argument162 要考了,第一篇阿狗~~`回拍

yogurt4UID: 198389

备战状态中~~~
argument 162 A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
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The arguer recommends that North Americans should eat soy on a regular basis to prevent fatigue and depression. To support this recommendation the arguer cites a study showing that Asians , who suffer less fatigue and depression problems, eat more soy everyday as compared with North Americans. And the soy contains a kind of disease-preventing phytochemicals. However, close scrutiny of this evidence reveals that it lends little support for the recommendation.
       
To begin with, the arguer’s recommendation relies on the assumption that Asians experience milder problems on fatigue and depression. Yet the argument fails to substantiate this assumption.
If the standards against which to define fatigue and depression vary considerably in two continents, or the Asians suffer from fatigue and depression to a severer extent, then the arguer’s assumption based on the cited statistics is unconvincing.

Additionally, the arguer assumes that the amount of soy consuming makes all the difference between Asians and North Americans on depression and fatigue problems. However, it is entirely possible that North Americans' suffering on these problems is attributable to their climatic conditions , or being stressed by high pressure from the rapid pace of life. Since the arguer fails to consider and rule out these possibilities, his/her conclusion that little soy contained in North Americans' diet accounts for their fatigue and depression cannot be taken seriously.

Another element to consider is the medical attribute of soy. As the arguer says, isoflavones in soy have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Yet no specific information is provided about whether the disease-preventing properties include fatigue and depression preventing abilities. It is quite possible that isoflavones can prevent rashes, high blood pressure, or whatsoever other than fatigue and depression. If this is the case, the arguer’s recommendation of soy-containing diet to North Americans will do little help to their problems.

In sum, this argument is weak in several grounds. To strengthen it the arguer must provide clear evidence that Asians are in fact suffer less than North Americans, both on frequency and the extent of fatigue and depression. To better evaluate the argument I need to know that whether the absence of soy, rather than other factors, is responsible for these health problems of North Americans.    Finally, I would need to know that what are the disease-preventing properties of isoflavones in soy, especially its effect on fatigue and depression.

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深谷幽兰UID: 196550

The arguer recommends that North Americans should eat soy on a regular basis to prevent fatigue and depression. To support this recommendation the arguer cites a study showing that Asians , who suffer less fatigue and depression problems, eat more soy everyday as compared with North Americans. And the soy contains a kind of disease-preventing phytochemicals. However, close scrutiny of this evidence reveals that it lends little support for the recommendation.建议开头尽量精简些, 考试地时候ARGU时间很紧张的, 最好不要在开头结尾花太多时间!

To begin with, the arguer’s recommendation relies on the assumption that Asians experience milder problems on fatigue and depression. Yet the argument fails to substantiate this assumption.
If the standards against which to define fatigue and depression vary considerably in two continents, or the Asians suffer from fatigue and depression to a severer extent, then the arguer’s assumption based on the cited statistics is unconvincing.

Additionally, the arguer assumes that the amount of soy consuming makes all the difference between Asians and North Americans on depression and fatigue problems. However, it is entirely possible that North Americans' suffering on these problems is attributable to their climatic conditions , or being stressed by high pressure from the rapid pace of life. Since the arguer fails to consider and rule out these possibilities, his/her conclusion that little soy contained in North Americans' diet accounts for their fatigue and depression cannot be taken seriously.

Another element to consider is the medical attribute of soy. As the arguer says, isoflavones in soy have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Yet no specific information is provided about whether the disease-preventing properties include fatigue and depression preventing abilities. It is quite possible that isoflavones can prevent rashes, high blood pressure, or whatsoever other than fatigue and depression. If this is the case, the arguer’s recommendation of soy-containing diet to North Americans will do little help to their problems.

In sum, this argument is weak in several grounds. To strengthen it the arguer must provide clear evidence that Asians are in fact suffer less than North Americans, both on frequency and the extent of fatigue and depression. To better evaluate the argument I need to know that whether the absence of soy, rather than other factors, is responsible for these health problems of North Americans. Finally, I would need to know that what are the disease-preventing properties of isoflavones in soy, especially its effect on fatigue and depression.
大致看了一下, 很8错的说! 第一篇能写成这样, 已经非常棒了! 驳斥得比较全面, 语言也很正规! 是限时的吗? 如果限时能写成这样考试应该没问题了!
继续努力! 加油!  :D

AlierUID: 159518

The arguer recommends that North Americans should eat soy on a regular basis to prevent fatigue and depression. To support this recommendation the arguer cites a study showing that Asians , who suffer less fatigue and depression problems, eat more soy everyday as compared with North Americans. And，and the soy contains a kind of disease-preventing phytochemicals. However, close scrutiny of this evidencethese evidences reveals that it lends little support forto the recommendation.

