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------题目-----issue 167
It is impossible for an effective political leader to tell the truth all the time. Complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician.
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The statement asserts that an effective political leader is unlikely to tell the truth; therefore, complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician. I find the assertion to be specious and do not agree with the statement since it confuses the definition of lie with the virtue for a leader.

In the first place, a politician, as a leader, should be honest to be trusted by his supporters.  Therefore, he can lead his party and his nation.  If he always lies to the people, no one will trust him and he will never be voted by the voters. In addition, a politician, as a man, should be honest to take on the responsibility in the face of adversity. Honest is one of the most important quality for a person. But we can not deny the fact that sometimes a politician will lie in a harmless way to protect other's interests and reputation. On a large scale, a politician will lie to protect the security of the nation or the party. In some sense, it's the duty for a politician. But these lies have nothing with the virtue of the politician. And we can not draw the conclusion that complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician.

In the second place, a honest politician will be an example to his voters and will be admired by them. As we know, an honest politician will set a good example for the other people. If a politician, as a leader, does not take things seriously, other people will also take them seriously. From the politician's honesty, other people will know that a liar will not only mistrust others, but also hurt himself. And one lie will make another one easier to tell. Then, nation and people can not be hold together. So honest plays a crucial role for a politician.

Last but not least, the statement unfairly implies that to be an effective politician will not be an honest man. It entirely underestimates the importance of the honest. Without honest, a politician will have no position in his nation and will lose his position. For example, Richard Nixon, the former president of the U.S, lie to the public that he had not known about the Water Gate and he had no relationship with it. But at last, he had to leave the White House for his lie. From the case, there is no question that sometimes honest will decide a leader's political career.

In sum, it is self-evident that a politician should be honest so that he will get more support from the people of the country. Perhaps sometimes a politician will be silent about some urgent issue for the purpose of protecting other's interests and bettering the relationship with other countries. After all, only a honest leader is trustful to lead the whole nation to move into the brilliant future.

combatantUID: 200023

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combatantUID: 200023

The statement asserts that an effective political leader is unlikely （这里不太好，题目说的是tell the truth all the time,不能理解为unlikely to tell the truth吧）to tell the truth; therefore, complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician. I find the assertion to be specious and do not agree with the statement since it confuses the definition of lie with the virtue for a leader.

In the first place, a politician, as a leader, should be honest to be trusted by his supporters. Therefore, he can lead his party and his nation. If he always lies to the people, no one will trust him and he will never be voted by the voters. In addition, a politician, as a man, should be honest to take on the responsibility in the face of adversity. Honest is one of the most important quality for（用of?） a person. But we can not deny the fact that sometimes a politician will lie in a harmless way to protect other's interests and reputation. On a large scale, a politician will lie to protect the security of the nation or the party. In some sense, it's the duty(考虑一下大一点的词，obligation?) for a politician. But these lies have nothing with the virtue of the politician. And we can not draw the conclusion that complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician.

In the second place, a (an) honest politician will be an example  to his voters and will be admired by them. As we know, an honest politician will set a good example(考虑换个词，总用一个词不太好啊，model?或者image?) for the other people. If a politician, as a leader, does not take things seriously, other people will also take them seriously. From the politician's honesty, other people will know that a liar will not only mistrust others, but also hurt himself. And one lie will make another one easier to tell. Then, nation and people can not be hold together. So honest plays a crucial role for a politician.

Last but not least, the statement unfairly implies that to be an effective politician will not be an honest man. It entirely underestimates the importance of the honest. Without honest, a politician will have no position in his nation and will lose his position. For example, Richard Nixon, the former president of the U.S, lie to the public that he had not known(hear) about the Water Gate and he had no relationship with it. But at last, he had to leave the White House for his lie. From the case, there is no question that sometimes honest will decide a leader's political career.

In sum, it is self-evident that a politician should be honest so that he will get more support from the people of the country. Perhaps sometimes a politician will be silent about some urgent issue for the purpose of protecting other's interests and bettering the relationship with other countries. After all, only a honest leader is trustful to lead the whole nation to move into the brilliant future.
总体感觉很不错啊，语言不错，不过看出有北美范文的痕迹，完全是自己写的吗？要是自己写出这样的也算吧范文吸收到位了。真不错，个人愚见，各位高手再给看看吧。

指向大海UID: 158737

你真的要我的意见的么？我批的很狠的哦

语言方面，算流畅，但明显是中国学生的语言，就是我们常用的复杂句式和词汇，谈不上楼上说的出彩

逻辑方面，抱歉，看不出你的递进关系或平行关系，感觉你就是讲honest是一个不可少的virtue就是了，反复讲，只在段中有让步，不是很好。

内容方面是我要大批的了，没有实例，就一个nixon，而且感觉你对政治不是很精通（这个可以理解）哪个政治家不狡猾呢？有哪个总统什么的是老实人？可以看一些政治类的材料，不是你说的这么简单，众口难调的，政治家为了利益国家的或个人的，不可能所有的民总他都坦诚对待吧？政治回答最重要的一点 polite but iimplicit。个人意见

如果是限时作品，还算可以，上考场不要紧张，不过我劝你尽可能不要选政治类的题目