issue41 同主题 所谓尽人事,知天命!

猫猫624UID: 171232

41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."

Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal pursuits are created by predecessors in ancient time, and once played a vital role for a long time in human's history. I concede that these nonmainstream areas of inquiry serve to satisfy some human needs psychologically, which cannot be met by mainstream science. However, people should not overlook some potential harm inflicting on human beings.
(非主流领域帮助人们预测未来)
Nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy people's interest in predicting the future. Human beings by nature attempt to know what will happen in the foreseeable future. In ancient times, people design various ways, such as astrology and fortune-telling to predict the results of impending events and the destiny of themselves. Astrology is a study of how events on the earth correspond to the positions and movement of celestial bodies, which is associated with the climate, the seasons and the growing condition of plants. In ancient time of China, there were astrologers who specially service for rulers to predict the destiny of countries. As for common people, they desire to know the consequences of tough stuff and ask fortune-tellers for the direction.
（非主流领域给人们带来精神安慰）
In addition, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal help people make decisions and bring certain psychological relief. When it comes to ordinary persons, practical experience informs us that faced with numerous choices; every person may feel confused and uncertain. In this case, they want to shift this burden to certain authority outside. Even the end is disappointed, they may believe that it is the fatality and cannot be altered by human force. Besides, due the increasingly severe burden from life, modern people require some psychological relief to dispel depression resulted from failure in career and aloneness brought about rapid pace of life. Therefore, nonmainstream brings about some psychological relief, which cannot be substituted by mainstream science.
（非主流领域帮助人解释现象）
Another reason for the advent and development of nonmainstreasm inquiry lies in the fact that facing myriads of mysterious phenomena in the natural world, people cannot explain them clearly. For example, why these exist changes of reasons? Where natural disasters and disease come? In ancient time, limited by technological and scientific knowledge, human beings could not explain the reasons for these mysterious phenomena. Even in modern time, it is believed that many questions cannot be answered in reasonable methods. Some cases in point are the origin of the Earth, the Sun, and whether there exists life in universe.
（非主流领域会带来负面影响）
On the other hand, even foregoing functions of nonmainstream mentioned above, people should not neglect its harmful impacts may outweigh the interests and mislead people to make false decisions. Because nonmainstream is not rooted in reason, it often used by some people to deceive the mass. For example, in some poverty places, people do not go to hospital, but ask for blessing of god. Besides, believing everything in one’s life is doomed beforehand, people have no enough courage to confront and overcome difficulties. They suppose failure is attributable to lack of good fortune, rather than unintelligence and undiligence. Nonmainstreasm inquiry can lead to passive attitude toward life, exercising adverse impacts on the society.

In conclusion, nonmainstream areas of inquiry can help people forecast the future, satisfy some psychological needs of human beings and explain some mysterious phenomena. They once played an important role in people’s life especially in ancient time. Nowadays, nonmainstream areas of inquiry still address some psychological needs of ordinary people which cannot be met by mainstream researches. However, because unintelligence and lack of reasonability, people should wary of their harmful impacts.

