Issue218 同主题12 第一次艺术类，最后一次同主题

imjasonUID: 176604

觉得到后面就乱了，请大家狠拍了。
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艺术价值和多数人的认同没有必然的联系
1．        艺术价值通常不取决与大众
2．        大众接受的不一定就有价值
3．        有时候人们无法理解的也会认为有价值
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In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
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The value of any work of art is a complex definition throughout all the ages. For most people, to understand a real value of a piece of artwork is hard to reach; and even though the value is accepted by the majority, it might be valueless.

The first thing to note is that the value of a piece of artwork usually does not depend on the majority. Sometimes, it is the art critics to define the merits. When the unprecedented development of technology leads to the specialization in almost every aspect of our lives, the art is unable to avoid this trend. In this case, a piece of art work usually contains a lot of professional knowledge and skills which hamper the majority to understand. For example, the works of Franz Kafka receive much attention from the public after him when the critics in literature claim that these works represent the Expressionism in Europe while to the average people, it is difficult to state accurately what the Expressionism is. Sometimes it is the businessmen to raise the value of artworks, because the pursuit for the art, on the one hand, beautifies the company's image in the public; on the other hand, might contribute to augment of the attention and profits from the customers. We can look no further than at the shocking news that one piece of Van Gogh's work is purchased by a Japanese corporation at millions of dollars.

Second, when most people can understand a piece of work, it does not guarantee the value. In other words, this kind of art might hold the merit of practicality and popularity. For example, the dominator of today's most movie and music products is the interests and tastes of young people, who play an important role in this market for they are the main force among the consumers. One can look at the top ten movies weekly and will notice that most are commercial films rather than artistic ones. In literature, what a publisher considers most is whether a book would be a best-seller. And the most popular and easiest understandable literatures on the shelves are those to teach people how to assemble a computer or how to manage a team or how to intercommunicate with each other. In this case, the artworks merited in the entertainment value and the commercial value, far away the original one.

Finally, sometimes, even though the majority cannot capture the understanding of artwork, it does not reject the merits. Our cities abound a great deal of sculptures, seldom would tell out what signification is in those shapes of grotesque, but most would concede that they beautify our surroundings. And there surely exist some great artists who produce the artworks of great value as well as independent musicians and film makers, which are also welcome by the public as well as the Hollywood commercial films.

In short, the value of artwork is difficult to define. After all, a piece of truly great artwork is usually considered to be from outer space, or another realm beyond us. Then human languages or thinking is useless in front of the artworks.

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

没几天了，加油啊！

imjasonUID: 176604

唉，紧张哈，还有很多题目没有头绪，
:(

symphony22UID: 203058

The value of any work of art is a complex definition throughout all the ages.(我个人觉得art 是definition 感觉有点别扭 要不说hard to define?) For most people, to understand a real value of a piece of artwork is hard to reach; and even though the value is accepted by the majority, it might be valueless.

The first thing to note is that the value of a piece of artwork usually does not depend on the (acceptence of 这样逻辑上可能要说得通点)majority. Sometimes, it is the art critics to define the merits. When the unprecedented development of technology leads to the specialization in almost every aspect of our lives, the art is unable to avoid this trend. In this case, a piece of art work usually contains a lot of professional knowledge and skills which hamper the majority to understand. For example, the works of Franz Kafka receive much attention from the public after him when the critics in literature claim that these works represent the Expressionism in Europe while to the average people, it is difficult to state accurately what the Expressionism is.（因为包含许多专业知识所以难于理解，点出中心） Sometimes it is the businessmen to raise the value of artworks, because the pursuit for the art, on the one hand, beautifies the company's image in the public; on the other hand, might contribute to augment of the attention and profits from the customers.（这句做解释，最好加个连接词） We can look no further than at the shocking news that one piece of Van Gogh's work is purchased by a Japanese corporation at millions of dollars. （后接一个例子，论证更加有力到位，但最好还是给个交代）

