改过几篇了，自己也写一篇 Argument205 （写了快两个小时）

lunaticUID: 150745

The recommendation that installing intensity lighting is the most effective way to combat crime seems at first glance to be an obvious conclusion. After all, few criminals are willing to act in a bright place. However, is this measure the most effective way? Does the conclusion that installing such lighting throughout Amburg mask other (and potentially more significant) causes of crimes and declining neighborhoods?

   It is unwarranted to argue that high intensity lighting is apparently the most effective way to combat crime. Intensity lighting can not directly frighten criminals out of destroying public subjects. As we know, the criminals did not care the intensity light itself, but they are frightened of being observed by the police or residents. However, if the police can not bear responsibility for the security of the business district, or no residents pay attention to the vandalism, the declined number of vandalism could not be expected. Therefore, only when most people keep a high awareness of the public security is it likely that the high intensity lighting would turn out to be an most effective way to combat crime.

    In addition, the arguer fails to consider several other relevant factors that may influence rate of vandalism. For instance, since the city undergoes a depression of economy and many people lose their jobs, they choose vandalism for their complaining about the society. What's more, it is not understandable the fact that police patrols on bicycles have no effect on the rate of vandalism. We have every reason to believe that the police did not take full responsibility for their work. Furthermore, if the police take the responsibility of security of the business district and patrol for 24 hours a day, are the criminals brave to adventure? Accordingly, weather the city installs intensity lighting could not be the most significant factor for controlling crimes at all.

   Finally, the arguer hints that the neighborhoods in the city are poor, but he fails to analyze the causes. Is it because people are unwilling to talk with their neighborhoods when they are fired because of the local economic depression, or because the city suffers from a serious influenza, or because there happens some serious crimes such as a serial blue murder or rape? Under these circumstances, even if Amburg succeeds in reducing the rate of vandalism through installing high intensity lighting, the general neighborhoods in the city would remain declining.

   The argument for high intensity lighting based on the good effect this measure have on Belleville could provide import method to reduce crimes. Before deciding to install such lighting, however, a more detailed and comprehensive analysis of the crime and neighborhoods is needed. After all, no evidence shows that Belleville and Amburg are similar in every aspect.

Yan JinhuaUID: 142182

你写的这个好长啊  多少字  考试的 时候打不完吧

kimi1984UID: 195922

帮贴题目

205The following appeared in a recommendation from the president of Amburg's Chamber of Commerce.
"Last October the city of Belleville installed high intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined almost immediately. The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on bicycles in its business district but the rate of vandalism there remains constant. Since high intensity lighting is apparently the most effective way to combat crime, we should install such lighting throughout Amburg. By reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods in our city."

kimi1984UID: 195922

总的来说写的很不错，分析得很有条理，我已经都记下来了。
police patrols on bicycles in its business district but the rate of vandalism there remains constant.
个人意见这个可以拿出来作单独一段的攻击，比如保持恒定不代表没用
而装灯放在另外一段
最后一段总结得很好
继续努力！！字数不是关键，攻击的力度比较重要

lunaticUID: 150745

一共450字，努努力应该打的完
谢谢kimi1984帮我贴题目，昨晚着急走就忘了：）
这道题目确实有很多驳斥点，依照个人喜好一定可以写出侧重点不一样的文章