Issue41 非主流研究，同主题，欢迎砖头！

AlierUID: 159518

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41。Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.
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Debate on the role such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal play in the society have long been discussed. As Hegel said, "Whatever existed is reasonable." Such inquiries are without exception. It is undeniable that they to some extent help  to satisfy human needs that could not be satisfied by current science. However, the role they play is far from vital and even harmful.

First, we have to admit the benefits of inquiry on such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic or spiritual research. In retrospect of history, we can clearly see that curiosity is an inborn character of us human beings. When faced with new, unknown, or unexplainable phenomenon, we humans are always driven by our curiosity to try finding out the answers. In such kinds of situations,when mainstream science could not help, we tend to borrow support from non-mainstream areas of inquiry. Besides, human beings also share the common desire to predict the future. The feeling of uncertainty often makes people feel fear and nervous, and they are naturally afraid of making any bad decisions that may affect their future even destiny. These are why fortune-telling, though disputed by generations, now still exist in most parts of the world. To say from these aspects, such non-mainstream inquiry actually play as an effective understudy for mainstream science.

However, besides what mentioned above, we are hard-pressed to find any other evidences showing the indispensability of such inquiries to the society. Looking back into the history of society progress, we can clearly identify the important impetus mainstream science has produced to every breakthrough: the invention of steam engine directly brought about the famous industrial revolution; the discovery of electricity fundamentally changed our life; the prevailing of Internet provides us quite new life style. While, in all the contributions, we could find little done by such non-mainstream inquiry as fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, which almost remain the same since their rollout long times ago.

Further, overdue accenting on belief in these non-mainstream areas of inquiry may cause negative or even disastrous results to the society. Since such kinds of inquiry are almost unreasonable an illogical, they are likely to become the tools of swindlers to fool people or even be used by the rulers as the spiritual weapons to realize their despotism. Chinese history is replete with such examples. Especially in the feudal age, not to say that the monarchs all claimed themselves as the sons of dragon--a kind of deiform animal respected by ancient chinese, to maintain their ruling, even those rebels also used to turn to such non-mainstream inquiry, say astrology, to borrow support to justify their deity for ruling. Besides, too much belief in fortune-telling and psychic power may to one extreme lead to a person's idleness of just waiting for future fortune without making efforts to achieve it, and to the other extreme eviscerate a person's passion to improve his life and make him pessimistic towards the  future. Evidently, either of these results is beneficial for a person's healthy living and developing, neither of which is what we are willing to see.                    

Therefore, to sum up, under the presumption of admitting their value and benefits to the society in a limited extent, we should also be alert of all the possible bad effects they may bring about and thus hold a objective attitude towards them.

coweiliangUID: 195905

take a seat !

sxleeUID: 200505

Debate on the role such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal play in the society have long been discussed[debate and discussion 重复了吧？Debate on the role of……has being long existed.行不？]. As Hegel said, "Whatever existed is reasonable." Such inquiries are without exception. It is undeniable that they to some extent help to satisfy human needs that could not be satisfied[避免重复应换一个，met] by current science. However, the role they play is far from vital and even harmful.

First, we have to admit the benefits of inquiry on such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic or spiritual research. ［承认ＮＭ的益处；］In retrospect of history, we can clearly see that curiosity is an inborn character of us human beings. When faced with new, unknown, or unexplainable phenomenon, we humans are always driven by our curiosity to try finding out the answers. In such kinds of situations, when mainstream science could not help, we tend to borrow support from non-mainstream areas of inquiry. Besides, human beings also share the common desire to predict the future. The feeling of uncertainty often makes people feel fear[fearful] and nervous, and they are naturally afraid of making any bad decisions that may affect their future even destiny. These are why fortune-telling, though disputed by generations, now still exist in most parts of the world. To say from these aspects, such non-mainstream inquiry actually play as an effective understudy for mainstream science.

