Issue52 第8篇 不用多说了，拍吧

glassfrogUID: 170569

Issue52  第8篇 不用多说了，拍吧
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分2秒     449 words
从2005年3月4日21时43分到2005年3月4日22时45分
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Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony.
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A good education is the one that could encourage students to question and criticize. I said it is "good" because this kind is indeed the style that promotes social harmony. A harmony society is not the one without any disputations and objections. It is the one where the freedom of all the people is guaranteed. The only way to achieve this is to allow the people to question and criticize issues and make their own judgments.

Questioning and criticizing make sure the resources get the best possible arrangement. Let's say I would go to watch NBA tonight with my friends. We come to the ticket office first. There are bunches of different seats available. We would like to sit together. So here is the dilemma: some want to sit at the corner, while others prefer the side view. But if one choose the side seat and others just follow without criticizing, there is no way to make sure that most of the people have got what they want, or, the best result is get. Only by arguing between us and the minors make compromise can the most be satisfied. My scenario is simple, but the principle is available for various cases.

Criticizing also enhance the connections between the people, which is needed for a harmonious society. In the classroom, a student can have a much closer relationship with teacher or professor by asking questions. In the family, a husband could keep a sweet connection with his wife by giving suitable questions. In the office, a good question to your boss is the way to show him that you really care the issue he is handling.

The society without question could even be dangerous. Japan and German, the two main countries that cause the Second World War, have a seemingly harmony society when they were actually a bomb for war about 50 years ago. Nearly all the people are taught to obey their leaders absolutely without any question. They were not promoted to think critically, or speak freely. All the objective voices were depressed. Generally all the citizens get the idea that they were the most advanced people in the world, and they should liberate the whole world by carrying out war! Harmony is ruined.

On the other hand, the one who keep on bothering other people with endless criticizing and questions would be a jerk and unwelcome. Questioning and criticizing should be based on respect. An arguing without respect would only lead to quarrelling or even fighting. Technically there is no perfect thing on the earth, so that you can criticize everything if you want, which is surely a jerk's thing. So, only be critical to those that worth it.

ooajUID: 200299

[QUOTE]最初由 glassfrog 发布
[B]Issue52  第8篇 不用多说了，拍吧
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分2秒     449 words
从2005年3月4日21时43分到2005年3月4日22时45?.llong time no writing? :)

A goodwell-done education is the one that could encourage students to question and criticize. I said it is "good" because this kind is indeed the style that promotes social harmony. As it is "well done", this kind of education is accordingly to promote social harmonyA harmony tunefulsociety is not the one without any disputations and objections. It is the one where the freedom of all the people is guaranteed. The only way to achieve this is to allow the people to question and criticize issues and make their own judgments.

Questioning and criticizing make sure the resources get the best possible arrangement. Let's say For instanceI would go to watch NBA tonight with my friends. We come to the ticket office first. There are bunches of different seats available. We would like to sit together. So here is the dilemma: some want to sit at the corner, while others prefer the side view. But if one choose the side seat and others just follow without criticizing, there is no way to make sure that most of the people have got what they want, or, the best result is get. Only by arguing between us and the minors make compromise can the most be satisfied. My scenariocould scenario be used this way ;) I've no idea is simple, but the principle is available for various cases. this example is not so cogent that questioning and criticizing are not infered, is it?

Criticizing also enhance the connections between the people, which is needed for a harmonious society. In the classroom, a student can have a much closer relationship with teacher or professor by asking questions. In the family, a husband could keep a sweet connection with his wife by giving suitable questions. In the office, a good question to your boss is the way to show him that you really care the issue he is handling.

