issue232 虚心求拍

墨斗鱼UID: 177024

"The purpose of education should be to create an academic environment that is separate from the outside world. This kind of environment is ideal because it allows students to focus on important ideas without being held back by practical concerns."
教育的目的应该是要创造出一个隔离于外界的学术环境。这样的环境最理想因为这样可以使学生们不受功利的干扰而专注于重要的理念。


What should student pay more attention to, academic ideas or practical ability? The speaker prefer the former, because important academic ideas are held back by practical concerns. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of education is not only to bring academic ideas to students, but also to teach the student how to deal with practical problems. Education separated form outside world is not comprehensive education.

Firstly, although academic ideas play an important role in education, practical train can not be ignored, especially in today's society filled with technology change and fierce competition. Great part of students will devote to various kinds of work for society's construction. They have to confront many practical problems which are so complex that knowledge only from books will not enough for solving them, or solving them in limitation of time. Take business field for example, in many situation, people should make decision in short time, chance and competition will not wait for your slow think, so profit belong to experienced person. Moreover, in job market, the employment now pay more and more attention to applicant who have practical ability, because of elimination on cost of training tenderfoots, including waste of time and money. Therefore, job-oriented students who have practical experience will be more predominance than other. The responsibility of education to cultivate the real constructer should not be neglected.

In addition, practical concerns and knowledge from outside world may provide positive effect on learning academic ideas. On the one hand, practical concern motivate us to relate our ideas to application, and deepen us cognition of academic ideas. Such as, experiment in physical lab make us comprehend the Newton's theory, painting by ourselves make us know the basic principle of using color and so forth. On another hand, some times outside world can bring about inspiration to our academic creation. For example, Aristotal, a famous physical scientist, once been forced to test if king's corona was fake, he thought again and again but no any way. One day when he went to bath tub, he found answer form overflowing water, and then an important physical thorey has been founded, even have great impact on shipbuilding field. Yes, life gives him inspiration rather than immersing into academic ideas. So, concerning on outside world may broad our knowledge, deepen our thought, and bring inspiration to us.

In conclusion, practical concerns neither run contrary to the purpose of education, nor holding back the important academic ideas. As a crucial part of education and necessary preparation for competition, practical ability should not be inhibited but should be advocated.

fengli408UID: 195844

What should student(students) pay more attention to, academic ideas or practical ability? The speaker prefer (prefers) the former, because(for) important academic ideas(academic ideas of great importance) are held back(considerably inhibited) by practical concerns. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of education is not only to bring academic ideas to students, but also to teach(indoctrinate) the student(students) (the ability about )how to deal with practical problems(when they suffer from them). Education, (if)(可作为插入语) separated form outside world， is not comprehensive education.

Firstly（To begin with）, although academic ideas play an important role in education, practical train can not be ignored, especially in today's (complicated)society filled with (swiftly)technology change and fierce competition. (A) great part of students will devote to various (a wide variety of ) work for society's construction. They have to (feel obliged to) confront many (a great number of ) practical problems which are(which are 可以去掉) so complex that knowledge only from books will not enough (is far from being enough to solve )for solving them, or solving them in limitation(or free them from the limitation) of time. Take (the sphere of business) business field for example, in many situation (situations), people should (are supposed to ) make decision in short time, chance and competition will not wait for your slow think(for the slow thinkers’ chances to acquire opportunity are remote), and profit belong to(are in the possession of ) the experienced person. Moreover, in job market, the employment now pay more and more attention (increasingly take seriously) to applicant who have(possess) practical ability, because of elimination on cost of training tenderfoots, including (a) waste of time and money. Therefore, job-oriented students who have practical experience will be more predominance than other. The responsibility of education to cultivate the real constructer should not be neglected.

In addition, practical concerns and knowledge from outside world may provide positive effect on learning (exert a positive effect upon) academic ideas. On the one hand, practical concern motivate us to relate our ideas to application, and deepen us cognition of academic ideas. Such as(such as 好像不能这样永吧), experiment in physical lab make(makes) us comprehend the Newton's theory, painting by ourselves make(makes) us know the basic principle of using color and so forth. On another hand, some times outside world can bring about inspiration to our academic creation. For example, Aristotal, a famous physical scientist, once been forced to test if king's corona was fake, he thought again and again but no any way. One day when he went to bath tub, he found answer form overflowing water, and then an important physical thorey has been founded, even have great impact on shipbuilding field. Yes, life gives him inspiration rather than immersing into academic ideas. So, concerning on outside world may broad our knowledge, deepen our thought, and bring inspiration to us.

In conclusion, practical concerns neither run contrary to the purpose of education, nor holding back（impeding） the important academic ideas. As a crucial part of education and necessary preparation for competition, practical ability should not be inhibited but should be advocated. (practical ability should be advocated rather than be inhibited)
搂主好多小的语法错误啊，要多注意啊

ponponUID: 181304

What should student pay more attention to, academic ideas or practical ability? The speaker prefer the former, because important academic ideas are held back by practical concerns. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of education is not only to bring academic ideas to students, but also to teach the student how to deal with practical problems. Education separated form outside world is not comprehensive education.[能很好的点出自己的论点]

[Firstly],[找几个漂亮的连接词to being with] although academic ideas play an important role in education, practical train can not be ignored, especially in today's society filled with technology change and fierce competition. Great part of students will devote to various kinds of work for society's construction. They have to confront many practical problems which are so complex that knowledge only [come] from books will not enough for solving them, or solving them in limitation of time. Take business field for example, in many situation, people should make decision in short time, chance and competition [will not wait for your slow think] , so profit [belong]s to experienced person. Moreover, in job market, the [employment]employers now pay more and more attention to applicant who have practical ability, because of elimination on cost of training tenderfoots, including waste of time and money. Therefore, job-oriented students who have practical experience will be more predominance than other. The responsibility of education to cultivate the real constructer should not be neglected.

In addition, practical concerns and knowledge from outside world may provide positive effect on learning academic ideas. On the one hand, practical concern motivate us to relate our ideas to application, and deepen us cognition of academic ideas. Such as, experiment in physical lab make us comprehend the Newton's theory, painting by ourselves make us know the basic principle of using color and so forth. On another hand, some times outside world can bring about inspiration to our academic creation. For example, Aristotal, a famous physical scientist, once been forced to test if king's corona was fake, he thought again and again but no any way. One day when he went to bath tub, he found answer form overflowing water, and then an important physical [thorey] has been [founded]found, even have great impact on shipbuilding field. Yes, life gives him inspiration rather than immersing into academic ideas. So, concerning on outside world may broad our knowledge, deepen our thought, and bring inspiration to us.

In conclusion, practical concerns neither run contrary to the purpose of education, nor holding back the important academic ideas. As a crucial part of education and necessary preparation for competition, practical ability should not be inhibited but should be advocated.
两个主题段段说得很好，可以适当加上一段说明一下教育的目的在创造学术环境方面也很重要，让人们更好的学习知识，形成三段论

ponponUID: 181304

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