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Argument 29
When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City for four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu. On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community’s recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister’s success in his currebt quest to be Lake City’s new mayor.


In the article, the author’s point of view seems to be sound and convincing at the first glance, however if u take a closer look at it, u will find this argument doubtful and unpersuasive.

First of all, the author mentions that when Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City for four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. Since then, she has made public her commitment to environment. And the author considers that it would be wise for McAllister to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu. However, will voters be willing to elect her just because she makes public her commitment to environment? Her failure of running for mayor of Lake City 4 years ago might be out of some other factors. It is entirely possible that   her economic policy but not environment policy lead to her failure. Moreover, there are might be huge differences between Lake City and Plainsville. Although Alecia Yu was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville, it doesn’t mean McAllister could also achieve success with the same action. For example, if the environment of Lake City is the best one in the country, and there is no concerned environment problem for citizens and mayors. Citizens might regard this action as an interruption of freedom. So, all in all, without accounting for these and other possible dissimilarities, we cannot assume the same action will do good to her election.

Secondly, assuming that the action is appealing to the citizens of Lake City, there is no evidence to show that they are willing to vote McAllister. And although most of the participators in the community’s recycling program would like to vote for McAllister’s in her current quest to be Lake City’s new mayor, this article doesn’t show us that how many people participate in the recycling program. If the number just accounts for 10 percent of the whole population of Lake City, and only 10 percent of which will support her, there is also no guarantee for McAllister’s success.

In conclusion, to convince me that it would be wise for McAllister to adopt the same environment policy, the author must supply sufficient evidence that other factors affecting the election are essentially the same. And I need exactly number of participators in the community’s recycling program and how many people in this program will vote for her.

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Argument 29
When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City for four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu. On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community’s recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister’s success in his current quest to be Lake City’s new mayor.

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In the article, the author’s point of view seems to be sound and convincing at the first glance 或者sounds to be convincing ，换着用, however if u这样可以么？不清楚的说 take a closer look at itat it 可以去掉吧, u will find this argument doubtful and unpersuasive in fact.

First of all, the author mentions that when Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City for 不要forfour years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. Since then, she has made public her commitment to environment. And the author considers that it would be wise for McAllister to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu.引述 However, will voters be willing to elect her just becausefor+名词的方式更好吧 she makes public her commitment to environment? Her failure of running for mayor of Lake City 4 years ago might be out of some other factors. It is entirely possible that her economic policy but not environment policy lead to her failure. Moreover, there are去掉are might be huge differences between Lake City and Plainsville. Although Alecia Yu was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville, it doesn’t mean McAllister could also achieve success with the same action.不错 For example, if the environment of Lake City is the best one in the country, and there is no concerned environment problem for citizens and mayorsnow. Citizens might regard this action as an interruption of freedom. So, all in all, without accounting for these and other possible dissimilarities, we cannot assume the same action will do good to her election.

Secondly, assuming that the action is appealing to the citizens of Lake City, there is no evidence to show that they are willing to vote McAllister. And although most of the participators in the community’s recycling program would like to vote for McAllister’s in her current quest to be Lake City’s new mayor, this article doesn’t show us that how many people participate in the recycling program. If the number just accounts for 10 percent of the whole population of Lake City, and only 10 percent of which will support her, there is also no guarantee for McAllister’s success 或者用still.看上去很地道，值得俺学习

In conclusion, to convince me that it would be wise for McAllister to adopt the same environment policy, the author must supply sufficient evidence that other factors affecting the election are essentially the same. And I need exactly number of participators in the community’s recycling program and how many people in this program will vote for her.针对前面分析给出建议

感觉不错，字数400多，或许倒数第二段可以再充实一下

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谢谢你的帮助，我会再改改。第二段确实需要再展开说明