Issue53 大学收费的 [color=#ff0064]欢迎砖头，留链接必回拍:)

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Issue53 College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government.

观点：不该free，教育是特殊产业
B1 绝对free导致不好好学 eg.德国
B2 政府全权出资导致政府控制 eg.文化大革命后的中国
B3 交钱是好好学的动力 eg.如下
结尾：让步和总结

－－正文－－
Wadding into the 21cn, as the standard of education is elevated to a higher level, colleges play a larger part in civil education. That is why the financial source of education came into the public discussion. Firstly let us take an introspection into the education's nature. As it is broadly considered, education is a special industry, consisted of cost and revenue, the system had invest education with great vigor in the past. When ever the merchandise in this realm turned free, the discipline of market economy will be broke, and thus cause new problems both on campus and in society.

On the one hand, charge urges benign competition. Students feel some pressure under the system of fee-required education, and appropriate pressure always lead to perspiration. From that way, students will consider their learning behavior an investigation, which deserves their hard work and a good result. Take the former Germany for counterexample, the government freed college education in order to encourage citizens to take higher education wholeheartedly, which means, with undivided attention. In consequence, the graduate rate had felt at that time, most students spent at least one year or two more on campus. At the beginning, achievements were thought to be made, for it was generally considered that the college students paid more enthusiasm into their study. But right after some educational researchers took an insightful look into these students’ life, the truth was discovered: college students there linger around on campus only to slow down their rate of study, and enjoyed recreational life with free cost.
从另一个角度来看，this will enhance college students’ survival ability in today’s competitive society.

On the other hand, who pays the bill is the boss. Along with the obligation of offering campus needs, the government also got the excuse to intervene college affairs, especially in the developing countries where institutional democracy hasn’t been established yet. The old China just after the \culture Revolution was the very instance we can use for instance. At that time, higher educational institutions were supported and by the Mao government, thus, also controlled by the government. All students must follow the country’s needs to “choose” their majors, leading to a great depression in students’ enthusiasm for study. After that, graduates haven’t got the chance to choose a favorite job, the only thing they could do was to follow the government’s indication, to accept any work assigned to them, which finally resulted in a lower working efficiency in their work place. The pitiful example was somewhat extreme, but in general, it revealed the truth that government will take more or less authority to take part in the determination of colleges if there higher educational institutions were totally supported by them. To avoid the retrogression of society, we should not let it happen again, at least in a few years at the cirrent stage of society.

After all, according to the general idea of psychology, students will pay more appreciation to their opportunity of studying with dollars paid. There came an explanatory story in ancient China: 有个人拜师学艺，老师每天收他很多钱，他巨刻苦因为知道valuable，后来学成老师把多钱如数退还，学生感激涕零。。gira忘了具体典故，有知道的拜托提示!+_+
这段和”on the one hand”有些重复，但没时间多想了。或者放在B1之后？

Admittedly, we know there are always students who reluctantly choose major confined to the area which they can afford, and what they really like is the one they unable to pay. The restriction of their choice limited their imagination and creativity, if they were paid by government, they will feel freer to have their own choice. However, the situation was improved by the scholarship and fellowship system in college, even loan would help when these possibilities happen. Education now is a mature project in society, tuition-required rather than totally free system fit the very point, we don’t need the Utopian college currently, things may require change but that would be discussed on the table of the far future generation.

欢迎砖头，留链接必回拍:)

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faint，刚刚辛辛苦苦改好两篇一起发，结果论坛说30秒内只能发一贴。给你改的就全没了…… 等等，再改

arhooUID: 180462

Wadding into the 21cnWading, as the standard of education is elevated to a higher level, colleges play a larger part in civil education. That is why the financial source of education came into the public discussion. 这个过渡有点突兀，不如另起一段Firstly let us take an introspection into the education's nature. As it is broadly considered, education is a special industry, consisted consisting吧，主动态of cost and revenue, an industry怎么consists of cost and revenue？搭配不当吧。改成therefore costs and revenue should always be balanced in any discussio about it吧the system had invest education with great vigor in the past. When ever the merchandise in this realm turned free, the discipline of market economy will be broke, and thus cause new problems both on campus and in society.不解...说反了？

