benefited the whole nation at their time. In short, people putting the interests of the nation before their own interests would probably gain the help and support of others thus being easier to success.

For the ordinary people, to pursue a personal objective or to serve for the public good depends on the situation one lived. In the war when the national security is being threatened by the outside world, one should not stick to his personal interest but try one's best to the well-being of the whole society. On the other hand, in peacetime of a democracy, most of us do not have to be worried about political or social problems; we have the right to spend our time to what interest us.

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顶一下自己：）

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再UP，时间不多了，好心人帮帮忙吧！
万分感谢！

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看来我们会一天考试呀，加油！提点个人观点

1。making the US the most powerful country in contemporary world.这样写ETS好乐死了，不过感觉对我们china 和其他国家不太公平呀。赫赫
2。In short, people putting the interests of the nation before their own interests （这决不太规范，before用得不好，至少用各over吧，或者用动词overweight）would probably gain the help and support of others thus being easier to success.
3. most of us do not have to be worried about political or social problems(这样写不太好吧，感觉我们不够关心国家)
4 重要的是：按你现在的写法看来，b3好像不是很切题。建议的改进：通过看你的提纲，你好象准备把b2 和b3联系起来，至少有个弱的因果关系，即个人兴趣-----成功-----社会进步。如果是这样的话，就应该注意把他们更好的联系起来，考虑用过渡段，或过渡句，然后最好能把其中的例子也联系起来。比如：爱因斯坦个人兴趣-----相对论------如何推动社会了。（这个想法不够成熟，你再考虑一下）
5。 b4中的例子我感觉不是很切题，比如：我可以想，罗斯福他推出新政，那是因为它是总统呀，他是“在其位谋其政”。应该举个例子：一个人他怀报国心----不断努力-----成功（对人类做出贡献）
以上都是个人观点。
共同进步！

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多谢！
自我感觉我的论证总是不大到位，意见很中肯，我会努力改进的。
btw，你在北京考吗？