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4The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.

"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."
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This argument wants to persuade us choose Adams when selling homes. However, it is not substantially rooted and persuasively presented. There are several questions to be answered, before we finally believe "Adams is superior".

First of all, the number of real estate agents isn't an indispensable measurement for the real estate firms' quality. Although some firms have fewer estate agents, their service may be more considerate and efficient. And small firms can react to the market more quickly. So the author should give us some information about the professional performance of employees from Adams Realty and Fithch Realty. This information must be more useful for us to choose.

Secondly, the averaged home sales price couldn't tell anything. The price depends on the condition of the home. If Adams sold a wonderful house at a price higher than the price that Fitch got when selling a normal department, this couldn't demonstrate the ability of Adams, because it’s the home’s condition that make the price different rather than Adams increase the value to them. What we want to know is whether this real estate could sell our home at a price higher than we expected.

The last reason to choose Adams is it could sell house quickly, but his proof is not cogent. It’s undoubtedly that the speed will be much faster nowadays, because these years technology develops prominently. But we are interested in which one is quicker, Adams or Fitch? This is what we can base our decision on.

In summary, this argument provides approximately three reasons advising us to choose Adams. However, all of them couldn't stand reasoning, and the author should provide us with more convincing information.

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Argument4: 358 words   30 minutes
The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
'Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.'

In the statement, the speaker suggests that people should better choose Adams to sell their homes as it can sell the house more quickly and at a high price. In order to prove the conclusion , the speaker used some figures and facts like own experience, but thorough examination reveals that the conclusion is unconvincing for several reasons.

In the first place, the speaker concludes  that the Adams is superior than the Fitch on a fact that the A has 40 real estate while the F has only 25 including some part workers. This fact may has some meaning but it can not prove the A is better. This fact can only give us the quantity but not quality. Maybe the 40 real estates of A are all very small and the employers are not very enthusiastic while the F's statement is on the contrary. The number of the agents is not an effective evidence to  support the conclusion.

In the second place, the speaker also cites some data which is not sufficient to support the conclusion. Though the A's revenue are much greater than the F's, it does not warrant the customers can benefit from this ,it is probable that the A always receive more commission  from the client. Also, the average price can not be the strong evidence. The A's Price is high , it may because that the houses sold by A are almost valuable  and new while the F's houses may be old and poor .Without ruling out such possibilities , the speaker fails to convince that the A can sell the house at a high price than the F.

In addition ,the speaker want to demonstrate that the A's speed of selling houses is more quickly than the F's, Using the speaker's own experience ten years ago and one month ago. However, the speaker fails to prove that the situations during these years are not changing. Ten years ago, many factors may influence  the speed of selling , like economic conditions, but now with the internet the information can be distributed more faster and quickly , may be all real estates can sell the house quickly including the F.  Moreover, the speaker's experience is not representitive enough , we can not known the other clients' situations to make a judge.

In sum, the speaker's suggestion is not convincing as it stands , based on some problematic reasoning and insufficient figures. To better demonstrate the conclusion, the speaker should provide more evidence about the kinds of houses the two have sold, and the overall sell speed of these estates with more economic information..



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写得不错，有一点小问题。
In the statement, the speaker suggests that people should better choose Adams to sell their homes as it can sell the house more quickly and at a high price. In order to prove the conclusion , the speaker used some figures and facts like own experience,one more will be better but thorough examination reveals that the conclusion is unconvincing for several reasons.

In the first place, the speaker concludes that the Adams is superior than the Fitch on a fact that the A has 40 real estate while the F has only 25 including some part workers.part-time This fact may has some meaning but it can not prove the A is better. This fact can only give us the quantity but not quality. Maybe the 40 real estates real estate agents 房地产经纪人 of A are all very small and the employers are not very enthusiastic while the F's statement is on the contrary. The number of the agents is not an effective evidence to support the conclusion.

In the second place, the speaker also cites some data which is not sufficient to support the conclusion. Though the A's revenue are was much greater than the F's, it does not warrant the customers can benefit from this ,it is probable that the A always receive more commission from the client. Also, the average price can not be the strong evidence. The A's Price is high , it may because that the houses sold by A are almost valuable and new while the F's houses may be old and poor .Without ruling out such possibilities , the speaker fails to convince that the A can sell the house at a high price than the F.

In addition ,the speaker want to demonstrate that the A's speed of selling houses is more quickly than the F's, Using the speaker's own experience ten years ago and one month ago. However, the speaker fails to prove that the situations during these years are not changing. Ten years ago, many factors may influence the speed of selling , like economic conditions, but now with the internet the information can be distributed more faster and quickly , may be all real estates can sell the house quickly including the F. Moreover, the speaker's experience is not representitive enough , we can not known the other clients' situations to make a judge.

In sum, the speaker's suggestion is not convincing as it stands , based on some problematic reasoning and insufficient figures. To better demonstrate the conclusion, the speaker should provide more evidence about the kinds of houses the two have sold, and the overall sell speed of these estates with more economic information??..