However, besides what mentioned above, we are hard-pressed to find any other evidences showing the indispensability of such inquiries to the society.　［ＮＭ没有必要性］ Looking back into the history of society progress, we can clearly identify the important impetus mainstream science has produced to every breakthrough: the invention of steam engine directly brought about the famous industrial revolution; the discovery of electricity fundamentally changed our life; the prevailing of Internet provides us quite new life style. While, in all the contributions, we could find little done by such non-mainstream inquiry as fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, which almost remain the same since their rollout long times ago.[这段是不是分析的不太好啊，前面说主流科学作为主要的推动力给人类带来了breakthrough; 而后面有说，这些进步没有一个是有非主流学科所带来的！！]

Further, overdue accenting［ undue….］ on belief in these non-mainstream areas of inquiry may cause negative or even disastrous results to the society. ［ＮＭ的害处］Since such kinds of inquiry are almost unreasonable and illogical, they are likely to become the tools of swindlers to fool people or even be used by the rulers as the spiritual weapons to realize their despotism. Chinese history is replete with such examples. Especially in the feudal age, not to say that the monarchs all claimed themselves as the sons of dragon--a kind of deiform animal respected by ancient Chinese, to maintain their ruling, even those rebels also used to turn to such non-mainstream inquiry, say astrology, to borrow support to justify their deity for ruling. Besides, too much belief in fortune-telling and psychic power may to one extreme lead to a person's idleness of just waiting for future fortune without making efforts to achieve it, and to the other extreme eviscerate a person's passion to improve his life and make him pessimistic towards the future. Evidently, either of these results is beneficial for a person's healthy living and developing, neither of which is what we are willing to see. ［这段论的不错，偶是没想到啊！！］

Therefore, to sum up, under the presumption of admitting their value and benefits to the society in a limited extent, we should also be alert of all the possible bad effects they may bring about and thus hold a[n] objective attitude towards them.
［总体来说，写的很好，比偶写的好多了，学习中！··
语言很好，词汇量很大，有好多偶都不会用的！！
唯一缺点：觉得Ｂ２不太恰当！！也许是我想错了！！］

AlierUID: 159518

sxlee，谢谢你啊，你说的很对，我当时写的时候就是在b2卡了很久，感觉不知道内部该怎么展开。
ps：你不要谦虚哈，我这个是没有限时成功的，我也还要多多努力才行呢。
大家一起加油哈！

coweiliangUID: 195905

sorry, 我今天可能来不及看了， 考完以后一定不上。 :)

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

Debate on the role such non-mainstream areas as Debate on the role of non-mainstream such as~~~ astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal play in the society have long been discussed. As Hegel said, "Whatever existed is reasonable." Such inquiries are without exception. It is undeniable that they to some extent help to satisfy human needs that could not be satisfied by current science. However, the role they play is far from vital and even harmful.

First, we have to admit the benefits of inquiry on such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic or spiritual research. In retrospect of history, we can clearly see that curiosity is an inborn character of us human beings. When faced with new, unknown, or unexplainable phenomenon, we humans are always driven by our curiosity to try finding out the answers. In such kinds of situations,when mainstream science could not help, we tend to borrow 借助于~~~不是这样讲吧! get, obtain怎么样? support from non-mainstream areas of inquiry. Besides, human beings also share the common desire to predict the future. The feeling of uncertainty often makes people feel fear and nervous, and they are naturally afraid of making any bad decisions that may affect their future even destiny. These are why fortune-telling, though disputed by generations, now still exist in most parts of the world. To say 偶个人觉得see, say这之类的词太口语化了,不适合用在AW里. from these aspects, such non-mainstream inquiry actually play as an effective understudy for mainstream science.

However, besides what mentioned above, we are hard-pressed to find any other evidences showing the indispensability of such inquiries to the society. Looking back into the history of society progress, we can clearly identify the important impetus mainstream science has produced to every breakthrough: the invention of steam engine directly brought about the famous industrial revolution; the discovery of electricity fundamentally changed our life; the prevailing of Internet provides us quite a new life style. While, in all the contributions, we could find little done by such non-mainstream inquiry as fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, which almost remain the same since their rollout long times ago.

Further, overdue accenting on belief in these non-mainstream areas of inquiry may cause negative or even disastrous results to the society. Since such kinds of inquiry are almost unreasonable an illogical, they are likely to become the tools of swindlers to fool people or even be used by the rulers as the spiritual weapons to realize their despotism. Chinese history is replete with such examples. Especially in the feudal age, not to say not to mention that the monarchs all claimed themselves as the sons of dragon--a kind of deiform animal respected by ancient chinese, to maintain their ruling, even those rebels also used to turn to such non-mainstream inquiry, say astrology, to borrow support 重复用词 to justify their deity for ruling. Besides, too much belief in fortune-telling and psychic power may to one extreme lead to a person's idleness of just waiting for future fortune without making efforts to achieve it, and to the other extreme eviscerate a person's passion to improve his life and make him pessimistic towards the future. Evidently, either of these results is beneficial for a person's healthy living and developing, neither of which is what we are willing to see.

