阿狗4 两房地产公司比较（★是N人就看我的开头，我头都开大了★）

smartyrUID: 169453

这篇超时15分钟！自己改了一遍

In the argument, the arguer contends one should select Adams if he wants to sell home quickly and at a good price in that Adams has more agents and more revenue and higher average home sales. Besides, the arguer cites his own experience ten years ago to support the statement.

On the surface, it seems to be sound, however, a close scrutiny of the statement will reveal how fallacious it is.

In the first place, the argument fails to establish the casual relationship between efficiency and the scales of the two firms. There is no evidence to indicate that the scale of a firm is the solely responsible for the effectiveness and efficiency of the firm. As a matter of fact, it is highly possible that the large firm has less effective than the small one. Meanwhile, the arguer cannot offer sufficient evidence that of Fitch’s working hours are less than those of Adams. Without this information, it is unwarranted to endure the assertion.  Also, the average home sales price of Adams is higher just indicates that the homes that Adams sells are more valuable than Fitch on an average level. The arguer cannot rule out the possibility that the lower price of homes Adams sells are counteracted by the much higher homes. It is precisely the same when it comes to Fitch. Therefore, it is unfair and presumptuous to derive the conclusion.

In the second place, the arguer overlooks some other relevant factors may be considerably more important in determining the period of selling homes, such as the features of the two homes. The arguer cites his personal experience involving of selling his two homes that Fitch took quite longer time to sell his home ten years ago, compared with Adams last year, is quite not compelling. It is possible that the latter has better quality and much more convenient transportation condition than the former one. Even if the two homes are essential the same, we know that the whole economic situation of the real estate has changed rapidly and tremendously in the past years and Fitch might improve itself in every respects, such as its management, marketing strategies and the quality of his staff, thus more competitive than Adams. In addition, the argument bases the arguer’s personal experience t, which is not sufficiently enough to represent the all the customers of the two firms.

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a hasty generalization with recommendation that Adams would sell homes quickly and at a good price, which is unconvincing. Conceded that, Adams has better reputation and efficiency, it is arbitrary to make the conclusion that it will sale the home at a good price, although Adams may sell the house quickly. After all, besides the property of the homes, there are many factors may influence the price of a house, such as the market condition, and the buyer's taste, etc


In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To make the argument more persuasive, the arguer should provide more clear evidence to ensure that Adams is more effective than Fitch in selling homes, and that the disparity in home sales and sales price is attributable to that difference. Also the arguer should provide more information about his or her two homes and make out the casual relationship between selling of home and the real estate agent.

枫丹UID: 166492

哎!不当都不行了!!给你顶一下,明天给你

zhoulin00001UID: 189304

In the argument, the arguer contends one should select Adams if he wants to sell home quickly and at a good price in that Adams has more agents and more revenue and higher average home sales. Besides, the arguer cites his own experience ten years ago to support the statement.

On the surface, it seems to be sound, however, a close scrutiny of the statement will reveal how fallacious it is.为什么要分两段呢？

In the first place, the argument fails to establish the casual relationship between efficiency and the scales of the two firms. There is no evidence to indicate that the scale of a firm is the solely responsible for the effectiveness and efficiency of the firm. As a matter of fact, it is highly possible that the large firm has less effective than the small one. Meanwhile, the arguer cannot offer sufficient evidence that of Fitch’s working hours are less than those of Adams. Without this information, it is unwarranted to endure the assertion. Also, the average home sales price of Adams is higher just indicates that the homes that Adams sells are more valuable than Fitch on an average level. The arguer cannot rule out the possibility that the lower price of homes Adams sells are counteracted by the much higher homes. It is precisely the same when it comes to Fitch这有点勉强，不管怎么说还是平均高啊，应象上句那么说. Therefore, it is unfair and presumptuous to derive the conclusion.

In the second place, the arguer overlooks some other relevant factors may be considerably more important in determining the period？？ of selling homes, such as the features of the two homes. The arguer cites his personal experience involving of selling his two homes that Fitch took quite longer time to sell his home ten years ago, compared with Adams last year, is quite not compelling. It is possible that the latter has better quality and much more convenient transportation condition than the former one. Even if the two homes are essential the same, we know that the whole economic situation of the real estate has changed rapidly and tremendously in the past years and Fitch might improve itself in every respects, such as its management, marketing strategies and the quality of his staff, thus more competitive than Adams. In addition, the argument bases the arguer’s personal experience t, which is not sufficiently enough to represent the all the customers of the two firms.

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a hasty generalization with recommendation that Adams would sell homes quickly and at a good price, which is unconvincing. Conceded that, Adams has better reputation and efficiency, it is arbitrary to make the conclusion that it will sale the home at a good price, although Adams may sell the house quickly. After all, besides the property of the homes, there are many factors may influence the price of a house, such as the market condition, and the buyer's taste, etc这段有点无关紧要而且上面已经说了A平均房价高，市场不好，谁卖都卖不高


In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To make the argument more persuasive, the arguer should provide more clear evidence to ensure that Adams is more effective than Fitch in selling homes, and that the disparity in home sales and sales price is attributable to that difference. Also the arguer should provide more information about his or her two homes and make out the casual relationship between selling of home and the real estate agent.
你超时的原因很可能是画蛇添足的body3,要是去掉，就很好了

枫丹UID: 166492

In the argument, the arguer contends one should select Adams if he wants to sell home quickly and at a good price in that Adams has more agents and more revenue and higher average home sales. Besides, the arguer cites his own experience ten years ago to support the statement.