nashaUID: 175030

Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal pursuits are created{can be traced back to ancient time你的意思是说可以渊源已久吧,我觉得如果是是由前辈们创造的，好象没有必要,都是人类创造的.主要是说很早以前就有}by predecessors in ancient time, and once played a vital role for a long time in human's history. I concede that these nonmainstream areas of inquiry serve to satisfy some human needs psychologically, which cannot be met by mainstream science. However, people should not overlook some potential harm inflicted on human beings. {清楚,好}
(非主流领域帮助人们预测未来)
Nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy people's interest in predicting the future. Human beings by nature attempt to know what will happen in the foreseeable future. In ancient times, people design various ways, such as astrology and fortune-telling to predict the results of impending events and the destiny of themselves. Astrology is a study of how events on the earth correspond to the positions and movement of celestial bodies, which is associated with the climate, the seasons and the growing condition of plants.{这样也是好办法,把astrology解释一下,可以增加字数,也不显得多余} In ancient time of China, there were astrologers who specially service for rulers to predict the destiny of countries. As for common people, they desire to know the consequences of tough stuff and ask fortune-tellers for the direction.
（非主流领域给人们带来精神安慰）
In addition, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal help people make decisions and bring certain psychological relief. As for common people, practical experience informs us that faced with numerous choices; every person may feel confused and uncertain. In this case, they want to shift this burden to certain authority outside. Even the end is disappointed, they may believe that it is the fatality and cannot be altered by human force. Besides, due the increasingly severe burden from life, modern people require some psychological relief to dispel depression resulted from failure in career and aloneness{loneliness} brought about rapid pace of life. Therefore, nonmainstream brings about some psychological relief, which cannot be substituted by mainstream science.{结论句的前半部分感觉扣题了,可以后半部分文章没有论述为什么主流科学就不能代替了,感觉只是了一方面,然后突然来了个比较}
（非主流领域帮助人解释现象）
Another reason for the advent and development of nonmainstreasm inquiry lies in the fact that facing myriads of mysterious phenomena in the natural world, people cannot explain them clearly. For example, why these exist changes of reasons?{什么意思?} Where natural disasters and disease come{不要用这么简单的词汇呀,用occur或者其他的都行,反正不用这个老太太都知道的词汇,"来是卡猛,去是够,点头也司,摇头楼"}? In ancient time, limited by technological and scientific knowledge, human beings could not explain the reasons for these mysterious phenomena. Even in modern time, it is believed that many questions cannot be answered in reasonable methods. Some cases in point are the origin of the Earth, the Sun, and whether there exists life in universe.{这里提高了前面一个自然段说到的,主流科学也解释不了一些现象,还举了例子,好}
（非主流领域会带来负面影响）
On the other hand, even foregoing functions of nonmainstream mentioned above{这个句子完整吗?even if nonmainstream serves human beings in the foregoing aspects mentioned above,你再看看怎么改}, people should not neglect its harmful impacts may outweigh the interests and {和前面的句子不太对得上，我认为是 people should not overstate the functions of nonmainstream because it also has side effects on the development of our civilization. 大概是这个意思,你参考吧} mislead people to make false decisions. Because nonmainstream is not rooted in reason, it often used by some people to deceive the mass. For example, in some poverty places, people do not go to hospital, but ask for blessing of god. Besides, believing everything in one’s life is doomed beforehand, people have no enough courage to confront and overcome difficulties. They suppose failure is attributable to lack of good fortune, rather than unintelligence and undiligence. Nonmainstreasm inquiry can lead to passive attitude toward life, exercising adverse impacts on the society.{例子很清楚}

In conclusion, nonmainstream areas of inquiry can help people forecast the future, satisfy some psychological needs of human beings and explain some mysterious phenomena. They once played an important role in people’s life especially in ancient time. Nowadays, nonmainstream areas of inquiry still address some psychological needs of ordinary people which cannot be met by mainstream researches.{可以合并成一个句子,they has played an indispensable role in addressing a certain inherent psychological problems of humans both in an ancient and modern society. } However, because unintelligence and lack of reasonability{However, without the scientific foundation, nonmainstream can merely function as a decoration rather than a basic architecture of human being's lives.}people should wary of their harmful impacts.{点题就行了,最后一句可以不用}

{我觉得这篇文章很不好写,猫猫写的不错,我想一定是限时写的,而且猫猫的文章有一个很值得学习的地方,就是思路很清楚,有主题句,然后举例,说理,总结.开头和结尾绝对是相呼应的,在看猫猫的几篇文章都发现这点，很不错。继续努力.我也在写这篇,可是还不知道怎么谋篇,写了再发过来.}

疯子兔八哥UID: 196616

好的,拜读下

疯子兔八哥UID: 196616

issue41 同主题 所谓尽人事,知天命!
41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."

Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal pursuits are created by predecessors in ancient time, and once played a vital role for a long time in human's history. I concede that these nonmainstream areas of inquiry serve to satisfy some human needs psychologically, which cannot be met by mainstream science. However, people should not overlook some potential harm inflicting on human beings. (不错:))
(非主流领域帮助人们预测未来)
Nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy people's interest in predicting the future. Human beings by nature attempt to know what will happen in the foreseeable future. In ancient times, people design various ways, such as astrology and fortune-telling to predict the results of impending events and the destiny of themselves. Astrology is a study of how events on the earth correspond to the positions and movement of celestial bodies, which is associated with the climate, the seasons and the growing condition of plants. In ancient time of China, there were astrologers who specially service for rulers to predict the destiny of countries. As for common people, they desire to know the consequences of tough stuff and ask fortune-tellers for the direction.
（非主流领域给人们带来精神安慰）
In addition, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal help people make decisions and bring certain psychological relief. When it comes to ordinary persons, practical experience informs us that faced with numerous choices; every person may feel confused and uncertain. In this case, they want to shift this burden to certain authority outside. Even the end is disappointed, they may believe that it is the fatality and cannot be altered by human force. Besides, due the increasingly severe burden from life, modern people require some psychological relief to dispel depression resulted from failure in career and aloneness brought about rapid pace of life. Therefore, nonmainstream brings about some psychological relief, which cannot be substituted by mainstream science.
（非主流领域帮助人解释现象）
Another reason for the advent and development of nonmainstreasm inquiry lies in the fact that facing myriads of mysterious phenomena in the natural world, people cannot explain them clearly. For example, why these exist changes of reasons??? Where natural disasters and disease come?不太懂这句 In ancient time, limited by technological and scientific knowledge, human beings could not explain the reasons for these mysterious phenomena. Even in modern time, it is believed that many questions cannot be answered in reasonable methods还不如说没有reasonable answer. Some cases in point (other cases in this point) are the origin of the Earth, the Sun, and whether there exists life in universe.
（非主流领域会带来负面影响）
On the other hand, even foregoing functions of nonmainstream mentioned above, people should not neglect its harmful impacts may outweigh the interests and mislead people to make false decisions. Because nonmainstream is not rooted in reason不懂，不应该用reason这个词吧, it often used by some people to deceive the mass. For example, in some poverty places, people do not go to hospital, but ask for blessing of god.~~~~表诉有点问题many people was taught to bless for the god, once ill, to relieve their pain instead of go for doctors  Besides, believing everything in one’s life is doomed beforehand, people have no enough courage to confront and overcome difficulties. They suppose failure is attributable to lack of good fortuneThey always tend to attribute their failure to something as destiny, rather than unintelligence and undiligence. (最多也只有indiligent)??? rather than struggle for the success no matter what difficultiey may face,Nonmainstreasm inquiry can lead to passive attitude toward life, exercising adverse impacts on the society.这段想法是好的，表诉有点问题，自己再斟酌下

In conclusion, nonmainstream areas of inquiry can help people forecast the future, satisfy some psychological needs（satisfy needs?） of human beings and explain some mysterious phenomena. They once played an important role in people’s life especially in ancient time. Nowadays, nonmainstream areas of inquiry still address some psychological needs of ordinary people which cannot be met by mainstream researches. However, because unintelligence and lack of reasonability, people should wary of their harmful impacts.
总体写得不错，思路清晰明了，应该是5分作文:)
能够写到这个水平，向你学习啦:)
最后两三段语言有点小毛病，
应该是写到最后时间太紧了，已经很不错哦，比我偶强多了:)
个人愚见，参考参考就好了

猫猫624UID: 171232

疯子兔八哥,谢谢拍砖,鼓励!!

