Issue144,郁闷了一天，有提纲帮忙看看，必回，谢谢。

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144."It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲：
Lasting value 究竟由谁来评价
如果不是艺术家自己来评的话，那么critic在其中发挥了很大的作用
作用包括使广大外行的民众能够懂得艺术作品所表达的东西
并在懂得其含义的同时更加珍惜作品使其能够lasting下去成为社会的value
应该说artist的工作的成功和在价值上的体现有时候相当程度上依靠critic

When it comes to the question who, the artist or the critic, gives society something of lasting value, it is crucial to answer how the lasting value is estimated and who does it. Few artists would evaluate their own art works to attract the interest of audiences and therefore to be awarded any prize. On the other hand, so far as the artist gives something out to society, it is always the common people, but not the artist himself, decide whether it would be something of lasting value or not. In his lifetime, Van Gogh created so many paintings that have no difference with those when he was dead. However, only one painting was sold out when he was alive while they were sold in such a high price when he was dead. It is vital that he was regarded and respected as an outstanding master of post-impressionism.

It is possible that Van Gogh did any praise of his working, and even he did so, it was still up to the public to determine. The critics after Van Gogh played a very important part to evaluate him highly and to make people to pay attention to him and like his paintings. It is because that when something new and wonderful but strange appears, common people who are not so familiar as the critics with a particular artist and his/her works might have certain insights about those works that the layperson would not understand deeply. A critic is a person who evaluates works of arts, such as novels, films, music, painting and so on to help the public understand and interpret art. On the base of their explanations and interpretations, we, common people would be able to appreciate an art work, and comprehend it correctly and profoundly.

An artist or his /her family is not who passed the works and the value contained in those from generation to generation. Without the appreciation and support of the public, artists’ genius would doubtlessly be kept out of the vision of the world, and the value they created would vanish. Critics’ work makes people know more about the art works and treasure them. To this extent, it is not artist but critic contributes more to the lasting of the value of the art works.

There is no reason to belittle the contribution of critics, although they really do not create any art work, they help us determine which art is worth our time and attention and recognize the real great works. Their criticism and interpretation about the creations of artists give people access to understand them better and then would treasure them well.

On the other hand, a critic could provide feedback for artists; and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work. It is undeniable that an artist can not evaluate his work on the objective viewpoint. A critic make him able to hear other voices of his work and to revise something if need.

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我先占上了，晚些时候改完给你发上来！！

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touchparadiseUID: 197128

刚给你的argument改了一下，看看吧：）

alinazhUID: 187151

144."It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲：
Lasting value 究竟由谁来评价
如果不是艺术家自己来评的话，那么critic在其中发挥了很大的作用
作用包括使广大外行的民众能够懂得艺术作品所表达的东西
并在懂得其含义的同时更加珍惜作品使其能够lasting下去成为社会的value
应该说artist的工作的成功和在价值上的体现有时候相当程度上依靠critic
中文题刚写的不错，接下来看看英文把

When it comes to the question who, the artist or the critic, gives society something of lasting value, it is crucial to answer how the lasting value is estimated and who does it. Few artists would evaluate their own art works to attract the interest of audiences and therefore to be awarded any prize. On the other hand, so far as the artist gives something out to society, it is always the common people, but not the artist himself, decide whether it would be something of lasting value or not. In his lifetime, Van Gogh created so many paintings that have no difference with those when he was dead. However, only one painting was sold out when he was alive while they were sold in such a high price when he was dead. It is vital that he was regarded and respected as an outstanding master of post-impressionism. 你的主题句在那，有吗？你的第一段写的有点罗嗦哟

It is possible that Van Gogh did any praise of his working, and even he did so, it was still up to the public to determine. The critics after Van Gogh played a very important part （role）to evaluate him highly and to make people to pay attention to him and like his paintings(and 用的太多了吧). It is because that when something new and wonderful but strange appears, common people who are not so familiar as the critics with a particular artist and his/her works might have certain insights about those works that the layperson would not understand deeply. A critic is a person who evaluates works of arts, such as novels, films, music, painting and so on to help the public understand and interpret art. On the base of their explanations and interpretations, we, common people would be able to appreciate an art work, and comprehend it correctly and profoundly.

An artist or his /her family is not who passed the works and the value contained in those from generation to generation. Without the appreciation and support of the public, artists’ genius would doubtlessly be kept out of the vision of the world, and the value they created would vanish. Critics’ work makes people know more about the art works and treasure them. To this extent, it is not artist but critic contributes more to the lasting of the value of the art works.

There is no reason to belittle the contribution of critics, although they really do not create any art work, they help us determine which art is worth（of） our time and attention and recognize the real great works. Their criticism and interpretation about the creations of artists give people access to understand them better and then would treasure them well.

On the other hand, a critic could provide feedback for artists; and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work. It is undeniable that an artist can not evaluate his work on the objective viewpoint. A critic make him able to hear other voices of his work and to revise something if need.
我觉得你的整篇文章的观点表达的并不是很突出，还有就是没断的ts 业不是很突出。虽然很有新意，但是我觉得还是应该在开头有一个统观全局的句子，在结尾有一个清晰的收尾，这样能让自己的文章更清晰又逻辑感。还有就是你的and 用的太多了，这样有时使你的and的连接作用让读文章的人有点混乱。


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