Issue87 [ 新手还是专家更容易作出伟大发现] 考了13次！

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Issue87  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：50分11秒     516 words
从2005年2月23日16时19分到2005年2月23日17时50分
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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries.
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I fundamentally advocate the speaker's assertion that the beginner is more evitable to break established routines and make great discoveries. Although compared with experts the beginner lack sufficient knowledge and experience and may encounter failures, it is the beginner's skeptical mind and curious attitude that make important discoveries as well as impel the development of the society.

With respect to the science fields, the very of notion of advances is the beginner's doubt to the existing traditions. The significant discoveries, the break though of the old theories and emergence of the fresh idea that broaden human’s horizon to the ambient world and chance of revolution of human’s lives, is often taken by the young scientists. Take a look at the improvement of history of science, theories such as the sun sits at the center of universe rather than earth, human evolve for other life-forms, and relativism of time and space, are all the consequence of the curious and skeptical attitude of the beginner and young scientists of Galileo, Darwin, and Einstein. Therefore, in science fields, especially nature science such as physics, chemistry and biology, beginners with innovative and skeptical ideas are more likely to success rather than experts whose viewpoints are frequently restricted by the convention.

Turn to the field of art next, in which magnificent discoveries means creative ideas that often beyond the appreciation capability of so called experts, the beginner rather than the experts have more chance to success. As human's nature the public are likely to create and accept new and fresh art forms -- which are the reasons why many young adult devote themselves into the creation of art with enthusiasm. But it is the governors and the critics -- in other words, experts-- who determine whether the art works are worthwhile. With the tradition and established parameters and akin to old art style, unfair judgment or even dismissing of some works later been considered to be masterpieces were frequently happened in history. Such as the ignoring of Van Gogh's art form that disobeys traditional style, and Beethoven's breaking of conventional music style. To conclude, in art field, the beginner rather than experts obtaining innovation idea have more chance to access achievement.

Admittedly, compared with experts , the beginner lack knowledge and enough experience, which are curial in the development of any field. It seems that professors and artist who have accumulated a larger  amount of existing knowledge and experience are more likely to find out new theory on based of old ones. However, for the laziness of human nature, people are tend to trust and obey the existing laws without making innovation, invention and discovery, all of which clearly benefit the society. On the other hand, the beginners are propelled by their interest and are willing to approve their ideas, would accept knowledge that are useful to achieve their goal. Therefore they can study by themselves faster.

In sum, in many fields such as science and art, the beginner with skeptical and curious mind are more available to access success. The expert should encourage and offer their fluent knowledge to the beginners during the pursuing of the new discoveries.

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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries.
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I fundamentally advocate the speaker's assertion that the beginner is more evitable 这个词“不可避免的”不好吧。可以替换成it is possible for beginners to …….than experts to break established routines and make great discoveries. Although compared with experts the beginner lack sufficient knowledge and experience and may encounter failures, it is the beginner's skeptical mind and curious attitude that make important discoveries as well as impel the development of the society.

With respect to the science fields, the very of notion of advances is the beginner's doubt to the existing traditions. The significant discoveries, the break though of the old theories and emergence of the fresh idea that broaden human’s horizon to the ambient world and chance of revolution of human’s lives, is often taken by the young scientists. Take a look at the improvement of history of science of science in history, theories such as the sun sits at the center of universe rather than earth, human evolve for other life-forms, and relativism of time and space, are all the consequence of the curious and skeptical attitude of the beginner and young scientists of Galileo, Darwin, and Einstein. Therefore,不要用因此，用besides,或furthermore in science fields, especially nature science such as physics, chemistry and biology, beginners with innovative and skeptical ideas are more likely to success rather than experts whose viewpoints are frequently restricted by the convention.

Turn to the field of art next, in which magnificent discoveries means creative ideas that often beyond the appreciation capability of so called experts, the beginner rather than the experts have more chance to success. As human's nature the public are likely to create and accept new and fresh art forms -- which are the reasons why many young adult devote themselves into the creation of art with enthusiasm. But it is the governors and the critics -- in other words, experts-- who determine whether the art works are worthwhile. With the tradition and established parameters and akin to old art style, unfair judgment or even dismissing of some works later been considered to be masterpieces were frequently happened in history. Such as the ignoring of Van Gogh's art form that disobeys traditional style, and Beethoven's breaking of conventional music style. To conclude, in art field, the beginner rather than experts obtaining innovation idea have more chance to access achievement.后面的两个例子不好，应该说Van Gogh and Beethoven 不受established thoughts 的限制，在beginner的时候achieve astonishing accomplishments

Admittedly, compared with experts , the beginner lack knowledge and enough experience, which are curial in the development of any field. It seems that professors and artist who have accumulated a larger amount of existing knowledge and experience are more likely to find out new theory on based of old ones.这句话要有限定，否则和上面有点自相矛盾。加under some circumstances However, for the laziness of human nature, people are tend to trust and obey the existing laws without making innovation, invention and discovery, all of which clearly benefit the society. On the other hand, the beginners are propelled by their interest and are willing to approve their ideas, would accept knowledge that are useful to achieve their goal. Therefore they can study by themselves faster.

In sum, in many fields such as science and art, the beginner with skeptical and curious mind are more available to access success. The expert should encourage and offer their fluent knowledge to the beginners during the pursuing of the new discoveries.最后一句有点突然，上一段最好涉及一些beginner 和experts 的cooperation 问题
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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries.
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I fundamentally advocate the speaker's assertion that the beginner is more evitable to break established routines and make great discoveries. Although compared with experts the beginner lack sufficient knowledge and experience and may encounter failures, it is the beginner's skeptical mind and curious attitude that make important discoveries as well as impel the development of the society.

