argument 24 超时10分钟~~~~!!!不怕拍死

向日葵的孩子UID: 162587

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The following appeared in a memo from the president of Viva-Tech, a manufacturer of high-tech medical equipment.
'In order to reduce costs, we should close some of our existing small assembly plants and build a large central plant. Grandview would be an ideal location for this new plant. First, of the locations that we have considered, Grandview has the largest adult population, so that we will be able to staff our plant quickly and easily. Second, since the average wage earned by workers in Grandview is less than that in the other locations, we should be able to keep production costs low. Last, as an inducement for us to build there, Grandview's town council has offered to allow us to operate for the first three years without paying city taxes.

In this argument, the president of Viva-Tech reaches a conclusion that they should close their small plants and build a new central one in Grandview. The reasons cited are that labor force is abundant in Grandview, and that the average wage earned by workers there is minimal among all the locations they have considered. In addition, the president also mentions that they are allowed to operate for first three years without paying city taxes. However, this argument defies simple logic and suffers from several vital fallacies.

Firstly, the president falsely equates the adult population in Grandview with the potential and even necessary workers in Viva-Tech. In fact, it is highly possible that work force there are mainly less educated people who cannot competent with the operation work in that company, or that they merely do not satisfy the work condition in Viva-Tech. Without these considerations above, the president, nevertheless, might not convince us that they will be able to staff their plant quickly and easily.

Secondly, the author assumes that they would keep production costs low since the average wage earned by workers in Grand view is less that that in the other locations. This assumption is unconvincing by the following two reasons: first, the "low average wage" is a mere vague data which cannot indicate the wage given to the workers in the field of manufacturing is low; second, even if the wage is really low in the Grandview, the author might not inform us that the production costs is also in a low level. Common sense tells us that production bears diverse array of factors by involving the price of raw materials, transportation fee and so forth.

Thirdly, even though city taxes would be ruled out in the first three years by the Grandview's town council, it does not mean that they would obtain a huge boon in the long run. Perhaps, the city taxes imposed on that plant might be escalated to a high level after the first three years. With no regard to this probable possibility, the author serves as an ill-considered leader of a large company.

In sum, the argument is not well reasoned and committed vital logical flaw. To better assess the conclusion, the author must make further investigation and comprehensive thought about this issue before the final conclusion and ultimate action.

向日葵的孩子UID: 162587

谢谢你!
我一直不知道:开头段写证据时是不是要写就必须写全(这样就比较多了),要不然就别写只笼统的说说?大家觉得哪种好?

wicwawaUID: 199056

In this argument, the president of Viva-Tech reaches a conclusion that they should close their small plants and build a new central one in Grandview. The reasons cited are that labor force is abundant in Grandview, and that the average wage earned by workers there is minimal among all the locations they have considered. In addition, the president also mentions that they are allowed to operate for first three years without paying city taxes. However, this argument defies simple logic and suffers from several vital fallacies.（自己重述的很好，但太长了，实战是不现实而且考官对首段不会太在意）

Firstly, the president falsely equates the adult population in Grandview with the potential and even necessary workers in Viva-Tech. In fact, it is highly possible that work force there（删 there） are mainly less educated people who cannot competent with the operation work in that company, or that they merely do not satisfy the work condition in Viva-Tech. Without these considerations above, the president, nevertheless, might not convince us that they will be able to staff their plant quickly and easily.(个人觉得论诉的不够充分，large population不等于they are all unemployed,而且topic sentence后直接写possibility不提倡)

Secondly, the author assumes that they would keep production costs low since the average wage earned by workers in Grand view is less that that（删 that） in the other locations. This assumption is unconvincing by the following two reasons: first, the "low average wage" is a mere vague data which cannot indicate the wage given to the workers in the field of manufacturing is low; second, even if the wage is really low in the Grandview, the author might not inform us that the production costs is also in a low level. Common sense tells us that production (最好讲明白是cost由多种因素影响，说production有点绕弯子，怕老美反应不过来)bears diverse array(arrays) of factors by(such as) involving the price of raw materials, transportation fee and so forth.

Thirdly, even though city taxes would be ruled out in the first three years by the Grandview's town council, it does not mean that they would obtain a huge boon in the long run. Perhaps, the city taxes imposed on that plant might be escalated（拼错了？在下不知道什么意思） to a high level after the first three years. With no regard to this probable possibility, the author serves as an ill-considered leader of a large company. （感觉这段太单薄了）

In sum, the argument is not well reasoned and committed vital logical flaw. To better assess the conclusion, the author must make further investigation and comprehensive thought about this issue before the final conclusion and ultimate action.

总的来说，论述的三点都比较清楚，但论述的不透彻，
最后很明显没时间写的
这篇文章明显的错误很多，我觉得宁可结尾一句话也要尽量找全
建议就写两段：
1 没证据表明close some of our existing small assembly plants and build a large central plant可以reduce cost
2even 有necessity to build large plant, fails to convince that Grandview 是suitable location  :然后就分层找错吧