issue241 同主题第二期，又超时了，郁闷

跳动的琴弦UID: 171113

241"An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time."

Unfortunately, people are easy to be influenced by subjective factors or some unreal information, immoral, emotional, etc. Thus, when they evaluate an individual’s greatness, they sometimes cannot give a most objective evaluation whether to their contemporaries or their predecessors.

To objectively evaluate some contemporaries’ greatness is uneasy. The profundity of the things they have done is often seen many years later, even after their deaths, since their notions or ideas are sometimes unaccepted by their contemporaries. For example, Bach, a great German musician, had not gained his fame all his life, and was even forgotten by people fifty years after his death. His music, mixed with many musical styles, was never regarded an excellent one by his employers and audience. However, his fame has been hiking up since recent one and a half century. Today, people think him as one of the few greatest musicians, among whom he even might be the uppermost.

Also, factors of politics, history, race or emotion impede people evaluate their contemporaries objectively. Especially, as a person who did something great in the past, his faults at present may also be regarded as right. Mao Zedong, China’s first chairman beloved by his people, can be a case in point. While he leaded Chinese people liberate the whole China and set up sovereignty, he also was responsible for Culture Revolution that seriously impeded the development of China. However, during Culture Revolution, hardly any one thought his decision was wrong; instead, they highly appreciate this decision and even treat all his ideas classical.

Seemingly, it is hard for people to give a most objective evaluation to their contemporaries. While, can people who belong to a later time be the most objective evaluators? Unfortunately, the answer is “almost impossible”. People in a later time have to know their predecessors through the record of history, media, or biography, which sometimes relay the information in the past subjectively. Having not received absolutely real and objective information, people are unlikely to give objective enough evaluation. For example, almost every country’s history textbooks emphasize little about their country’s historical conquer, invasion, or depredation to other countries. Typical is the controversy between China and Japan that Japanese government sealed its invasion to China in history textbooks. From such books, unknown about a real history in World War II, how can Japanese students give an objective evaluation to their predecessors?

Therefore, it is hard or even impossible to decide who are the most objective evaluators, because special notions in a certain period, subjective emotion, and unreal information are always affecting people’s evaluation to whomever a contemporary or a person in the past.

向日葵的孩子UID: 162587

Unfortunately[感觉这里太突兀了，有上文的转折时才用这个词吧，建议去掉], people are easy to be influenced by subjective factors or some unreal information, immoral, emotional[这两个形容词修饰什么？], etc. Thus, when they evaluate an individual’s greatness, they sometimes cannot give a most objective evaluation whether[either] to their contemporaries or their predecessors.

To objectively evaluate some contemporaries’ greatness is uneasy. The profundity of the things they have done is often seen many years later, even after their deaths, since their notions or ideas are sometimes unaccepted by their contemporaries. For example, Bach, a great German musician, had not gained his fame all his life, and was even forgotten by people fifty years after his death. His music, mixed with many musical styles, was never regarded [as] an excellent one by his employers and audience. However, his fame has been hiking up since recent one and a half century. Today, people think him as one of the few greatest musicians, among whom he even might be the uppermost.

Also[这一段与上段的逻辑用also连接似乎不太恰当吧], factors of politics, history, race or emotion impede people evaluate their contemporaries objectively. Especially, as a person who did something great in the past, his faults at present may also be regarded as right. Mao Zedong, China’s first chairman beloved by his people, can be a case in point. While he leaded Chinese people [to] liberate the whole China and set up sovereignty, he also was responsible for Culture Revolution that seriously impeded the development of China. However, during Culture Revolution, hardly any one thought his decision was wrong; instead, they highly appreciate this decision and even treat all his ideas classical. [我怎么觉得这一段实际上也是在讲：To objectively evaluate some contemporaries’ greatness is uneasy，似乎在逻辑上可以与上一段合并]

Seemingly, it is hard for people to give a most objective evaluation to their contemporaries. While, can people who belong to a later time be the most objective evaluators? Unfortunately, the answer is “almost impossible”. People in a later time have to know their predecessors through the record of history, media, or biography, which sometimes[这个词似乎用得有点多了，比较口语化的一个词] relay the information in the past subjectively. Having not received absolutely real and objective information, people are unlikely to give objective enough evaluation. For example, almost every country’s history textbooks emphasize little about their country’s historical conquer, invasion, or depredation to other countries[呵呵，想起老罗说的：翻开中国周边小国的历史书，哪个不是一部被中华民族侵略压迫的血泪史，但这个例子好象跟An individual's greatness不是很沾边喔]. Typical is the controversy between China and Japan that Japanese government sealed its invasion to China in history textbooks. From such books, unknown about a real history in World War II, how can Japanese students give an objective evaluation to their predecessors[这个就恰当了，因为你提到人了]?
Therefore, it is hard or even impossible to decide who are the most objective evaluators, because special notions in a certain period, subjective emotion, and unreal information are always affecting people’s evaluation to whomever a contemporary or a person in the past.
[举的例子都还不错，特别是Cultural Revolution那个，很恰当。
语言上建议把文中的uneasy,hard,give…evaluation,real等词以及大量重复使用的词做些替换。]

跳动的琴弦UID: 171113

谢谢你！

第三段的问题我想要和第二段合并，但是那样会显得第二段很长，而且表达的idea太多我觉得有点不合适。

我也不知道该怎么安排段落结构。