The society without question could even be dangerous. Japan and German, the two main countries that cause launchthe Second World War, have a seemingly harmony society when they were actually a bomb bombsfor war about 50 years ago. Nearly all the people are taught to obey their leaders absolutely without any question. They were not promoted to think critically, or speak freely. All the objective voices were depressed. Generally all the citizens get the idea that they were the most advanced people in the world, and they should liberate the whole world by carrying out war! Harmony is ruined. As for me, I'd like to utilize the Cultural Revolution as a glaring example

On the other hand, the one who keep on bothering other people with endless criticizing and questions would be a jerk and unwelcome. Questioning and criticizing should be based on respect. An arguing without respects would only lead to quarrelling or even fighting. confusions, chaos or even calamitiesTechnically there is no perfect thing on the earth, so that you can criticize everything if you want, which is surely a jerk's thing. So, only be critical to those that worth it.

你的口语很好啊，作文比较口语化，优点是很流畅，缺点是不过准确，另外有些例子不是特别有力，当然偶也是这一点比较欠缺啦 :D

glassfrogUID: 170569

ooaj， thank you so much!
You were right, I got a somewhat better oral English than my written stuff. I find you got a good sensibility to the vocabulary. Lack of vocabulary is my defect, which I am trying to make up nowadays.
I will show you a better essay next time.:)
By the way, I don't quite catch what you mean by your question raised at the very beginning.

ooajUID: 200299

[QUOTE]最初由 glassfrog 发布
[B]ooaj， thank you so much!
You were right, I got a somewhat better oral English than my written stuff. I find you got a good sensibility to the vocabulary. Lac..

long time no writting? 呵呵，好久没写了吧？

KangxiaoluUID: 177984

I said it is "good" 好另类的开头，不敢妄评because this kind is indeed the style that promotes social harmony. A harmony society is not the one without any disputations and objections. It is the one where the freedom of all the people is guaranteed. 这两句绝对能写成一句，A harmony society is not the superficial quiet symbolized by people’s compromise without any disputations and objections, but…还要请别人看看语法对不对，呵呵 The only way to achieve this is to allow the people to question and criticize issues and make their own judgments. 开头一定要出采
Questioning and criticizing make sure the resources get the best possible arrangement.每段开头还是要写漂亮嘛，可以说Question and criticize 引起社会关注…Let's say I would go to watch NBA tonight with my friends. 怎么像Toefl例子啊！怕是不能吧，虽然限时，还是要准备点例子，可以是高科技带来的负作用，这样就和科技类例子扯在一起了。We come to the ticket office first. There are bunches of different seats available. We would like to sit together. So here is the dilemma: some want to sit at the corner, while others prefer the side view. But if one choose the side seat and others just follow without criticizing, there is no way to make sure that most of the people have got what they want, or, the best result is get. Only by arguing between us and the minors make compromise can the most be satisfied. My scenario is simple, but the principle is available for various cases.

Criticizing also enhance the connections between the people, which is needed for a harmonious society. In the classroom, a student can have a much closer relationship with teacher or professor by asking questions. In the family, a husband could keep a sweet connection with his wife by giving suitable questions. In the office, a good question to your boss is the way to show him that you really care the issue he is handling.还好

The society without question could even be dangerous. 把For example写出来怎么也多两个字啊Japan and German, the two main countries that cause the Second World War, have a seemingly harmony society when they were actually a bomb for war about 50 years ago. Nearly all the people are taught to obey their leaders absolutely without any question. They were not promoted to think critically, or speak freely. All the objective voices were depressed. Generally all the citizens get the idea that they were the most advanced people in the world, and they should liberate the whole world by carrying out war! ThusHarmony is ruined. 例子就是要像这样才能吓唬考官嘛，但是一定要查证过哈，我历史不怎么懂！建议，例子和语言论证交叉使用，更有力度，这段除了例子只有2，3句，太单薄

On the other hand, the one who keep on bothering other people with endless criticizing and questions would be a jerk and unwelcome. Questioning and criticizing should be based on respect. An arguing without respect would only lead to quarrelling or even fighting. Technically there is no perfect thing on the earth, so that you can criticize everything if you want, which is surely a jerk's thing. So, only be critical to those that worth it.
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