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[i习作temp] issue 38 我对自己无话可说了,求助 [复制链接]

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发表于 2005-3-19 21:50:16 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
小妹 下星期就要考了, 可是现在issue还很烂,
急需 你们的指点,,
大哥大姐们,,  帮帮忙改改吧,
谢谢了

In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books

With the development of the information technology, there are various ways in which we can learn, such as television, computer, radio, and internet. Does it mean that reading book is not as important as it once was? Admittedly, as the speaker claims, in television age people can learn much by watching television. However, compared with reading books, I disagree that reading books is not as important as it once was and watching television can replace the reading for learning. Either of the book and television has its own merits, which are useful for us.

Undoubtedly, television provides the information and knowledge in a more visual and more convincing way. In some fields, the mere knowledge and theory are hard for the people to understand and grasp, whereas they could be provided through television to make the study easier and more interesting. Consider, in geography, only the words that describe different kinds of terrain would fails to provide a profound understanding for the students. However, the television could show the real places with particular distinction in a more visual and more appreciable way. Obviously, in such cases, the television is superior to the books for the information more acceptable.

However, book is the best way to comprehend the profound ideas, and to learn systematically and integrally, attributed to the function of words --written language. Common sense informs me that not all of the knowledge and theories can be showed in a visual and pictorial way. For example, the intricate ideas in physics and math, which are full of logical reasoning, previous experiences and experiments, are hardly to show through television. In literature, the characters’ intrinsic movements described in words could trigger our imagination and cultivate our personality, also many scenes in the fiction or other kinds of literature cannot be recurred in spite of television.

In order to make our study and education more productive and effective, we should combine the use of the book and television. Through the books, we acquire the basic knowledge and fundamental skills; through television, we could gain the latest information about the current scientific fields and the social events, which is helpful to enrich our minds and lore. Neither of them could be overlooked, in television age, both are responsible for our learning and self-enriching.

To sum up, television supplies the visual and more acceptable knowledge to help us get better understanding and encourage our interests. However, the book could make the people learn more systematically and integrally. The best way to learn is to merge the two methods, without neglect of either.
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发表于 2005-3-19 22:20:48 |只看该作者
难道是差到大家都不愿改嘛??
拍拍啊,,,
我不怕疼得

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发表于 2005-3-19 23:05:09 |只看该作者
With the development of the information technology, there are various ways in which we can learn, such as television, computer, radio, and internet. 背景介绍没必要,罗嗦Does it mean that reading book is not as important as it once was? Admittedly, as the speaker claims, in television age people can learn much by watching television. However, compared with reading books, I disagree that reading books is not as important as it once was and watching television can replace the reading for learning.这句话内容上有点问题,翻译过来看看 Either of the book and television Each of them, reading book and watching TV,注意比较对象是看书和看电视,不是书和电视has its own merits, which are useful for us.

Undoubtedly, television provides the information and knowledge in a more visual and more convincing way. In some fields, the mere knowledge and theory are hard for the people to understand and grasp, whereas they could be provided 主动好表达些through television to make the study easier and more interesting. 此句语法有问题Consider, in geography, only the words that describe different kinds of terrain would fails to provide a profound 用这个adj不合适吧?vivid怎么样understanding for the students. However, the television could show the real places with particular distinction in a more visual and more appreciable way. Obviously, in such cases, the television is superior to the books for the information more acceptable.more acceptable 用的语意不通

However直接转折语气太强, book is the best太绝对,可写 Comparing with watching TV,...better way.. way to comprehend the profound ideas, and to learn systematically and integrally拼写错, attributed to the function of words --written language最后这个短语不知道用的对否. Common sense informs me that not all of the knowledge and theories can be showed in a visual and pictorial way. For example, the intricate ideas in physics and math, which are full of logical reasoning, previous experiences and experiments, are hardly to show through television. In literature, the characters’ intrinsic movements心理活动是这样表达么?可以说内心想法 described in words could trigger our imagination and cultivate our personality, also many scenes in the fiction or other kinds of literature cannot be recurred in spite of television.

In order to make our study and education more productive and effective, we should combine the use of the book and television. Through the books, we acquire the basic knowledge and fundamental skills; through television, we could gain the latest information about the current scientific fields and the social events, which is helpful to enrich our minds and lore. Neither of them could be overlooked, in television age, both are responsible for our learning and self-enriching.跑了,论点应该是说看电视学习和读书的优劣,不是我们该怎么作。这段可继续写电视的不好之处,例如被动接受信息,会 addictive

To sum up, television supplies the visual and more acceptable knowledge to help us get better understanding and encourage our interests. However, the book could make the people learn more systematically and integrally. The best way to learn is to merge the two methods, without neglect of either.你总体写成了平衡论证结构,这样就是看电视和读书你同等赞成,不过正文第3段写的跑了,issue应该讨论论题,不是让你对如何学习,利用发表看法。建议写成正反论证

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发表于 2005-3-20 09:27:26 |只看该作者
Each of them, reading book and watching TV (修改的)
我认为应该是 Either of them ,,比较好吧, 因为是两个中的一个。

其他的建议我会认真体会的,,
原来自己的错误真的多多阿,,
我要加油,,

谢谢你,,,
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