issue218 艺术的价值 请帮我看看~~~必回拍~~

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In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
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Although I concede that in order for some works of art to have merit, the majority of their audience should understand them, this understanding is not always necessary when judging an art work as the speaker says.
For an art work to achieve its social value, it should be understandable to most audiences which(it) is pointed to , since understanding ,which further leads to appreciation, is the first step to arouse their emotions. Calligraphy, for a fitting example, is a unique art form only found in China. While a particular artistic work successfully promotes the feeling of membership of Chinese culture, calligraphers should make certain that their audiences have understood how these handwritings differ from ordinary handwritings. Then the meanings of the art work will be accessible to the people, and unite the society through their common feelings of being part of it.  On a large level, understanding from the majority of art audience plays an essential role for an art work to function socially, achieving its goal through people's shared aesthetical principals.

In other circumstances, however, the understanding of the general public is not an indispensable factor when evaluating an artistic work. Take the classical modernist paintings for instance. Abstract paintings created by Picasso, Monet, and Van Gogh all require highly developed skills of looking and familiarity of paintings that belong to other painters, or other times. Without special training on how to appreciate these paintings, and absent of comments form critics, will they still be understandable to the most people? Probably not. Yet the merit inherent in the same masterpieces is undeniable. Hence, for some highly developed art works, their inborn values are independent of the understanding of people in general.

Similarly, people from time to time are obsessed with the artistic works they do not understand. The reason might have been the curiosity deeply rooted in our being humans. The enigmatic expression of Mona Lisa has attracted hundreds of thousands of visitors to Musee du Lonuvor every year, all in desperate cravings of a personal encounter with her fascinating smile, yet no one knows the meaning of it. It is the mysterious nature of the very art work that people love. While they show extraordinary interest and favor to such art works as Mona Lisa, they label it as high art.

In conclusion, for the social value of an art work to occur, understanding from most people is prerequisite. But therein exists high-in-level art work whose meaning denies an common understanding. Finally, people sometimes show particular love to the art work they do not understand.

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

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深谷幽兰UID: 196550

In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
------正文------
Although I concede that in order for some works of art to have merit, the majority of their audience should understand them, this understanding is not always necessary when judging an art work as the speaker says.

For an art work to achieve its social value, it should be understandable to most audiences which(it) is pointed to , since understanding ,which further leads to appreciation, is the first step to arouse their emotions. Calligraphy, for a fitting example, is a unique art form only found in China.  While a particular artistic work successfully promotes the feeling of membership of Chinese culture, calligraphers should make certain that their audiences have understood how these handwritings differ from ordinary handwritings. Then the meanings of the art work will be accessible to the people, and unite the society through their common feelings of being part of it. On a large level, understanding from the majority of art audience plays an essential role for an art work to function socially, achieving its goal through people's shared aesthetical principals. 这个例子是否合适呢？即使我认不全一幅书法作品里的字，但有时其整体的视觉效果也是很爽心悦目的。也就是，人们不一定要理解它，只是觉得它“好看”而已。而且因为文化背景、生活经历、或宗教信仰不同，理解同一作品各不尽相同。例如，红楼梦，鲁迅曾说过一段著名的话：“经学家看见《易》，道学家看见淫，才子看见缠绵，革命家看见排满，流言家看见宫闱秘事……”。因此，“理解”应该是什么样的一种理解呢？或许大多数人理解了，那这种理解会是一样的吗？——探讨一下。

In other circumstances, however, the understanding of the general public is not an indispensable factor when evaluating an artistic work. Take the classical modernist paintings for instance. Abstract paintings created by Picasso, Monet, and Van Gogh all require highly developed skills of looking and familiarity of paintings that belong to other painters, or other times. Without special training on how to appreciate these paintings, and absent of comments form critics, will they still be understandable to the most people? Probably not. Yet the merit inherent in the same masterpieces is undeniable. Hence, for some highly developed art works, their inborn values are independent of the understanding of people in general.超越时代或“前卫”艺术品，大多数人难以理解。

Similarly, people from time to time are obsessed with the artistic works they do not understand. The reason might have been the curiosity deeply rooted in our being humans 怎么打字的,呵呵 ;) . The enigmatic expression of Mona Lisa has attracted hundreds of thousands of visitors to Musee du Lonuvor every year, all in desperate cravings of a personal encounter with her fascinating smile, yet no one knows the meaning of it. It is the mysterious nature of the very art work that people love. While they show extraordinary interest and favor to such art works as Mona Lisa, they label it as high art.

In conclusion, for the social value of an art work to occur, understanding from most people is prerequisite. But therein exists high-in-level art work whose meaning denies an common understanding. Finally, people sometimes show particular love to the art work they do not understand.

