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The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.
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Today, people's efficiency has been substantially increased due to the rapid technological advances. Although there does exist the probability that contemporaries are becoming machinery addicts to some extent, and that they are mired in questions like junk mails and traffic jams, I fundamentally agree with the speaker that the central goal of technological advancement is to increase people's efficiency , while their leisure time is much less, if no more than ,that of their ancestors.

There is no known aspect of a modern life on which technology does not exert its influence. Transportation revolution has made it possible that people travel among cities and countries in few hours. Washing machine, together with microwave oven, has finally freed thousands of housewives and househusbands from the burdensome house chores. Students who want to look up to reference books may google them on the Internet: Compared to turning to a book store, googling it on the Internet is much quicker, of broad information, and free of charge. All these priviledges, deriving from technological advances, obviously save people a great amount of time and labor. In consequence, people's efficiency increases.

It is true that people's efficiency has been higher thanks to the technological progress. But is efficiency the main goal of it? However, many people benefit from high-techs in other ways, say, entertainment. Satellite television and radio give consumers more choices: news programs, talk shows, soap series and whatever attractive to audience. And Ipod and CD players enable people to enjoy music wherever they are, at the home or on the street. One need go no further to see that technological advances have also transformed the way people how to entertain themselves. But recreation is never given more emphasis than the efficiency to be the goal of technological strides. I cannot imagine a poor man who, not having any food to feed his stomach for three days, will use the welfare money he suddenly gets to buy a TV set(if he can afford it ) ,instead of a hamburger. In other words, when entertainments are found wanting by people, they seldom worry about their food and rent, which is impossible without the increase of efficiency. In this light, increase in efficiency is undoubtedly the primary goal of technological advancement.

Though efficiency has brought us some many benefits, people do not necessarily have more leisure nonetheless .Take a driver for supporting example. Before one reaps the convenience from his/her fancy car, it takes oneself considerable time, usually months, to exercise and acquaint traffic rules. For a student who googles a book on the Internet, as I mentioned above, to quickly and accurately get the book information he/she craves for, it means that he/she must spend hours on learning how to use a search engine first .However, for the potentials of technology to fully occur, expenditure of time on learning seems inevitable. As a result, when many people engage themselves in the mastery of whatever technological to keep pace with the others, there are less leisure time for them.

In conclusion, technological advancement is mainly directed to increase people's efficiency in almost every aspect of their daily life. And this increase in efficiency is accompanied by the diminishing leisure time at people's disposal, much of which has been spent on learning.

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今天只改了一篇，熄灯了，明天一定改

用空看看我的, 第一篇呢, 呵呵!!! 谢谢大家

Issure30 同主题十 技术进步与休闲时间
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Kangxiaolu,你的作文帖子打不开....

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Today, people's efficiency has been substantially increased due to the rapid technological advances. Although there does exist the probability that contemporaries are becoming machinery addicts to some extent, and that they are mired in questions like junk mails and traffic jams 用得好，学习, I fundamentally agree with the speaker that the central goal of technological advancement is to increase people's efficiency, while their leisure time is much less, if 是不是改用even? no more than, that of their ancestors.

There is no known aspect of a modern life on which technology does not exert its influence.这句没怎么懂，请赐教，相信你是会好好写第一句的同学，是改编的好句子？ Transportation revolution has made it possible that people travel among cities and countries in few hours. Washing machine, together with microwave oven, has finally freed thousands of housewives and househusbands from the burdensome house chores. Students who want to look up 是不是加上要找的东西？to reference books may google这个问题我也想问问，能不能这么用，还请高人赐教them on the Internet: Compared to turning to a book store, googling it on the Internet is much quicker, of broad information, and free of charge. All these priviledges 拼写？privileges？, deriving from technological advances, obviously save people a great amount of time and labor. In consequence, people's efficiency increases.

It is true that people's efficiency has been higher thanks to the technological progress. But is efficiency the main goal of it? 如果问了问题，考官就要找答案对吧，做GRE阅读的时候，你要想弄清楚作者意图是不是会直接找关键直接的句子而不是看例子吧，那考官也懒吧，所以论证骨架很重要，我找啊，第一句就是我下面加了颜色的那句，还没看懂，然后就你就换了个意思重复下，就结论了，是不是有点晕啊e benefit from high-techs in other ways, say, entertainment. Satellite television and radio give consumers more choices: news programs, talk shows, soap series and whatever attractive to audience. And Ipod and CD players enable people to enjoy music wherever they are, at the home or on the street. One need go no further to see that technological advances have also transformed the way people how to entertain themselves. But recreation is never given more emphasis than the efficiency to be the goal of technological strides.意思没有表达清楚 I cannot imagine a poor man who, not having any food to feed his stomach for three days, will use the welfare money he suddenly gets to buy a TV set(if he can afford it ) ,instead of a hamburger. In other words, when entertainments are found wanting by people, they seldom worry about their food and rent, which is impossible without the increase of efficiency. In this light, increase in efficiency is undoubtedly the primary goal of technological advancement.这段的意思我翻译给你看，你看下你思路对吗？很多人由于科技受益，例子是娱乐方式的多样化，但是和娱乐相比，人们更重提高效率。例子是人只有把吃的问题解决了才能娱乐。然后马上就是换句话说when entertainments are found wanting by people, they seldom worry about their food and rent, which is impossible without the increase of efficiency，就有结论了，通过中文意思就知道你是不是没说清楚啊？简单说就是例子不支持结论

Though efficiency has brought us some many benefits, people do not necessarily have more leisure nonetheless .Take a driver for supporting example. Before one reaps the convenience from his/her fancy car, it takes oneself considerable time, usually months, to exercise and acquaint traffic rules. For a student who googles a book on the Internet, as I mentioned above, to quickly and accurately get the book information he/she craves for, it means that he/she must spend hours on learning how to use a search engine first .However, for the potentials of technology to fully occur, expenditure of time on learning seems inevitable. As a result, when many people engage themselves in the mastery of whatever technological to keep pace with the others, there are less leisure time for them. 例子也有点问题，你先改改吧，呵呵

In conclusion, technological advancement is mainly directed to increase people's efficiency in almost every aspect of their daily life. And this increase in efficiency is accompanied by the diminishing leisure time at people's disposal, much of which has been spent on learning.
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Issure30 同主题十 技术进步与休闲时间
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There is no known aspect of a modern life on which technology does not exert its influence

原句来自一本原版的英语教科书，是这样di :There is no known culture in which art is not present.我借用了句式．每一种文化都有艺术的存在．

may google them on the Internet

在２１世纪报上看的．小的觉得没有问题．水平很低，胆子也很小，不敢胡编乱造．：）

意思重复下，就结论了，是不是有点晕啊

本来想写成那种一边行文，一边分析的段子di,不过好象玩丢了．我再看看．．．．

和娱乐相比，人们更重提高效率。例子是人只有把吃的问题解决了才能娱乐。

不是．我想说的意思是，人们只有在满足了低级的生理需要的情况下，才会有高级的娱乐需要．而利益的提高给人们带来了食物，房子．由此，人们才有闲钱和闲时间去娱乐（这点我没写）．所以，利益的提高是技术进步的更为基础和重要的目标．
不过，既然你理解的不是很对，只能说明是我的表达还存在问题，努力ing~~~

例子也有点问题，你先改改吧，呵呵

不知道是哪一个有问题，还是两个都有问题，是什么问题呢？

谢谢你这么认真的改我的作文，我会同样认真的回改，等着我的砖头吧
回去审视自己的作文了我．．．．．