Second, when most people can understand a piece of work, it does not guarantee the value.(这句话的逻辑关系应该是 ‘就算’吧？) In other words, this kind of art might hold the merit of practicality and popularity. For example, the dominator of today's most movie and music products is the interests and tastes of young people, who play an important role in this market for they are the main force among the consumers. One can look at the top ten movies weekly and will notice that most are commercial films rather than artistic ones. In literature, what a publisher considers most is whether a book would be a best-seller（个人感觉再加上一个转折 ‘而不是’更为流畅）. And the most popular and easiest understandable literatures on the shelves are those to teach people how to assemble a computer or how to manage a team or how to intercommunicate（好象communicate就是相互交流了嘛，没有必要再加上inter） with each other. In this case, the artworks merited in the entertainment value and the commercial value, far away (far from /more than)the original ones.

Finally, sometimes, even though the majority cannot capture the understanding of artwork, it does not reject(reject?没有那么强吧？dilute?) the merits. Our cities abound a great deal of sculptures, seldom would tell out what signification is in those shapes of grotesque, but most would concede that they beautify our surroundings. And there surely exist some great artists who produce the artworks of great value as well as independent musicians and film makers, which are also welcome by the public as well as the Hollywood commercial films.

In short, the value of artwork is difficult to define. After all, a piece of truly great artwork is usually considered to be from outer space, or another realm beyond us. Then human languages or thinking is useless in front of the artworks.(在艺术面前思想是没有用的啊？是不是说的过了一点哦？不过看样子也是时间不够来不及细想，我也经常干这种事哈！：P)

总的来说还不错拉，特别是层层递进的分析，论证很深刻！for example.第二段
不足的地方就是连接词的使用，for example,还是第二段
呵呵，加油！！！

symphony22UID: 203058

居然没上起颜色？！实在对不起！

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

------提纲------
艺术价值和多数人的认同没有必然的联系
1． 艺术价值通常不取决与大众
2． 大众接受的不一定就有价值
3． 有时候人们无法理解的也会认为有价值 提纲8错地说!

------题目------
In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
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The value 指的是什么？ of any work of art is a complex definition throughout all the ages. For most people, to understand a real value real value是不是Merits？商业价值不是real value 吗? of a piece of artwork is hard to reach; and even though the value is accepted by the majority, it might be valueless.

The first thing to note is that the value of a piece of artwork usually does not depend on the majority的理解. Sometimes, it is the art critics to define the merits. When the unprecedented development of technology leads to the specialization in almost every aspect of our lives, the art is unable to avoid this trend. In this case, a piece of art work usually contains a lot of professional knowledge and skills which hamper the majority to understand. For example, the works of Franz Kafka receive much attention from the public after him when the critics in literature claim that these works represent the Expressionism in Europe while to the average people, it is difficult to state accurately what the Expressionism is. Sometimes it is the businessmen to raise the value of artworks,这里所说的“价值Value（更多的是商业价值）”，与题目中的“价值merits”是否有偏差？ because the pursuit for the art, on the one hand, beautifies the company's image in the public; on the other hand, might contribute to augment of the attention and profits from the customers. We can look no further than at the shocking news that one piece of Van Gogh's work is purchased by a Japanese corporation at millions of dollars2500万英镑外加百分之十的佣金成交，约4000万美元.

Second, when most people can understand a piece of work, it does not guarantee the value. In other words, this kind of art might hold the merit of practicality and popularity. For example, the dominator of today's most movie and music products is the interests and tastes of young people, who play an important role in this market for they are the main force among the consumers. One can look at the top ten movies weekly and will notice that most are commercial films 从这里也可以看出,商业价值不等于merits！  rather than artistic ones. In literature, what a publisher considers most is whether a book would be a best-seller. And the most popular and easiest understandable literatures on the shelves are those to teach people how to assemble a computer or how to manage a team or how to intercommunicate with each other. In this case, the artworks merited in the entertainment value and the commercial value, far away the original one.