KangxiaoluUID: 177984

Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling and psychic and paranormal pursuits are created by predecessors in ancient time, and once played a vital role for a long time in human's history. I concede that these nonmainstream areas of inquiry serve to satisfy some human needs psychologically, which cannot be met by mainstream science. However, people should not overlook some potential harm inflicting on human beings.
(非主流领域帮助人们预测未来)
Nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy people's interest in predicting the future. Human beings by nature attempt to know what will happen in the foreseeable future. In ancient times, people design various ways, such as astrology and fortune-telling to predict the results of impending events and the destiny of themselves. Astrology is a study of how events on the earth correspond to the positions and movement of celestial bodies, which is associated with the climate, the seasons and the growing condition of plants. In ancient time of China, there were astrologers who specially service for rulers to predict the destiny of countries. As for common people, they desire to know the consequences of tough stuff and ask fortune-tellers for the direction.不错
（非主流领域给人们带来精神安慰）
In addition, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal help people make decisions and bring certain psychological relief. When it comes to ordinary persons, practical experience informs us that faced with numerous choices什么方面的选择让人们困惑？; every person may feel confused and uncertain. In this case, they want to shift this burden to certain authority outside 是不是直接说非主流领域的权威要好些呢？. Even the end is disappointed, they may believe that it is the fatality and cannot be altered by human force. Besides, due the increasingly severe burden from life, modern people require some psychological relief to dispel depression resulted from failure in career and aloneness brought about rapid pace of life. Therefore, nonmainstream brings about some psychological relief, 这为什么只提了下呢，请赐教！这段不是写非主流领域给人们带来精神安慰，列举再多的社会压力也不能证明它就是有这个功效啊！which cannot be substituted by mainstream science.
（非主流领域帮助人解释现象）
Another reason for the advent and development of nonmainstreasm inquiry lies in the fact that facing myriads of mysterious phenomena in the natural world, people cannot explain them clearly. For example, why these existexistent？ changes of reasons? Where natural disasters and disease come? In ancient time, limited by technological and scientific knowledge, human beings could not explain the reasons for these mysterious phenomena. Even in modern time, it is believed that many questions cannot be answered in reasonable methods. Some cases in point are the origin of the Earth, the Sun, and whether there exists life in universe. 这段感觉你在偷懒哦，楼主语言功底好，泛泛而谈就够自数，但是和上一段一样没有正面论述，我觉得这样写一段这种感觉的就好，两段有点过了…
（非主流领域会带来负面影响）
On the other hand, even foregoing functions of nonmainstream mentioned above, people should not neglect its harmful impacts may outweigh the interests and mislead people to make false decisions. Because nonmainstream is not rooted in reason, it often used by some people to deceive the mass.没有根据才好骗人？是不是我没读懂这句，见谅啊楼主！ For example, in some poverty places, people do not go to hospital, but ask for blessing of god. Besides, believing everything in one’s life is doomed beforehand, people have no enough courage to confront and overcome difficulties. They suppose failure is attributable to lack of good fortune, rather than unintelligence and undiligence词典里没有这个单词，呵呵，有可能是容量太小了. Nonmainstreasm inquiry can lead to passive attitude toward life, exercising adverse impacts on the society.这段就很好，没有偷懒，厉害！

In conclusion, nonmainstream areas of inquiry can help people forecast the future, satisfy some psychological needs of human beings and explain some mysterious phenomena. They once played an important role in people’s life especially in ancient time. Nowadays, nonmainstream areas of inquiry still address some psychological needs of ordinary people which cannot be met by mainstream researches. However, because unintelligence and lack of reasonability, people should wary of their harmful impacts.
赞同楼上朋友的看法，文章思路超清晰！我喜欢，学习，还请楼主有时间就帮看看我的烂文章…今天快断电了，明天再上来找茬，呵呵

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Issure30 同主题十一 非主流领域
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=263757
Argument38 鱼和感冒
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=263758
Issure30 同主题十 技术进步与休闲时间
https://bbs.gter.net/showthre ... 1352670#post1352670

猫猫624UID: 171232

undiligence,呵呵自己造的,应该是laziness
there exist .....=there be
第2段最后想写现代社会里非主流同样能够提供精神安慰.

谢谢楼上拍砖.明天回拍!