To begin with, the arguer’s recommendation relies on the assumption that Asians experience milder problems on fatigue and depression. Yet the argument fails to substantiate this assumption.
If the standards against which to define fatigue and depression vary considerably in two continents, or the Asians suffer from fatigue and depression to a severer extent感觉这句应该是前一个if假设下可能的情况，所以这里用or并列似乎不合适, then the arguer’s assumption based on the cited statistics is unconvincing.

Additionally, the arguer falselyassumes that the amount of soy consuming makes all the difference between Asians and North Americans on preventingdepression and fatigue problems. However, it is entirely possible that North Americans' suffering on these problems is attributable to their climatic conditions , or being stressed byunder high pressure from the rapid pace of life. Since the arguer fails to consider and rule out these possibilities, his/her conclusion that little soy contained in North Americans' diet accounts for their fatigue and depression cannot be taken seriously.结尾这句不错，学习..

Another element to consider is the medical attribute of soy. As the arguer says, isoflavones in soy have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Yet no specific information is provided about whether the disease-preventing properties include fatigue and depression preventing abilities. It is quite possible that isoflavones can prevent rashes, high blood pressure, or whatsoever other than fatigue and depression. If this is the case, the arguer’s recommendation of soy-containing diet to North Americans will do little help to solvetheir problems.

In sum, this argument is weak in several groundsaspects. To strengthen it， the arguer must provide clear evidence that Asians are in fact suffer less than North Americans both on frequency and the extent of fatigue and depression. To better evaluate the argument I need to know that whether the absence of soy, rather than other factors, is responsible for these health problems of North Americans. Finally,Also I would去掉would need to know that what are the disease-preventing properties of isoflavones in soy, especially its effect on fatigue and depression.

总的来说，很赞了～～结构清晰，语言也比较好，读起来很顺畅。
唯一的缺憾是b1展开得还不够深入，例子可以再详细点。

symphony22UID: 203058

The arguer recommends that North Americans should eat soy on a regular basis to prevent fatigue and depression. To support this recommendation the arguer cites a study showing that Asians , who suffer less fatigue and depression problems, eat more soy everyday as compared with North Americans. And the soy contains a kind of disease-preventing phytochemicals. However, close scrutiny of this evidence reveals that it lends little support for the recommendation.开头简洁清晰，但如果把论据全说出来时间够么？

To begin with, the arguer’s recommendation relies on the assumption that Asians experience milder problems on fatigue and depression. Yet the argument fails to substantiate this assumption.
If the standards against which to define fatigue and depression vary considerably in two continents, or the Asians suffer from fatigue and depression to a severer extent, then the arguer’s assumption based on the cited statistics is unconvincing.是比较简洁，但是时间允许的话可以再深入一点的

Additionally, the arguer assumes that the amount of soy consuming makes all the difference between Asians and North Americans on depression and fatigue problems. However, it is entirely possible that North Americans' suffering onfrom these problems is attributable to their climatic conditions , or being stressed byunder high pressure from the rapid pace of life. Since the arguer fails to consider and rule out these possibilities, his/her conclusion that little soy contained in North Americans' diet accounts for their fatigue and depression cannot be taken seriously.

Another element to consider is the medical attribute of soy. As the arguer says, isoflavones in soy have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Yet no specific information is provided about whether the disease-preventing properties include fatigue and depression preventing abilities. It is quite possible that isoflavones can prevent rashes, high blood pressure, or whatsoever other than fatigue and depression. If this is the case, the arguer’s recommendation of soy-containing diet to North Americans will do little help to their problems.

In sum, this argument is weak in several grounds. To strengthen it the arguer must provide clear evidence that Asians are in fact suffer less than North Americans, both on frequency and the extent of fatigue and depression. To better evaluate the argument I need to know that whether the absence of soy, rather than other factors, is responsible for these health problems of North Americans. Finally, I would need to know that what are the disease-preventing properties of isoflavones in soy, especially its effect on fatigue and depression.


思路清晰，论证有力，第一篇就能写到这个水平真是很不错勒！我要多学习学习~~！：）另外如果把第一段复述论据的笔墨用在B1的例证上就更好了 ！

imjasonUID: 176604

占坐了

imjasonUID: 176604

开头有点烦琐了，建议多看下ETS的反问，尤其要注意展现你观点的句子，这个很重要的哦。强烈推荐精华区里的IMONG老大的三篇关于ARGU的文章。不知道你看过没有？还有全篇的模板的痕迹有点重，展开得不够，虽然说主要的错误都找到了。ARGU也是很难写好的了，我个人认为，尤其是在考试那种紧张的半个小时里。加油了！

点点滴滴走过UID: 195083

yogurt4,是第一篇吗? 8错8错, 再加点油拿个高分.

yogurt4UID: 198389

一言难尽~~~

yogurt4UID: 198389

完全懂了.不够具体.standard 是什么standard,都没说.好象摸版的字数比实在的东西多．
不知道来不来的及了