Finally, sometimes, even though the majority cannot capture the understanding of artwork, it does not reject the merits. Our cities abound a great deal of sculptures, seldom would tell out what signification is in those shapes of grotesque, but most would concede that they beautify our surroundings. And there surely exist some great artists who produce the artworks of great value as well as independent musicians and film makers, which are also welcome by the public as well as the Hollywood commercial films.

In short, the value of artwork is difficult to define. After all, a piece of truly great artwork is usually considered to be from outer space, or another realm beyond us. Then human languages or thinking is useless in front of the artworks.

总的还8错！进步很大地说！但感觉对“merits”的理解是不是有点偏差？

imjasonUID: 176604

谢谢 symphony22
谢谢 深谷幽兰
那个merit我也想过的，字典上说的跟优点有些接近的价值，但是value也不是说一定就是钱方面的了，所以我就照搬了

yogurt4UID: 198389

也来学习一下.
深古幽兰对merit 解释的很对,这样一来,题目就更难了
其实我也想对题目做全反对来着,但是怕写成阿狗.

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

最初由 yogurt4 发布
[B]也来学习一下.
深古幽兰对merit 解释的很对,这样一来,题目就更难了
其实我也想对题目做全反对来着,但是怕写成阿狗. [/B]

:( 偶成"深古"了,还不是一般的"古"呢,有这么老呀? ;)

yogurt4UID: 198389

觉得到后面就乱了，请大家狠拍了。
------提纲------
艺术价值和多数人的认同没有必然的联系
1． 艺术价值通常不取决与大众
2． 大众接受的不一定就有价值
3． 有时候人们无法理解的也会认为有价值
------题目------
In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
------正文------
The value of any work of art is a complex definition throughout all the ages. For most people, to understand a real value of a piece of artwork is hard to reach; and even though the value is accepted by the majority, it might be valueless.

The first thing to note is that the value of a piece of artwork usually does not depend on the majority. Sometimes, it is the art critics to define the merits. When the unprecedented development of technology leads to the specialization in almost every aspect of our lives, the art is unable to avoid this trend. In this case, a piece of art work usually contains a lot of professional knowledge and skills which hamper the majority to understand. For example, the works of Franz Kafka receive much attention from the public after him when the critics in literature claim that these works represent the Expressionism in Europe while to the average people, it is difficult to state accurately what the Expressionism is. Sometimes it is the businessmen to raise the value of artworks, because the pursuit for the art, on the one hand, beautifies the company's image in the public; on the other hand, might contribute to augment of the attention and profits from the customers. We can look no further than at the shocking news that one piece of Van Gogh's work is purchased by a Japanese corporation at millions of dollars.
[millions of dollars买梵高的一幅画，不是很shocking.不过，这一段的内容很丰富，论证的也很好。]

Second, when most people can understand a piece of work, it does not guarantee the value. In other words, this kind of art might hold the merit of practicality and popularity. For example, the dominator of today's most movie and music products is the interests and tastes of young people, who play an important role in this market for they are the main force among the consumers. One can look at the top ten movies weekly and will notice that most are commercial films rather than artistic ones. In literature, what a publisher considers most is whether a book would be a best-seller. And the most popular and easiest understandable literatures on the shelves are those to teach people how to assemble a computer or how to manage a team or how to intercommunicate with each other. In this case, the artworks merited in the entertainment value and the commercial value, far away the original one.
[觉得应该把讨论的范围再缩小一点。一件艺术品被大多数人理解了，不一定有价值，和任何东西被大多数人理解了，不一定有艺术价值，很不同。]
Finally, sometimes, even though the majority cannot capture the understanding of artwork, it does not reject the merits. Our cities abound a great deal of sculptures, seldom would tell out what signification is in those shapes of grotesque, but most would concede that they beautify our surroundings. And there surely exist some great artists who produce the artworks of great value as well as independent musicians and film makers, which are also welcome by the public as well as the Hollywood commercial films.

