Issue11 看到大家都写得这么好好自卑哦， 这是我第一次发作文，恳请指正

solos2000UID: 193789

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All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.
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The speaker suggests that a global university designed to engage students worldwide in the process of solving the world's most pressing and during problems should be established. It seems to be an attractive recommendation at first glance, however, with close analysis, I find that this recommendation has some problems which prevent it from being implemented.

Firstly, whether or not such a university is in need is deserved to be discussed. Admittedly, such a university, if can be realized, can benefit a lot to the whole humankind. It can provide more chances to students who are in the global university to understand the situation of the world today; It can provide a place for elites from every corner of the world to sit together discussing the problems so that a congruent recognition can be achieved easily; It can also help to solve some intractable problems which is hard to figure out by merely one nation. However, financial support is indispensable for such a great project and this would be a hard burden for some developing countries undoubtedly. Fortunately, with the development of technology, internet, the most powerful tool in contemporary society, has become widespread all over the world. And all the benefits and convenience mentioned above can be easily acquired by internet. Students can be equipped with abundance of knowledge and open ken by information from internet; Conference call can be an effective mean which enable elite worldwide communicate without obstacle. Thus the money saved can be used more effectively on the issues that in most emergency.

Secondly, someone people may argue that financial support is not a problem since such a university is designed to solve the global problems, every country is willing to support. Another question is still can not be ignored: who will lead such a global university? Some people will suggest that a nation who has the most powerful economy and advanced technology to take this responsibility, however, this decision will doubtlessly bring about controversial because this disobey the fair principle. Because every individual has his own national background and it is natural that one nation who is in the leadership will aim at its own benefit.

The third problem is that which problem should be listed in the first? As we all know, there are a lot of persistent problems waiting for us to solve, such as crisis in energy, poverty, pollution, drug abuse and terrorism. Every nation's pressing problems are varied according to the different situation of the country and every nation expect that its own problem to be solved as soon as possible. For instance, crisis in energy and pollution may be the most urgent problems to be solved in developed countries while poverty may be most urgent problem in the developing countries. The possibility is that an endless international conference on which problems is the most urgent will consume a lot of time and energy.

In conclusion, although such an assumption is appealing, there exist too many practical problems which make it to be unrealistic. And thanks to the advance technology make us to achieve the same goal with more convenience and benefit.

solos2000UID: 193789

怎么没人改呢，说一句话也行。从来没听人评价过我的文章呢

imjasonUID: 176604

占坑

imjasonUID: 176604

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All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.
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The speaker suggests that a global university designed to engage students worldwide in the process of solving the world's most pressing and during problems should be established. It seems to be an attractive recommendation at first glance, however, with close analysis, I find that this recommendation has some problems which prevent it from being implemented.怎么这么像ARGUMENT的开头啊，注意！这在ETS是要着重注意的地方。

Firstly, whether or not such a university is in need is deserved to be discussed. Admittedly, such a university, if can be realized, can benefit a lot to the whole humankind. It can provide more chances to students who are in the global university to understand the situation of the world today; It can provide a place for elites from every corner of the world to sit together discussing the problems so that a congruent recognition can be achieved easily; It can also help to solve some intractable problems which is hard to figure out by merely one nation. However, financial support is indispensable for such a great project and this would be a hard burden for some developing countries undoubtedly. Fortunately, with the development of technology, internet, the most powerful tool in contemporary society, has become widespread all over the world. And all the benefits and convenience mentioned above can be easily acquired by internet. Students can be equipped with abundance of knowledge and open ken by information from internet; Conference call can be an effective mean which enable elite worldwide communicate without obstacle. Thus the money saved can be used more effectively on the issues that in most emergency.

Secondly, someone people may argue that financial support is not a problem since such a university is designed to solve the global problems, every country is willing to support. Another question is still can not be ignored: who will lead such a global university? Some people will suggest that a nation who has the most powerful economy and advanced technology to take this responsibility, however, this decision will doubtlessly bring about controversial because this disobey the fair principle. Because every individual has his own national background and it is natural that one nation who is in the leadership will aim at its own benefit.

The third problem is that which problem should be listed in the first? As we all know, there are a lot of persistent problems waiting for us to solve, such as crisis in energy, poverty, pollution, drug abuse and terrorism. Every nation's pressing problems are varied according to the different situation of the country and every nation expect that its own problem to be solved as soon as possible. For instance, crisis in energy and pollution may be the most urgent problems to be solved in developed countries while poverty may be most urgent problem in the developing countries. The possibility is that an endless international conference on which problems is the most urgent will consume a lot of time and energy.

In conclusion, although such an assumption is appealing, there exist too many practical problems which make it to be unrealistic. And thanks to the advance technology make us to achieve the same goal with more convenience and benefit.
唉，可惜啊！你这篇文章很危险啊，因为感觉你完全是在写ARGUMENT，一直在找原论点的错误。你应该想成的是议论文。你可以反对它的观点，说出理由；但是你也应该说出你的想法并阐述原因。赶紧看下范文了！怀疑你是不是搞错了。

solos2000UID: 193789

唉，可惜啊！你这篇文章很危险啊，因为感觉你完全是在写ARGUMENT，一直在找原论点的错误。你应该想成的是议论文。你可以反对它的观点，说出理由；但是你也应该说出你的想法并阐述原因。赶紧看下范文了！怀疑你是不是搞错了。

谢谢了先
的确，有些用词，句式和结构有点像ARGUMENT,不过我觉得内容还是很ISSUE的，能不能在探讨一下
这样震得很危险吗？哪位高人指点一下

猫猫624UID: 171232

楼主结尾开头段首都是argument 格式?还是劝改一下

neverflyUID: 166610

写argument的时候观点是一条一条罗列的，
写issue的时候观点应该是正面反面原因结果这样展开的，是一个整体。
solos的内容好像就是一条一条列举的，不知道我说的对不对