On the one hand, charge urges benign competition. Students feel some pressure under the system of fee-required education, and appropriate pressure always lead to perspiration. From that way, students will consider their learning behavior an investigationinvestment, which deserves their hard work and a good result. Take the former Germany for counterexample, the government freed college educationfree可以作动词表免费的意思吗？起码也要free...from吧 in order to encourage citizens to take higher education wholeheartedly, which means, with undivided attention. In consequence, the graduate rate had felt at that time, most students spent at least one year or two more on campus. At the beginning, achievements were thought to be made, for it was generally considered that the college students paid more enthusiasm into their study. But right after some educational researchers took an insightful look into these students’ life, the truth was discovered: college students there linger around on campus only to slow down their rate of study, and enjoyed recreational life with free cost.例证要惜墨如金啊，不是记叙文。可以试着在不损失要素的条件下缩写
从另一个角度来看，this will enhance college students’ survival ability in today’s competitive society.？？？

On the other hand, who pays the bill is the boss. Along with the obligation of offering campus needs, the government also got the excuse to intervene college affairs, especially in the developing countries where institutional democracy hasn’t been established yet. The old China just after the \culture Revolution was the very instance we can use for instance. At that time, higher educational institutions were supported and by the Mao government, thus, also controlled by the government. All students must follow the country’s needs to “choose” their majors, leading to a great depression in students’ enthusiasm for study. After that, graduates haven’t got the chance to choose a favorite job, the only thing they could do was to follow the government’s indication, to accept any work assigned to them, which finally resulted in a lower working efficiency in their work place. The pitiful example was somewhat extreme, but in general, it revealed the truth that government will take more or less authority to take part in the determination of colleges if there higher educational institutions were totally supported by them. To avoid the retrogression of society,前面例子的叙述中有明确支持这是一种regression吗？有点突兀 we should not let it happen again, at least in a few years at the cirrent stage of society.这个例子讲得好累，老外不了解，还要追根溯源地...另外刨根揪底这不是一个教育的financing的问题...要往政治扯开去的，太复杂

After all, according to the general idea of psychology, students will pay more appreciation to their opportunity of studying with dollars paid. There came an explanatory story in ancient China: 有个人拜师学艺，老师每天收他很多钱，他巨刻苦因为知道valuable，后来学成老师把多钱如数退还，学生感激涕零。。gira忘了具体典故，有知道的拜托提示!+_+
这段和”on the one hand”有些重复，但没时间多想了。或者放在B1之后？

Admittedly, we know there are always students who reluctantly choose major confined to the area which they can afford, and what they really like is the one they unable to pay. The restriction of their choice limited their imagination and creativity, if they were paid by government, they will feel freer to have their own choice. However, the situation was improved by the scholarship and fellowship system in college, even loan would help when these possibilities happen. Education now is a mature project in society, tuition-required rather than totally free system fit the very point, we don’t need the Utopian college currently, things may require change but that would be discussed on the table of the far future generation.
B!和B2是不是应该换位啊。B1和B3联系更紧密。不过在你的论证里面，B1和B3只不过是用了一正一反两方面的例子，而不是从一正一反两方面来论证，其实还是讲一回事。要改。
另外，开头谈到revenue VS cost。后面是否突出了这点？谈到这点，请注意。当比较revenue和cost的时候，要搞清楚revenue是谁得的，cost又是追加在谁头上的？两者一致吗？如果受体不一致，有可比性吗？相信很多人都会忽略这一点，包括不少经济学家

giraUID: 188010

Wadding into the 21cnWading, as the standard of education is elevated to a higher level, colleges play a larger part in civil education. That is why the financial source of education came into the public discussion. 这个过渡有点突兀，不如另起一段
u mean here?-->Firstly let us take an introspection into the education's nature. As it is broadly considered, education is a special industry, consisted consisting吧，主动态of cost and revenue, an industry怎么consists of cost and revenue？搭配不当吧那个，想说特殊产业也是由投入与受益构成，just financially..。改成therefore costs and revenue should always be balanced in any discussio about it吧the system had invest education with great vigor in the past. When ever the merchandise in this realm turned free, the discipline of market economy will be broke, and thus cause new problems both on campus and in society.不解...说反了？目有阿？

