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发表于 2005-3-1 19:54:12 |只看该作者

issue208通过观察个人行为了解社会(限时求给分)(机井高频题)

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208  "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
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It is well believed that people tend to express their ideas and attitudes in the way they look, dress and even act, which can be observed by people to identify them then. Well, I agree with the speaker in this contention that people's means of dressing, acting have the relation with their inherent ideas or even values. However, to widen the ground that the behavior and appearance of its people one can tell significantly much about a society's ideas and values may mislead the actual social atmospheres.

Admittedly, we people have the natural impulse to show their inner mental world in some expressional ways such as behaviors and appearances to the society, to be identified and revered. In some organization, the members like to wear the distinctive clothing with common patterns to identify themselves and tell the public that they are belonging to some certain communities. The identified feeling can assure an individual's mental needs to be recognized and revered by others, and as well as express their attitudes to others. Take an example, the environmental supporters may wear a T-shirt with some special words or patterns, to express their environmental ideas and call up other's sense of environmental dealings. That is the way people show their personal expressions and wish to be identified and revered, even call up the other's common sense thereby.

However, though it is with the natural impetus that people tend to express their minds in some showing ways, sometimes the behaviors or dresses may have nothing to do with one's inner ideas. Individuals are also easy to change their looking temporally. For example, we sometimes just wear some T-shirts for its good looking simply, and do not mention what the patterns it means. One wear a T-shirt with a rock star head of course cannot be a rock fan just for its popular means. Or we sometimes wear sports shoes just for its convenient feelings, in no way it means that we are sports fan. That means, in a lot of cases we just wear something or dong some affairs completely for fun, not for an expressional purpose.

Furthermore, in the trend of globalization, the people in different society even though with distinctive ideas or national values and attitudes, still tend to be no significant different in their looking ways. At present, as business are doing irrespective geographical respects, we can find clothing shops with a same brand in China, Canada, the USA, even other places, as well as the people wearing the same clothes there. However, it is by no means that they have the same ideas and attitudes towards a national affairs as they still have their own scopes and perspectives whatever they wear. Besides that, any observer cannot have a perfect understanding with his or her limited observing abilities and limited samples,  it tend to mislead or not to wrongly reflect an actual atmosphere of a society with some incomplete observations of its members, as they are not representative fairly.

In sum, it is the human nature that individuals have the wish to express their ideas and attitudes in some certain ways, such as some behaviors or appearances, which can be identified and then reveal their minds. However, as any observer have the limited observation and understanding, as well as people sometimes do not show their ideas with the looking, a observation of some member’s wearing or doings may not represent the true atmosphere of a society fairly. Since that, we should not charge and value a social atmosphere so easily, and it would be better to consider other further aspects to tell a society's ideas and values.

本人3月14日考, 哈尔滨:)

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发表于 2005-3-1 20:03:32 |只看该作者
谨求给分 谢!
能有4分吗?

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发表于 2005-3-1 20:36:04 |只看该作者
心里没底
有人能给个分好吗
非常感谢

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发表于 2005-3-3 09:14:03 |只看该作者
顶一下

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发表于 2005-3-3 10:31:02 |只看该作者

写得还可以

感觉文章语言大体通顺,但是论述上还需要在加强一些

文章第一段说同意作者意见,还说要扩展一下,但后面仅就服装这一项内容做了论述,而未就语言、行为、礼仪等方方面面做论述,至少例子上可以在丰富一些。

然后第二段从正面肯定了作者的观点,第三段中性的论述了一下,第四段又说受全球统一化的影响,所以对作者的观点进行了反驳,然而论述部分给人的感觉不是太有力。正面论述的部分应在多写一些,建议第三段拿掉,换成从其他方面正面肯定论述作者的观点。

文章整体感觉挺通顺的,有些句子结构在整理一下,比如第一段末尾那句。4分不太敢肯定,但应该有了吧。

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