不知道是现在拍砖没有感觉了，还是JJ写的越来越好了。看不出有什么大的问题，除了超时外 ;) 。也快了，加油呀！

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

附：金山对几个词的解释：

merit指“成就或品质中值得赞扬的优点”, 如:
The merits of your plan outweigh the defects.
你制定的计划其优点胜过缺点。

value 指“重要性”、“价值”, 如:
I set a high value on his advice.
我认为他的忠告很有价值。

virtue 指“美德”、“优点”, 如:
The great virtue of air travel is speed.
乘飞机旅行的最大优点是速度快。

worth 着重指“人或物本质中的优点或价值”, 如:
The worth of the new drugs is certain although all their uses are not yet known.
那些新药的价值是肯定的, 尽管它们的用途尚未为人们知道。

点点滴滴走过UID: 195083

In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
------正文------
Although I concede that in order for some works of art to have merit, the majority of their audience should understand them, this understanding is not always necessary when judging an art work as the speaker says.

For an art work to achieve its social value, it should be understandable to most audiences which(it) is pointed to , since understanding ,which further leads to appreciation, is the first step to arouse their emotions. Calligraphy, for a fitting example, is a unique art form only found in Chinap国外也有华人，还有日本呢. While a particular artistic work successfully promotes the feelings of membership of Chinese culture, calligraphers should make certain that their audiences have understood how these handwritings differ from ordinary handwritings. Then the meanings of the art work will be accessible to the people, and unite the society through their common feelings of being part of it. On a large level, understanding from the majority of art audience plays an essential role for an art work to function socially, achieving its goal through people's shared aesthetical principals.

In other circumstances, however, the understanding of the general public is not an indispensable factor when evaluating an artistic work. Take the classical modernist paintings for instance. Abstract paintings created by Picasso, Monet, and Van Gogh all require highly developed skills of looking and familiarity of paintings that belong to other painters, or other times. Without special training on how to appreciate these paintings, and absent of comments form critics, will they still be understandable to the most people? Probably not. Yet the merit inherent in the same masterpieces is undeniable. Hence, for some highly developed art works, their inborn values are independent of the understanding of people in general.

Similarly, people from time to time are obsessed with the artistic works they do not understand. The reason might have been the curiosity deeply rooted in our being humans. The enigmatic expression of Mona Lisa has attracted hundreds of thousands of visitors to Musee du Lonuvor every year, all in desperate cravings of a personal encounter with her fascinating smile, yet no one knows the meaning of it应该是不同的人有不同的看法吧. It is the mysterious nature of the very art work that people love. While they show extraordinary interest and favor to such art works as Mona Lisa, they label it as high art.

In conclusion, for the social value of an art work to occur, understanding from most people is prerequisite. But therein exists high-in-level art work whose meaning denies an common understanding. Finally, people sometimes show particular love to the art work they do not understand.
有点累，等回儿补贴

imjasonUID: 176604

来学习……
艺术类的真TMD不爽

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No.1 issue218 艺术的价值 请帮我看看~~~必回拍~~
超时15分钟 423个字 欢迎讨论
In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
------正文------
Although I concede that in order for some works of art to have merit应该是social value？否则和后面一句就完全矛盾了, the majority of their audience should understand them, this understanding is not always necessary when judging an art work as the speaker says.speaker说什么？这里是主题句，最好点清楚

For an art work to achieve its social value, it should be understandable to most audiences which(it) is pointed to , since understanding ,which further leads to appreciation, is the first step to arouse their emotions. Calligraphy, for a fitting example, is a unique art form only found in China. While a particular artistic work successfully promotes the feeling of membership of Chinese culture, calligraphers should make certain that their audiences have understood how these handwritings differ from ordinary handwritings. Then the meanings of the art work will be accessible to the people, and unite the society through their common feelings of being part of it. On a large level, understanding from the majority of art audience plays an essential role for an art work to function socially, achieving its goal through people's shared aesthetical principals.这段主题是说明艺术要实现社会价值，必须被大多数人理解，但是举的例子不是很有代表性――个人觉得，象草书之类的不是大多数人都懂得欣赏。

In other circumstances,应该是从其他角度评价，而不是其他情况吧 however, the understanding of the general public is not an indispensable factor when evaluating an artistic work. 这里最好再加句说理之类的话，直接举例显得有点突兀。Take the classical modernist paintings for instance. Abstract paintings created by Picasso, Monet, and Van Gogh all require highly developed skills of lookinglooking？意思不太准确 and familiarity of paintings that belong to other painters, or other times. Without special training on how to appreciate these paintings, and absent of这个用法好像不太对，就用without可以 comments form critics, will they still be understandable to the most people? Probably not.这句可以再简洁有力一点。 Yet the merit inherent in the samesame？什么意思 masterpieces is undeniable. Hence, for some highly developed这个也还需斟酌 art works, their inborn values are independent of the understanding of people in general.

