issue138 为什么总是不能在规定的时间做完

nora0020UID: 104886

又超出好长时间，大家都是怎么限时的呢？ 而且觉得也什么好写的呢？ 大家给点意见

There is a famous saying that defeat is as instructive as victory. People could face many mistakes before they success all around their lives. Still we may remember almost all the inventions which have huge contributions to our society are definitely come from the failure. So we draw a conclusion that through mistakes can there be discovery or progress according to the following reasons.


First of all, we may take an easy research and then to see that mistakes are inevitable. In china, people could always be told "failure is the mother of victory." when we think frustrate, defeated, and have nothing to do with the work. As the time we think about this, frequently, the Edison's achievements come to our minds, the famous man who almost developed 1300 new inventions named after him, however the clearly thing we know is that he has so many mistakes before he come to the exiting ending which even could make everyone give up the work on the half way. His usually saying is the thankful to the defeat, the frustrate way to the victory. In addition, the Flemyng, a famous bacteriologist, also found the Penicillin the most grandness work around medical field in the 20's century out from a failed experiment. From these we can witness that mistakes are the necessary ones used to be in the middle road of the success path.


Secondary, we could get lots of mistakes when doing a work. The more important is that if we could get something useful from these mistakes or how to use these to discover a new thought for doing the work more efficiently and more useful for the next step. The mistakes are priceless that we collect all the mistakes we faced for the certain work and analysis these failures to look over why these mistakes happened and how to avoid. After the full realizing of all the mistakes before the next time, the following work we could more care about these places and do our best to stop it appearance again. It is the crucial process to the success. In summary, the mistakes do an extraordinary advantage to the discovery and progress of the work.


On the other hand, till the work achieved, there are also some no mistake process, but that not because they take even more careful about the operation but because they learned the mistakes which other people encountered before. Always, the more experience people who could do the work best than others probably met much more mistakes. The following people who plan to do the same work just need to take carefully about what the experience one failed ago. Result from that, we still obviously to see how importance of the mistakes not only what we makes but from former workers.


From the Goethe's words (and I paraphrase) “Man errs so long as strives."  We can say that don't be afraid of taking mistakes, as what we discussed above; it can be discovered or progressed to the victory.

skybridgeUID: 154875

背句型，用模板啊，每天打上一遍。

nora0020UID: 104886

不是说Issue 没有什么模板么？ 背了点工具箱，不过感觉收效不大呢

anthraxUID: 176473

There is a famous saying that defeat is as instructive as victory. People could face many mistakes before they success all around their lives. Still we may remember almost all the inventions which have huge contributions(contribute hugely) to our society are definitely come from the failure. So we draw a conclusion that through mistakes can there be discovery or progress according to the following reasons.


First of all, we may take an easy research and then to see that (akwardly expression, should be: numerouse emprical evidence tell us that...)mistakes are inevitable. In china, people could always be told "failure is the mother of victory." when we think frustrate, defeated,(wrong exprssion, should be: people are always told that) and have nothing to do with the work. As the time we think about this, frequently, the Edison's achievements come to our minds, the famous man who almost developed 1300 new inventions named after him, however the clearly thing we know is that he has so many mistakes before he come to the exiting ending(akward experssion,should be: final achievment or final goal) which even could make everyone give up the work on the half way. His usually saying is the thankful to the defeat, the frustrate way to the victory. In addition, the Flemyng(Fleming), a famous bacteriologist, also found the Penicillin the most grandness work around medical field in the 20's century out from a failed experiment. From these we can witness that mistakes are the necessary ones used to be in the middle road of the success path.


Secondary, we could get lots of mistakes when doing a work. (Too vague as being a topic sentence, consider changing)The more important is that if we could get something useful from these mistakes or how to use these to discover a new thought for doing the work more efficiently and more useful for the next step. The mistakes are priceless that we collect all the mistakes we faced for the certain work and analysis these failures to look over why these mistakes happened and how to avoid. After the full realizing of all the mistakes before the next time, the following work we could more care about these places and do our best to stop it appearance again. It is the crucial process to the success. In summary, the mistakes do an extraordinary advantage to the discovery and progress of the work.
You mean we can learn lessons from it. MAKE YOUR POINT STANDING OUT!

