ARGU159 用电扇和空调&电费 看看有没进步

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

159,The nation of Claria covers a vast physical area. But despite wide geographic differences, many citizens are experiencing rising costs of electricity. A recent study of household electric costs in Claria found that families who cooled their houses with fans alone spent more on electricity than did families using air conditioners alone for cooling. However, those households that reported using both fans and air conditioners spent less on electricity than those households that used either fans or air conditioners alone. Thus, the citizens of Claria should follow the study's recommendation and use both air conditioners and fans in order to save money on electricity.

The author, in this argument, recommends that the Claria citizens should use both air conditioners and fans for cooling in order to save money on electricity. However, a careful consideration reveals how groundless the argument is.开头会不会太简单了?只提到了结论

One problem with this argument is that before concluding which is the best way to save money on electricity, the argument neglects the difference climate conditions of Claria. As it is said in the argument that the nation of Claria covers a vast physical area, it is entirely possible that the study result is come from several responses of different areas, which have extremely distinct weather conditions. Perhaps the people living in the north have natural cool weather, which needs almost no equipment for cooling in the hottest summer so that their electricity fee is the least. Therefore, lacking the information that whether the responses are from the different areas and the weather conditions there, the conclusion of the argument is unwarranted.

In addition, the argument also overlooked the diverse prices for electricity in different areas. Given that the study were done in the very districts with the same climate condition and even that they consumed the same amount of electricity, they would have to pay different amount of money if the price  is diverse, let alone they use dissimilar equipment for cooling and different amount of electricity. Thus, since the evidence of the argument is only one-side, it is inadequately to assess that the both use of air conditioners and fans will be the fittest way to save money.

Finally, the author hastily assumes that both use of air conditioners and fans is the best way to save money, which is not necessarily the case. It is possible that in the coolest area of the nation, people do not need to use any equipment for cooling at all. In this case, it is apparently that people there will pay the least for cooling. On the contrary, if they take the recommendation of this argument, they will have to pay more. Since the argument fails to rule out this or other alternative for saving money, the author cannot convince me that both use of fans and air conditioners will save money.  

To sum up, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, we need more details of the study, including the weather conditions and the price of the electricity of the responses.

imjasonUID: 176604

The author, in this argument, recommends that the Claria citizens should use both air conditioners and fans for cooling in order to save money on electricity. However, a careful consideration reveals how groundless the argument is.开头会不会太简单了?只提到了结论
我发现你开头的第一句话都会用in this argument隔开，觉得没有必要了。我觉得还是借鉴下范文的开头。个人意见

One problem with this argument is that before concluding which is the best way to save money on electricity, the argument neglects the difference climate conditions of Claria. As it is said in the argument that the nation of Claria covers a vast physical area, it is entirely possible that the study result is comecoming？ from several responses of different areas, which have extremely distinct weather conditions. Perhaps the people living in the north have naturally cool weather, which needs almost no equipment for cooling in the hottest summer so that their electricity fee is the least. Therefore, lacking the information that whether the responses are from the different areas and the weather conditions there, the conclusion of the argument is unwarranted.

In addition, the argument also overlooked the diverse prices for electricity in different areas. Given that the study were done in the very districts with the same climate condition and even that they consumed the same amount of electricity, they would have to pay different amount of money if the price is diverse, let alone they use dissimilar equipment for cooling and different amount of electricity. Thus, since the evidence of the argument is only one-side, it is inadequately to assess that the both use of air conditioners and fans will be the fittest way to save money.

Finally, the author hastily assumes that both use of air conditioners and fans is the best way to save money, which is not necessarily the case. It is possible that in the coolest area of the nation, people do not need to use any equipment for cooling at all.这里感觉是在重复第一个论点 In this case, it is apparently that people there will pay the least for cooling. On the contrary, if they take the recommendation of this argument, they will have to pay more. Since the argument fails to rule out this or other alternative for saving money, the author cannot convince me that both use of fans and air conditioners will save money.
我觉得漏掉了比较重要的是使用时间的长短上。还有对于ARGU的一个重要条件反射——STUDY。
To sum up, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, we need more details of the study, including the weather conditions and the price of the electricity of the responses.
有进步了，加油！

f11UID: 203714

The author, in this argument, recommends that the Claria citizens should use both air conditioners and fans for cooling in order to save money on electricity. However, a careful consideration[用analysis比较合适] reveals how groundless the argument is.

One problem with this argument is that before concluding which is the best way to save money on electricity, the argument neglects the difference [in/of] climate conditions of Claria. As it is said in the argument that the nation of Claria covers a vast physical area, it is entirely possible that the study result is come [coming] from several responses of different areas, which have extremely distinct weather conditions. Perhaps the people living in the north have natural cool weather, which needs almost no equipment for cooling in the hottest summer so that their electricity fee is the least. Therefore, lacking the information that [about] whether the responses are from the different areas and the weather conditions there, the conclusion of the argument is unwarranted.

In addition, the argument also overlooked the diverse prices for electricity in different areas. Given that the study were done in the very districts with the same climate condition and even that they consumed the same amount of electricity, they would have to pay different amount of money if the price is diverse, let alone they use dissimilar equipment for cooling and different amount of electricity. Thus, since the evidence of the argument is only one-side, it is inadequately to assess that the both use of air conditioners and fans will be the fittest way to save money.
[论据有点问题，如果当地的电费不变，省电与省钱是一致的，只不过不同地区间有差异，最省钱与省多少没有什么关系。所以考虑价格没多大帮助，除非电价过低/高，严重影响了save money的意义]

Finally, the author hastily assumes that both use of air conditioners and fans is the best way to save money, which is not necessarily the case. It is possible that in the coolest area of the nation, people do not need to use any equipment for cooling at all. In this case, it is apparently that people there will pay the least for cooling. On the contrary, if they take the recommendation of this argument, they will have to pay more. Since the argument fails to rule out this or other alternative for saving money, the author cannot convince me that both use of fans and air conditioners will save money.
[这与题目第一句，many citizens面临rising costs of electricity留下的fallacy有关.]

To sum up, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, we need more [investigation to the] details of the study, including the weather conditions and the price of the electricity of the responses.

还有一个很重要的错误—耗电的不止cooling devices.

第一次改别人的，不太会用代码，将就着。
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