Similarly, people from time to time are obsessed这个词是贬义with the artistic works they do not understand. The reason might have been the curiosity deeply rooted in our being humanshuman beings’ nature. The enigmatic expression of Mona Lisa has attracted hundreds of thousands of visitors to Musee du Lonuvor every year, all in desperate cravings of a personal encounter with her fascinating smile, yet no one knows the meaning of it. It is the mysterious nature of the very art work that people love太肯定，maybe好些. While they show extraordinary interest and favor to such art works as Mona Lisa, they label it as high art.这段主题不是很明确啊，是说人们对不懂的艺术也很喜欢么？―因为他们是高雅艺术？

In conclusion, for the social value of an art work to occur, understanding fromby most people is prerequisite. But therein exists high-in-level art work whose meaning denies an common understanding. Finally, people sometimes show particular love to the art work they do not understand.感觉这三句太散，而且跟上面三段的照应有点太死板，建议稍微简练一下，并注意换说法。

总体觉得主题还是很鲜明的，但是在后面的论证中没有说太清楚。有些例子举得不错（mona lisa），有些还要再考虑下。语言还是可以的，继续加油吧～
ps：我还没有写过艺术类的呢，也该练练了，欢迎以后指导！

imjasonUID: 176604

Although I concede that in order for some works of art to have merit, the majority of their audience should understand them, this understanding is not always necessary when judging？可能用evaluate要好点吧 an art work as the speaker says.

For an art work to achieve its social value, it should be understandable to most audiences which(it) is pointed to , since understanding ,which further leads to appreciation, is the first step to arouse their emotions.开头这个TS没有看懂哦，而且开头说了理解是不必要的，这里又说should be？ Calligraphy, for a fitting example, is a unique art form only found in China仅在中国么？我记得在托福听力中有过讲美国也有的，还有这种课程. While a particular artistic work successfully promotes the feeling of membership of Chinese culture怎么突然冒出这句话呢，怎么体现, calligraphers should make certain that their audiences have understood how these handwritings differ from ordinary handwritings. Then the meanings of the art work will be accessible to the people, and unite the society through their common feelings of being part of it太抽象了，最好是具体点。. On a large level, understanding from the majority of art audience plays an essential role for an art work to function socially, achieving its goal through people's shared aesthetical principals.这段抽象了，没看明白

In other circumstances, however, the understanding of the general public is not an indispensable factor when evaluating an artistic work. Take the classical modernist paintings for instance. Abstract paintings created by Picasso, Monet这个好象是印象派的吧，抽象的么？, and Van Gogh all require highly developed skills of looking and familiarity of paintings that belong to other painters, or other times. Without special training on how to appreciate these paintings, and absent of comments form critics, will they still be understandable to the most people? Probably not. 这里转折做甚Yet the merit inherent in the same masterpieces is undeniable. Hence, for some highly developed art works, their inborn values are independent of the understanding of people in general.

Similarly, people from time to time are obsessed with the artistic works they do not understand. The reason might have been the curiosity deeply rooted in our being humans. The enigmatic expression of Mona Lisa has attracted hundreds of thousands of visitors to Musee du Lonuvor every year, all in desperate cravings of a personal encounter with her fascinating smile, yet no one knows the meaning of it. It is the mysterious nature of the very art work that people love. While they show extraordinary interest and favor to such art works as Mona Lisa, they label it as high？excellent art.

In conclusion, for the social value of an art work to occur什么意思啊, understanding from most people is prerequisite. But therein exists high-in-level art work whose meaning denies an common understanding. Finally, people sometimes show particular love to the art work they do not understand.
语法的问题有点严重，主要是句子。还有每段的TS看得不是很懂

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Alier 真好，真会拍

yogurt4UID: 198389

主要问题:句子写的不是让人看不懂,就是写的太散.书法的例子遭到广泛的质疑.
主题句和后面的内容缺少自然的过渡.结尾总是.555~~~.把原来内容重复,缺乏变换.
最后两条很多人都说过,我改!
至于...rooted in our being humans....其实我原本想说我们作为人类....
最后,请允许我给自己加一个小U.

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[B]主要问题:句子写的不是让人看不懂,就是写的太散.书法的例子遭到广泛的质疑.
主题句和后面的内容缺少自然的过渡.结尾总是.555~~~.把原来内容重复,缺乏变换.
最后两条很多?.

以下省略...... [/B]

不同的人有不同的"理解" ;)
你的时间还有的是,再练几天,也差不多了,加油!

dingoUID: 155422

学习中。。。

KangxiaoluUID: 177984

艺术类！
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