On the one hand, charge urges benign competition. Students feel some pressure under the system of fee-required education, and appropriate pressure always lead to perspiration. From that way, students will consider their learning behavior an investigationinvestment, which deserves their hard work and a good result. Take the former Germany for counterexample, the government freed college educationfree可以作动词表免费的意思吗？起码也要free...from吧 是啊free做v.没有免费的意思，汗 in order to encourage citizens to take higher education wholeheartedly, which means, with undivided attention. In consequence, the graduate rate had felt at that time, most students spent at least one year or two more on campus. At the beginning, achievements were thought to be made, for it was generally considered that the college students paid more enthusiasm into their study. But right after some educational researchers took an insightful look into these students’ life, the truth was discovered: college students there linger around on campus only to slow down their rate of study, and enjoyed recreational life with free cost.例证要惜墨如金啊，不是记叙文。可以试着在不损失要素的条件下缩写有纲领上的道理，想着知道写着就收不了了。。
从另一个角度来看，this will enhance college students’ survival ability in today’s competitive society.？？？厄，草稿。。

On the other hand, who pays the bill is the boss. Along with the obligation of offering campus needs, the government also got the excuse to intervene college affairs, especially in the developing countries where institutional democracy hasn’t been established yet. The old China just after the \culture Revolution was the very instance we can use for instance. At that time, higher educational institutions were supported and by the Mao government, thus, also controlled by the government. All students must follow the country’s needs to “choose” their majors, leading to a great depression in students’ enthusiasm for study. After that, graduates haven’t got the chance to choose a favorite job, the only thing they could do was to follow the government’s indication, to accept any work assigned to them, which finally resulted in a lower working efficiency in their work place. The pitiful example was somewhat extreme, but in general, it revealed the truth that government will take more or less authority to take part in the determination of colleges if there higher educational institutions were totally supported by them. To avoid the retrogression of society,前面例子的叙述中有明确支持这是一种regression吗？有点突兀 we should not let it happen again, at least in a few years at the cirrent stage of society.这个例子讲得好累，老外不了解，还要追根溯源地...另外刨根揪底这不是一个教育的financing的问题...要往政治扯开去的，太复杂偶觉得简单讲讲作为支撑不用考虑到政治那么多

After all, according to the general idea of psychology, students will pay more appreciation to their opportunity of studying with dollars paid. There came an explanatory story in ancient China: 有个人拜师学艺，老师每天收他很多钱，他巨刻苦因为知道valuable，后来学成老师把多钱如数退还，学生感激涕零。。gira忘了具体典故，有知道的拜托提示!+_+
这段和”on the one hand”有些重复，但没时间多想了。或者放在B1之后？

Admittedly, we know there are always students who reluctantly choose major confined to the area which they can afford, and what they really like is the one they unable to pay. The restriction of their choice limited their imagination and creativity, if they were paid by government, they will feel freer to have their own choice. However, the situation was improved by the scholarship and fellowship system in college, even loan would help when these possibilities happen. Education now is a mature project in society, tuition-required rather than totally free system fit the very point, we don’t need the Utopian college currently, things may require change but that would be discussed on the table of the far future generation.
B!和B2是不是应该换位啊。B1和B3联系更紧密。不过在你的论证里面，B1和B3只不过是用了一正一反两方面的例子，而不是从一正一反两方面来论证，其实还是讲一回事。要改。
另外，开头谈到revenue VS cost。后面是否突出了这点？谈到这点，请注意。当比较revenue和cost的时候，要搞清楚revenue是谁得的，cost又是追加在谁头上的？两者一致吗？如果受体不一致，有可比性吗？相信很多人都会忽略这一点，包括不少经济学家

恩，有时间一定改! 该你接招啦 ;)