On the surface, it seems to be sound, however, a close scrutiny of the statement will reveal how fallacious it is.
我也很纳闷你是怎么想的？感觉你的开头前面太具体了，后面太抽象。前面把大体的arguer 的论证理清楚。太千万不要详述。
In the first place, the argument fails to establish the casual relationship between efficiency and the scales of the two firms. There is no evidence to indicate that the scale of a firm is the solely responsible for the effectiveness and efficiency of the firm.（这里最好有个小让步，会更局说服力） As a matter of fact, it is highly possible that the large firm has less effective than the small one. Meanwhile, the arguer cannot offer sufficient evidence that of Fitch’s working hours are less than those of Adams. Without this information, it is unwarranted to endure the assertion. Also, the average home sales price of Adams is higher just indicates that the homes that Adams sells are more valuable than Fitch on an average level. The arguer cannot rule out the possibility that the lower price of homes Adams sells are counteracted by the much higher homes. It is precisely the same when it comes to Fitch. Therefore, it is unfair and presumptuous to derive the conclusion.

In the second place, the arguer overlooks some other relevant factors may be considerably more important in determining the period of selling homes, such as the features of the two homes. The arguer cites his personal experience involving of selling his two homes that Fitch took quite longer time to sell his home ten years ago, compared with Adams last year, is quite not compelling. It is possible that the latter has better quality and much more convenient transportation condition than the former one. Even if the two homes are essential the same, we know that the whole economic situation of the real estate has changed rapidly and tremendously in the past years and Fitch might improve itself in every respects, such as its management, marketing strategies and the quality of his staff, thus more competitive than Adams.这里你只是给出假设，语气不能太肯定 In addition, the argument bases the arguer’s personal experience t, which is not sufficiently enough to represent the all the customers of the two firms.

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a hasty generalization with recommendation that Adams would sell homes quickly and at a good price, which is unconvincing. Conceded that, Adams has better reputation and efficiency, it is arbitrary to make the conclusion that it will sale the home at a good price, although Adams may sell the house quickly. After all, besides the property of the homes, there are many factors may influence the price of a house, such as the market condition, and the buyer's taste, etc
感觉你只是把错误点出来，论述的不清楚的说


In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To make the argument more persuasive, the arguer should provide more clear evidence to ensure that Adams is more effective than Fitch in selling homes, and that the disparity in home sales and sales price is attributable to that difference. Also the arguer should provide more information about his or her two homes and make out the casual relationship between selling of home and the real estate agent
我a也是刚刚开始，想做n人都难了。只是给你点意见，我感觉你越写越顺了。加油

枫丹UID: 166492

等我a修练好了,再来拍你啊!!

zhengandhong135UID: 164542

楼主好文啊
一些句型可以借鉴吗
单纯几个句子回判雷同吗

猫猫624UID: 171232

In the argument, the arguer contends one should select Adams if he wants to sell home quickly and at a good price in that Adams has more agents and more revenue and higher average home sales than Fitch . Besides, the arguer cites his own experience ten years ago to support the statement.

On the surface, it seems to be sound, however, a close scrutiny of the statement will reveal how fallacious it is.

In the first place, the argument fails to establish the casual relationship between efficiency and the scales of the two firms. There is no evidence to indicate that the scale of a firm is the solely responsible for the effectiveness and efficiency of the firm. As a matter of fact, it is highly possible that the large firm has are less effective than the small one. Meanwhile, the arguer cannot offer sufficient evidence that of Fitch’s working hours are less than those of Adams. Without this information, it is unwarranted to endure the assertion. Also, the fact that the average home sales price of Adams is higher just indicates that the homes that Adams sells are more valuable than Fitch on an average level. The arguer cannot rule out the possibility that the lower price of homes Adams sells are counteracted by the much higher homes. It is precisely the same when it comes to Fitch.这句要说什么意思 Therefore, it is unfair and presumptuous to derive the conclusion.

In the second place, the arguer overlooks some other relevant factors which may be considerably more important in determining the period of selling homes, such as the features of the two homes. The arguer cites his personal experience involving of selling his two homes that Fitch took quite longer time to sell his home ten years ago, compared with Adams last year, is quite not compelling. It is possible that the latter has better quality and much more convenient transportation condition than the former one. Even if the two homes are essential the same, we know that the whole economic situation of the real estate has changed rapidly and tremendously in the past years and Fitch might improve itself in every respects, such as its management, marketing strategies and the quality of his staff, thus more competitive than Adams. In addition, the argument bases the arguer’s personal experience t, which is not sufficiently enough to represent the all the customers of the two firms.

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a hasty generalization with recommendation that Adams would sell homes quickly and at a good price, which is unconvincing. Conceded Assuming that, Adams has better reputation and efficiency, it is arbitrary to make the conclusion that it will sale the home at a good price, although Adams may sell the house quickly. After all, besides the property of the homes, there are many factors may influence the price of a house, such as the market condition, and the buyer's taste, etc besides Adams and Fitch, there may be some other estate companies to be concerned with by people


In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To make the argument more persuasive, the arguer should provide more clear evidence to ensure that Adams is more effective than Fitch in selling homes, and that the disparity in home sales and sales price is attributable to that difference. Also the arguer should provide more information about his or her two homes and make out set up the casual relationship between selling of home and the real estate agent.

写得不错,继续努力.