With respect to the science fields, the very of notion of advances is the beginner's doubt to the existing traditions. The significant discoveries, the break though of the old theories and emergence of the fresh idea that broaden human’s horizon to the ambient world and chance of revolution of human’s lives, isare often taken by the young scientists. Take a look at the improvement of history of science, theories such as 是不是应加引导词thatthe sun sits at the center of universe rather than earth, human evolve for other life-forms, and relativism of time and space, are all the consequence of the curious and skeptical attitude of the beginner and young scientists of Galileo, Darwin, and Einstein. 看到这的例子感觉兄台是不是混淆了年轻人和新手，年长者和专家的概念：年轻未必不能成为专家，这里举的几个例子感觉感觉他们尽管年纪青青，但以称得上该领域的专家了。Therefore, in science fields, especially nature science such as physics, chemistry and biology, beginners with innovative and skeptical ideas are more likely to success rather than experts whose viewpoints are frequently restricted by the convention.

Turn to the field of art next, in which magnificent discoveries means creative ideas that often beyond the appreciation capability of so called experts, the beginner rather than the experts have more chance to success. As human's nature the public are likely to create and accept new and fresh art forms -- which are the reasons why many young adult devote themselves into the creation of art with enthusiasm.这个因果关系有问题，既然是大众的本性因何为年轻人所独有？ But it is the governors and the critics -- in other words, experts-- who determine whether the art works are worthwhile. With the tradition and established parameters and akin to old art style, unfair judgment or even dismissing of some works later been considered to be masterpieces were frequently happened in history. Such,such as the ignoring of Van Gogh's art form that disobeys traditional style, and Beethoven's breaking of conventional music style. To conclude, in art field, the beginner rather than experts obtaining innovation idea have more chance to access achievement.个人认为这段的论述不是十分成功：1，关于所谓专家的评判准则有问题并不能必然导致专家相对于新手在发现上的劣势，这里有逻辑断层2，单单从对你论证的支持上看Beethoven的例子是不当的，它不能证明你在such as前面的论证

Admittedly, compared with experts , the beginner lack knowledge and enough experience, which are curial in the development of any field. It seems that professors and artist who have accumulated a larger amount of existing knowledge and experience are more likely to find out new theory on based of old ones. However, for the laziness of human nature, people are tend to trust and obey the existing laws without making innovation, invention and discovery, all of which clearly benefit the society. On the other hand, the beginners are propelled by their interest and are willing to approve their ideas, would accept knowledge that are useful to achieve their goal. Therefore they can study by themselves faster.

In sum, in many fields 自我弱化，你既然fundamentally advocate 是不是就应该强调in any field，否则就等于反对。这里我理解的也不深，所以希望一起探讨such as science and art, the beginner with skeptical and curious mind are more available to access success. The expert should encourage and offer their fluent knowledge to the beginners during the pursuing of the new discoveries.

给小弟总体的感觉就是语言和句式不错，但逻辑上略显薄弱。

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谢谢猫猫

I fundamentally advocate the speaker's assertion that it is more possible for the beginner to break established routines and make great discoveries. Although compared with experts the beginner lack sufficient knowledge and experience and may encounter failures, it is the beginner's skeptical mind and curious attitude that make important discoveries as well as impel the development of the society.

With respect to the science fields, the very of notion of advances is the beginner's doubt to the existing traditions.      The significant discoveries, the break though of the old theories and emergence of the fresh idea that broaden human’s horizon to the ambient world and making revolution of human’s lives, are often taken by young scientists. In retrospect, the improvement of science in history such as theories like the sun sits at the center of universe rather than earth, human evolve for other life-forms, and relativism of time and space, are all the consequence of the curious and skeptical attitude of the beginner and young scientists of Galileo, Darwin, and Einstein. Furthermore, in science fields, especially nature science such as physics, chemistry and biology, beginners with innovative and skeptical ideas are more likely to success rather than experts whose viewpoints are frequently restricted by the convention.

Turn to the field of art next, in which magnificent discoveries means creative ideas that often beyond the appreciation capability of so called experts, the beginner rather than the experts have more chance to success. As human's nature the public are likely to create and accept new and fresh art forms -- which are the reasons why many young adults devote themselves into the creation of art with enthusiasm. But it is the governors and the critics -- in other words, experts-- who determine whether the art works are worthwhile. With the tradition and established parameters and old art style, unfair judgment or even dismissing of some works later been considered to be masterpieces were frequently happened in history. 这里的例子表述方式改动了一下, 猫猫说的挺有道理 Such as the disagreement and even discarding of art works Van Gogh created when he was young disobeyed the appreciation of convention, and ignoring of Beethoven significant music works because of breaking the traditional style. But for the innovation in their fields and potential value of their works, the young artists are doom to achieve to success. To conclude, in art field, the beginner rather than experts obtaining creative idea have more chance to access achievement.

Admittedly, compared with experts, the beginner lack knowledge and enough experience, which are curial in the development of any field. Under some circumstance, it seems that professors and artists who have accumulated a larger amount of existing knowledge and experience are more likely to find out new theory on based of old ones. However, for the laziness of human nature, people are tend to trust and obeyfollow the existing laws without making innovation, invention and discovery, all of which clearly benefit the society. On the other hand, the beginners are propelled by their interest and are willing to approve their ideas, would accept knowledge that are useful to achieve their goal. Therefore they can study by themselves faster.

In sum, in many fields such as science and art, the beginner with skeptical and curious mind are more available to access success. But for the lacking of sufficient knowledge and experience comparing with professors and exports, they may encounter difficulties or temporary failure. Therefore, to better recommend and support the young adults imagination as well as enthusiasm, the expert should encourage and offer their fluent knowledge to the beginners during the pursuing of the new discoveries.