Therefore, to sum up, under the presumption of admitting their value and benefits to the society in a limited extent, we should also be alert of all the possible bad effects they may bring about and thus hold a objective attitude towards them.

总体来说还不错, 结构清晰, 论证得也还行! 语言还可以再加强些. 是限时的吗? 如果限时能写到这样已经很不错了! 再接再厉! 加油!  :D

coweiliangUID: 195905

不好意思哦，考完就出去玩了，一直没给你改呢，现在给你看那篇nonmainstream & mainstream sciences那篇啊 :)


bwt：你的悄悄话满了，希望你能看到了～～晚了sorry喽

coweiliangUID: 195905

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41。Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.
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Debate on the role such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal play in the society have long been discussed. As Hegel said, "Whatever existed is reasonable." Such inquiries are without exception. 【Nonmainstream sciences, such as ……., have been long existed in our society.】It is undeniable that they to some extent help to satisfy human needs that could not be satisfied by current science. However, the role they play is far from vital and even harmful.【开头显得太迂回了，不够简洁明了哦】

First, we have to admit the benefits of inquiry on such non-mainstream areas as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic or spiritual research. 【Firstly, the advantage of …. is obvious. 】In retrospect of history, we can clearly see that curiosity is an inborn character of us human beings. When faced with new, unknown, or unexplainable phenomenon, we humans are always driven by our curiosity to try finding out the answers. In such kinds of situations【 in such situations 】,when mainstream science【 s 】 could not help, 【it is human’s psychological inclination that 】we tend to borrow【 rely on the 】 support from non-mainstream areas of inquiry. Besides, human beings also share the common desire to predict the future. The feeling of uncertainty 【直接用uncertainty就行 】often makes people feel fear and nervous, and they are naturally afraid of making any bad decisions that may affect their future even destiny. 【这句什么意思哦，没看懂。。。。】These are 【the reasons 】why fortune-telling, though disputed by generations, now still exist in most parts of the world. To say from these aspects【  In this aspect】, such non-mainstream inquiry actually play as an effective understudy for mainstream science.

However, besides what mentioned above, we are hard-pressed to find any other evidences showing the indispensability of such inquiries to the society. Looking back into【重复了，换一个：although history,】 the history of society progress, we can clearly identify the important impetus mainstream science has produced to every breakthrough: the invention of steam engine directly brought about the famous industrial revolution; the discovery of electricity fundamentally changed our life; the prevailing of Internet provides us quite new life style. While, in all the contributions, we could find little done by such non-mainstream inquiry as fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, which almost remain the same since their rollout long times ago.
【这段说得和段中心句的意思相反了呢。】
Further, overdue accenting on belief in these non-mainstream areas of inquiry may cause negative or even disastrous results to the society. Since such kinds of inquiry are almost unreasonable an illogical【????】, they are likely to become the tools of swindlers to fool people or even be used by the rulers as the spiritual weapons to realize their despotism【used by the absolutists to control the public minds and violate the nature of democracy.】. Chinese history is replete with such examples. Especially in the feudal age, not to say that the monarchs all claimed themselves as the sons of dragon--a kind of deiform animal respected by ancient chinese, to maintain their ruling, even those rebels also used to turn to such non-mainstream inquiry, say astrology, to borrow support to justify their deity for ruling. Besides, too much belief in fortune-telling and psychic power may to one extreme lead to a person's idleness of just waiting for future fortune without making efforts to achieve it, and to the other extreme eviscerate a person's passion to improve his life and make him pessimistic towards the future. Evidently, either of these results is beneficial for a person's healthy living and developing, neither of which is what we are willing to see.
【我觉得中国古代这个例子不用这么展开地详细说，可以用短例子列举：the periods of the feudal China and the medieval Europe are the most egregious examples…….,另外在上面两段里面有一个问题：没有提mainstream sciences,我觉得两者应该穿插着来说更好，比如对比两者的判断基础（科学是在真正事实和实验基础上得来的），对社会产生的影响等等,还有，正是为科学阻碍了真正科学的发展，阻碍了社会的发展】
Therefore, to sum up, under the presumption of admitting their value and benefits to the society in a limited extent, we should also be alert of all the possible bad effects they may bring about and thus hold a objective attitude towards them.
【嗯，我觉得文章意思还是挺清晰的，因为考完了刚好可以给你细细看看语言层面所以着重给你改了b1段，别看我改了很多，总体来说你写得还是挺好的哦，加油啊！】

千年一叹2000UID: 192373

我觉得你写的已经很好了,真的.你几号考试呀?