issue177 模考 倒计时一天 试了一下选一道没有看过的现想现写,可是写得不成功,郁闷~

圣光UID: 193720

Issue177  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：41分49秒     593 words
从2001年2月22日8时29分到2001年2月22日9时41分
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The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.
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As we are growing up, the education involves in our lives, impacting us, both superficially and mentally, which leads to our change in perceiving the world. Thus it is true that after the academic discipline study, we see the same world, but with different "eyes".

We indeed alter in the way we observe the world with the education influencing. When we were children, we see our world in a simple way, with our naive eyes, considering all things natural and harmonious. Why the sky is blue? We may at that time answer the God paints it. The fact that the sea is full of water is due to the tears of the nature, while the flowers are fragrant because they eat sugar every night out of our eyes, in our minds then. The world was colorful and simple in our eyes when we were young. However, when we grow up, we see the world of blue sky, water-filled sea and aroma flowers the same as we see it when we were young, but through education, we know that the former explanations in our minds toward the world are wrong, maybe sometimes absurd, making us to laugh.

Why we change our minds? It is due to the education we received--it gives us a new angle to see the world, to comprehend the exterior events and ourselves. Education we accept alters our ways to see the world because it gives us knowledge to understand the phenomenon we cannot explain in the past when we were young. The sky may be still blue, however, it is in virtue of the atmosphere of the Earth--we learn it in the natural philosophy class; the sea is full of water, however, it is the function of the water system in the world; the flowers are aroma, but their fragrance is from the chemical elements they produce. We see the world with imagination without education, due to the lack of knowledge; however, we observe it now with eyes full of knowledge, and explain it with the learning we gain in the process of study, which naturally render distinct explanations. Moreover, education gives us a different way to think, to measure and to explain the world. We were based on our subjective angle to see the world, evaluating it with our own favors and dislike. But education teaches us to measure things in a objective perspective, which can alter our attitude toward the world too. Consider, for example, when we were young, we just judge person from the appearance of them, frightened by persons who are ugly. But after education, we know that people who are really terrible are those who are ugly inside rather than outside. We can see the same person, however, in different angle.

In fact, with the help of education, we can see the world more thoroughly and deeply, which may help us to achieve more in our fields. We cannot know the events in the past and learn valuable experience from them without education; were there no education, we cannot obtain sufficient information to achieve attainments; without education, we will live in our fictious world, with no objective judgment. In short, we cannot improve ourselves without the change to observe the world the education brings to us.

In sum, we are influenced by education which not only instill us knowledge, but alter the perspectives and values of ours, leading to the change in our "eyes" to see the world. And it is what improve ourselves, and finally, fueling the development of the world.

圣光UID: 193720

顶一下吧~

ijwtbkUID: 172334

挺好的
第一个body感觉没讲晚就结束了，可以再讲一下受了教育之后，天为什么是蓝的，海水是怎么来的。（你这个写在第二个body 里了）
第二个body 说理太多，而且好多句子要表达的意思是一样的。
第三个body 的论述我觉得不能支持ts。 你想说有了教育以后我们可以更深入全面的了解世界，可你后面的论述却是在说没有教育的基础上，有了知识我们能怎么怎么样，倒是挺支持第二个body的。
开头，结尾赞一下，语言也赞一下。
楼主还是挺强的，后天好好发挥，issue至少4分啊。
我说得不一定对，我自己的水平也不高的说。
楼主就权当我在灌水好啦！
祝好运，我吃饭去啦。

圣光UID: 193720

谢谢楼上的,但是偶想听听鬼鬼这些斑斑的意见啊~~

iverUID: 198348

写成这样很不错了,尤其是限时.
第一段写了我们通过教育而改变了看法
第二段写了原因.
第三段要是加一个例子就更好了
我打5分!
支持你!
best wishes.