Issue130 第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分4秒     521 words
从2005年3月12日13时33分到2005年3月12日14时45分
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How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
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Children are country's buds, who will carry on the duty to constuct and evolve the society. In order to ensure well socialized  children, we have to perform good education. Current statues show that our education suffers flaws and the society place the whole assignement of educating to schools, which are all need reform. From my opinion, to maintain a better development of our society, we should reform present education and invite every member of the society to take part of educate our cultivate our children.

First of all, education determines what children will be and where our nation and country will go. How are our offsprings destines how our country will be. Education's aim are to remove the scales of ignorance and spread the shine of wisdom, and shape students with critical and insightful thiking. In the World War II, Japan suffered greate  pain and the overall power of the country step backward badly, fortunately, the Japanese made advisable decisions that compell compulsory education, even with the cost of sacrifice some investment in industry.  Today the decison proved correct , a decade later, the general education level of Japanese citizen rised a lot, which directed proplelled its economy and resulted Japan the second biggest country in economy after the ruin of World War II. It is apparently to see how education affect the destiny of a nation. A good education applied to children ensures a bright future of the society.  

However, the education today less satisfies the need to shape tomorrow's builders and leaders. Psychology ailms, less practical ability, absence of teamwork accordance bewilder schools and education experts.Present education has been long scolded for the its ill direction to make students machines to remember and expert in exams. In China, university students are sometimes described as high in knowledge but low in practice.  More and more campus shooting reflects the statues of students' psycological health, which causes increase worry from every aspects of the society. To seize high score, students spend most of their time before desk, not to mention to get to know how to treat others properly and even participete in community practice. Besides, with the exponential development of our society, the curricula remain the same as they were tens of years ago, which makes students are short of what is on at present and have difficulty when taking jobs after graduation.

Finally, every member of the society has the duty to socialize our children. A famous novelist once said (and I paraphrase) " the education of kids start at the knees of their mothers..." , which indicates the responsibility of parents to educate their offsprings. people tend to rely schools to educate their children but ignore their own onus. Children may learn from very young from everyone, their parents, relatives and even strangers met in parks. Thus everyone has the duty to educate children, especially, how to behave, which could hardly leran in school.

To conclude, today's children are tomorrow's leaders, thus they need well educated minds and healthy and humane soul. Education of kids need not only schools but also the participartion of parents and everyone of the community.

SmiletoG&TUID: 205318

我对这篇文章的理解是要突出socialize在教育中的重要性和如何去更好的培养孩子(培养孩子的社会责任感，社会交际能力，社会实践能力等)。搂主的第2段在谈教育的重要性似乎不是很切题，个人认为如将第三段的一些论点展开论述则更好。
另外修改了一点拼写和语法错误

Children are country's buds, who will carry on the duty to constuct /construct/ and evolve the society. In order to ensure well-socialized children, we have to perform good education. Current statues /states/ show that our education suffers flaws and the society place the whole assignement /assignment/ of educating to schools, which are all need reform /all of which should be reformed/. From /In/ my opinion, to maintain a better development of our society, we should reform present education (system) and invite every member of the society to take part of educate our cultivate our children.

First of all, education determines what children will be and where our nation and country will go. How are our offsprings /offspring/ destines /destined/ how our country will be. Education's aim are to remove the scales of ignorance /illiterate/ and spread the shine of wisdom, and shape students with critical and insightful thiking /thinking/. In the World War II, Japan suffered great pain and the overall power of the country step backward badly, fortunately, the Japanese made advisable decisions that compel /to carry on/ compulsory education, even with the cost of sacrifice /sacrificing/ some investment in industry. Today the decision was proved correct, a decade later, the general education level of Japanese citizen rised a lot /has risen greatly/, which directed  /directly/ propelled its economy and resulted /made/ Japan the second biggest country in economy after the ruin of World War II. It is apparently /apparent/ to see how education affect the destiny of a nation. A good education applied to children ensures a bright future of the society.

However, the education today less satisfies the need to shape tomorrow's builders and leaders. Psychology ailms, less practical ability, absence of teamwork accordance, bewilder schools and education experts. Present education has been long scolded for its ill direction to make students machines to remember and /only be/ expert in exams. In China, university students are sometimes described as high in knowledge but low in practice. More and more campus shooting reflects the statues /states/ of students' psychological health /problems/, which causes increase /increasing/ worry from every aspects of the society. To seize high score, students spend most of their time before /at the/ desk, not to mention to get to know how to treat others properly and even participate in community practice. Besides, with the exponential development of our society, the curricula remain the same as they were tens of years ago, which make students short of what is on at present and have difficulty when taking jobs after graduation.

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