下午改了5篇文章，头疼，说说我的意见

指向大海UID: 158737

考前有人帮我改了文章，今天回报，一共改了5篇，还欠G猫一篇，G猫也太强了，总是斑竹和老外改，什么时候需要我的小砖头说一声

昨天网上某时作文版的人排了5行，晕，大概时寄托最热的版了，斑竹真的不容易，如果大家有什么意见也不应该怪罪斑竹，他们每天都在尽力，各个都是好心人的说。

出现的问题
1 大家好多都是4月的了，笔试本来很紧张的，很多人的水平还真的停留在4级作文水平，很让人着急，希望抓紧时间，同时不要失去信心，没有人逼你考GRe，是你自己选择的路就自己坚强的走下去
2 有结尾的概念，没有结尾的意识，结尾往往简单的代过，本应该收到和开头一样的待遇，这个大家多看看好的范文
3 段落很单薄，总想写好一些的论点，这是好的，但写出来后就没有实例和论证支持，大多数人就是强迫别人同意你的观点，没什么好说的，多看，记住一条，我反对你的观点，但我捍卫你说话的权利
4 跑题有问题，写跑题是很可怕的，大家一定要避免，好像现在的新手都不是很了解imong的追星剑了，可以去精华区看看，对破题很有好处的。

就这么多了，这段时间通过寄托认识的G友有问题可以PM我，去综合版报道了

boyjimUID: 125249

大海哥哥~在给我也看看130吧~

指向大海UID: 158737

已经看过了
就冲这你就我一声哥啊，呵呵，我很可能比你小呢

apolloxpUID: 156355

谈到了不少共性的问题
作文版的精华区里有很多好东西，可以从置顶的超级入口入手

ZEALPALADINUID: 192560

顶

yulinliangUID: 187699

大海哥哥，冒昧的打扰您了，您能否对我的作文指点一下，我下个月就要考试了，现在很着急啊!
   希望您能指出我的不足！真的很麻烦你了啊！
------题目-----issue 214
Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped.

------正文------
The statement asserts that an effective political leader is unlikely to tell the truth; therefore, complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician. I find the assertion to be specious and do not agree with the statement since it confuses the definition of lie with the virtue for a leader.

In the first place, a politician, as a leader, should be honest to be trusted by his supporters.  Therefore, he can lead his party and his nation.  If he always lies to the people, no one will trust him and he will never be voted by the voters. In addition, a politician, as a man, should be honest to take on the responsibility in the face of adversity. Honest is one of the most important quality for a person. But we can not deny the fact that sometimes a politician will lie in a harmless way to protect other's interests and reputation. On a large scale, a politician will lie to protect the security of the nation or the party. In some sense, it's the duty for a politician. But these lies have nothing with the virtue of the politician. And we can not draw the conclusion that complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician.

In the second place, a honest politician will be an example to his voters and will be admired by them. As we know, an honest politician will set a good example for the other people. If a politician, as a leader, does not take things seriously, other people will also take them seriously. From the politician's honesty, other people will know that a liar will not only mistrust others, but also hurt himself. And one lie will make another one easier to tell. Then, nation and people can not be hold together. So honest plays a crucial role for a politician.

Last but not least, the statement unfairly implies that to be an effective politician will not be an honest man. It entirely underestimates the importance of the honest. Without honest, a politician will have no position in his nation and will lose his position. For example, Richard Nixon, the former president of the U.S, lie to the public that he had not known about the Water Gate and he had no relationship with it. But at last, he had to leave the White House for his lie. From the case, there is no question that sometimes honest will decide a leader's political career.

In sum, it is self-evident that a politician should be honest so that he will get more support from the people of the country. Perhaps sometimes a politician will be silent about some urgent issue for the purpose of protecting other's interests and bettering the relationship with other countries. After all, only a honest leader is trustful to lead the whole nation to move into the brilliant future.

指向大海UID: 158737

你这是哪道题啊？

boyjimUID: 125249

你的那行蓝色的字很刺眼的说~~~~

猫猫624UID: 171232

能帮我看看吗,issue130  就是说说写法和破题的角度
郁闷了一天的,谢谢!

G猫UID: 192988

最初由 指向大海 发布
[B]考前有人帮我改了文章，今天回报，一共改了5篇，还欠G猫一篇，G猫也太强了，总是斑竹和老外改，什么时候需要我的小砖头说一声

昨天网上某时作文版的人排了5行，晕，大概..

以下省略...... [/B]

哇，你可真有心呀。
你好好准备笔试吧，
不用惦记着欠我的了 :D 。

youifUID: 200073

请大家 指教
Issue171: 450 words  50 minutes

People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the public good.

提纲
观点
In the era of competitive economic economy, benefits or profits has come to be one of the key words. And  pursuing intellectual intrests is not an exception. Then are people who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the public good? As far as I am concerned, people may be likely to contribute more to society when pursing their own interests if only their intrerests themseves are not harmful to society , if not completely good.



37To begin with, people who pursuing their own interests prabably make great contributions to the rest of the world. Above all, as it goes that ( and I paraphrase here)" interest is the best teacher." When doing what they love, it is easy for people to concentrate  on their work. These people , pursuing in their own interests, may ignor other things that directly or indirectly inhibit  their search in  interests,such as money and so-called honour. A tyical example lies in Model, who was pursuing in his own interest, ignoring the despits and various critics or ironic. Though he himself and the Model's law  was not understandable to his counterparts until   many years after his death, it is his  law that help to establish the foundation of modern  genetics. Then, who could deny that his pursuing in his own interest benefit less to the rest of the world than his counterparts who intended to act for the pubic good that time ?

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Actually, the benefits  from the people , pursuing in their own interests  often don't come out  in immediat time.The results they get might be misunderstood or not confirmed by their counterparts and may be not applied to practice successfully, in that their ideas are usually beyond the normal mind. Once it is reachable to most people or applied to practice successfully, its benifits would be clear. Hence, people who pursuing in their own interests may be  usful to society  in the long run.



However, we should forget that  the interest some people persuing in may be agaist  morals or critics. Human cloning , for instance, is  not logical in biology nor legal in law. Yet, it is said that  some crazy scientists are still pursuing such interests , compeletely denying  normal people' advice and warnings.  In this case , what society get from such pursuing would be  nothing but detrimental harmess.



To sum up, people who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons may be more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the pulblic good ,as long as their intrests are not against normal thoughts.  抄袭 issue 原话 变通