On the other hand, till the work achieved, there are also some no mistake process, but that not because they take even more careful about the operation but because they learned the mistakes which other people encountered before. Always, the more experience people who could do the work best than others probably met much more mistakes. The following people who plan to do the same work just need to take carefully about what the experience one failed ago. Result from that, we still obviously to see how importance of the mistakes not only what we makes but from former workers.
There's some interaction between the passages and make the coherence marred. consider adjust your sub point. 1 we can learn lessons from mistakes.2 mistakes make a strong personality, which can help succeed

From the Goethe's words (and I paraphrase) “Man errs so long as strives." We can say that don't be afraid of taking mistakes, as what we discussed above; it can be discovered or progressed to the victory.
最后一段结尾引用得不错，但是紧接着一句很勉强。如果没办法升华，可以重申三个分论点，最后总结。中间全英文批改，节省时间……否则宿舍人有意见……哭

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

There is a famous saying that defeat is as instructive as victory. People could face many mistakes before they achieve success all around their lives. Still we may remember almost all the inventions which have huge contributions to our society are definitely come from the failure. So we draw a conclusion that through mistakes can there be discovery or progress according to the following reasons.


First of all, we may take an easy research and then to see that mistakes are inevitable. In china, people could always be told "failure is the mother of victory." when we think frustrate, defeated, and have nothing to do with the work. As the time we think about this, frequently, the Edison's achievements come to our minds, the famous man who almost developed 1300 new inventions named after him, however the clearly thing we know is that he hashad so many mistakes before he come comes to the exiting ending which even could make everyone give up the work on the half way. His usually saying is the thankful to the defeat, the frustrate way to the victory. In addition, the Flemyng, a famous bacteriologist, also found the Penicillin the most grandness work around medical field in the 20's century out from a failed experiment. From these we can witness that mistakes are the necessary ones used to be in the middle road of the success path.


Secondary, we could get lots of mistakes when doing a work. The more important what is more important is that if we could get something useful from these mistakes or how to use these to discover a new thought for doing the work more efficiently and more useful for the next step. The mistakes are priceless that we collect all the mistakes we faced for the certain work and analysis these failures to look over why these mistakes happened and how to avoid. After the full realizing realization of all the mistakes before the next time, the following work we could more care care more about these places and do our best to stop it its appearance again. It is the crucial process to the success. In summary, the mistakes do an extraordinary advantage to the discovery and progress of the work.


On the other hand, till the work achieved, there are also some no mistake processsome process without mistakes, but that isnot because they take even more careful about the operation but because they learned the mistakes which other people encountered before. Always, the more experience people who could do the work best than others probably met much more mistakes. The following people who plan to do the same work just need to take carefully about what the experience one failed ago. Result from that, we still obviously to see how importance of the mistakes not only what we makes but from former workers.


From the Goethe's words (and I paraphrase) “Man errs so long as strives." 结尾引用名言,8错We can say that don't be afraid of taking mistakes这种句子最好不要用, as what we discussed above; it can be discovered or progressed to the victory.

整体还不错,语言和例证还要加强,加油! 要睡觉觉了~~ :)

山涧风笛UID: 196557

最初由 nora0020 发布
[B]不是说Issue 没有什么模板么？ 背了点工具箱，不过感觉收效不大呢 [/B]

;)
那就多练习吧!
Bless~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

nora0020UID: 104886

最初由 山涧风笛 发布
[B];)
那就多练习吧!
Bless~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ [/B]

打算最后的一段时间保持一天两篇
现在准备多看看句子了，背一些希望能有用

nora0020UID: 104886

To：深谷幽兰
写了那么多了，想我帮你拍哪篇？