In short, the value of artwork is difficult to define. After all, a piece of truly great artwork is usually considered to be from outer space, or another realm beyond us. [这句话放在这里感觉不是很合适。]Then human languages or thinking is useless in front of the artworks.
[不错，不错。艺术类都能写成这样，你可以放心大胆的去考试了。加油阿！]

偶成"深古"了,还不是一般的"古"呢,有这么老呀?

看见mm就打字就激动了,呵呵

KangxiaoluUID: 177984

打算放弃艺术类的，还是挣扎一下，学习一下！

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nora0020UID: 104886

我也来研究一下

nora0020UID: 104886

觉得到后面就乱了，请大家狠拍了。
------提纲------
艺术价值和多数人的认同没有必然的联系
1． 艺术价值通常不取决与大众
2． 大众接受的不一定就有价值
3． 有时候人们无法理解的也会认为有价值
------题目------
In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
------正文------
The value of any work of art is a complex definition throughout all the ages. For most people, to understand a real value of a piece of artwork is hard to reach; and even though the value is accepted by the majority, it might be valueless. 感觉开头就比较矛盾，观点能不能再提得更鲜明一点

The first thing to note is that the value of a piece of artwork usually does not depend on the majority. Sometimes, it is the art critics to define the merits. When the unprecedented development of technology leads to the specialization in almost every aspect of our lives, the art is unable to avoid this trend. In this case, a piece of art work usually contains a lot of professional knowledge and skills which hamper the majority to understand. 这一句和你这段说的论点，没有什么联系。是不是更深入地说一下 For example, the works of Franz Kafka receive much attention from the public after him when the critics in literature claim that these works represent the Expressionism in Europe while to the average people, it is difficult to state accurately what the Expressionism is. Sometimes it is the businessmen to raise the value of artworks, because the pursuit for the art, on the one hand, beautifies the company's image in the public; on the other hand, might contribute to augment of the attention and profits from the customers. We can look no further than at the shocking news that one piece of Van Gogh's work is purchased by a Japanese corporation at millions of dollars. sometimes后说的又是另一层意思，如果不想另起一段是不是可以把这段的论点范围扩大
我的观点：the influence from majority is so little that always covered up by many other factors

Second, when most people can understand a piece of work, it does not guarantee the value. In other words, this kind of art might hold the merit of practicality and popularity. For example, the dominator of today's most movie and music products is the interests and tastes of young people, who play an important role in this market for they are the main force among the consumers. 没有说出understand只是说了interesting One can look at the top ten movies weekly and will notice that most are commercial films rather than artistic ones. In literature, what a publisher considers most is whether a book would be a best-seller. And the most popular and easiest understandable literatures on the shelves are those to teach people how to assemble a computer or how to manage a team or how to intercommunicate with each other. In this case, the artworks merited in the entertainment value and the commercial value, far away the original one. 感觉这一段没有很扣题，不知道是因为没写出来，还是对题目的理解有偏差
我对题目的理解：要想使一个艺术作品有价值就需要被大多数人理解，接受。这一段和这个关系不是很大

Finally, sometimes, even though the majority cannot capture the understanding of artwork, it does not reject the merits. Our cities abound a great deal of sculptures, seldom would tell out what signification is in those shapes of grotesque, but most would concede that they beautify our surroundings. 这些雕塑如果大众没有接受怎么会在城市的周围出现 And there surely exist some great artists who produce the artworks of great value as well as independent musicians and film makers, which are also welcome by the public as well as the Hollywood commercial films. 还是觉得有点牵强

In short, the value of artwork is difficult to define. After all, a piece of truly great artwork is usually considered to be from outer space, or another realm beyond us. Then human languages or thinking is useless in front of the artworks.
总的来说，语言很流畅，结构，论证方面还要加强，应该再仔细分析一下题目。加油啊！

imjasonUID: 176604

谢谢 nora0020

想起上次把你的名字打错了就心虚嘿
估计平时很难再有什么提高了，明天上战场，………………

nora0020UID: 104886

明天就去了？加油！！
放松心情，尽力去考，必有收获