ARGUE 174 学校招生的问题，互拍吧

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The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
'We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumni who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially.'
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     In the argument, the arguer advocates that Grove College should preserve its tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. While it seems reasonable at the first sight, a careful examination will reveal how groundless the conclusion is.
  
     
      In the first place, there is no sufficient evidence to demonstrate that the students wanted the schools to remain all female. The survey cited in the argument lacks credibility as it is too vague. Firstly, we do not know the size of amount of respondents in the survey. It is perhaps that the total number of respondents is so limited tat the result of survey is not reliable. Besides, we doubt the representative of the sample in the survey. The arguer tells little regarding detailed information about the people selected in the survey such as their age, grades and so on. For instance, perhaps, all the respondents are in the same grades such as Grade 1, which means that the sample in not representative thus the survey is not reliable. Thirdly, we do not know whether the respondents tell their genuine ideas .It is highly likely that the girls are too shy to express their real thinking about the survey. Accordingly, without showing the detailed information about these aspects, we can not accept the conclusion.
   
      
          In addition, the arguer fails to convince us that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students. There is no causal relationship between the level of morale and keeping the schools all-female. As we know, in society, men and women supplement each other in many fields and common make great contributions to the development of society. It is highly possible that only keeping female will decrease morale among students because the disadvantages of females can not be effective overcome by themselves. If the male students can be enrolled in the school, all the students can make great progress by the cooperation between the male and female. What's more, the female students may be better accustomed to the society if the male students can study in the schools, which help the female students learn how to get along with the male and collaborate with the male students.
   
      
      Thirdly, the arguer fails to justify that keeping the college all-female will convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially. Even though half of the alumni opposed coeducation, it means that at least the other half of the alumni is supporting the coeducation. It is highly like that the alumni who advocate coeducation are those who often donate money to colleges while the alumni opposing coeducation seldom donate money to school, which implies that if the school take the measure of coeducation, it is likely that the school can in fact receive more financial supporting from the alumni who support coeducation.
   
       To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To better evaluate the conclusion, the arguer must present more information to justify that the students indeed intended school to remain all-female. In addition, the arguer should provides more evidence to demonstrate that   keeping the college all-female will improve morale among the students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially.

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In the argument, the arguer advocates that Grove College should preserve its tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. While it seems reasonable at the first sight, a careful examination will reveal how groundless the conclusion is.第一段简单明了点出主题，但如果有时间的话最好还是把论据列出来，以暗示后文的行文思路


In the first place, there is no sufficient evidence to demonstrate that the students wanted the schools to remain all female. The survey cited in the argument lacks credibility as it is too vague. Firstly, we do not know the size of amount of respondents in the survey. It is perhaps that the total number of respondents is so limited tat the result of survey is not reliable. Besides, we doubt the representative of the sample in the survey. The arguer tells little regarding detailed information about the people selected in the survey such as their age, grades and so on. For instance, perhaps, all the respondents are in the same grades such as Grade 1, which means that the sample in not representative thus the survey is not reliable. Thirdly, we do not know whether the respondents tell their genuine ideas .It is highly likely that the girls are too shy to express their real thinking about the survey. Accordingly, without showing the detailed information about these aspects, we can not accept the conclusion.批调查结果不可靠，模板用的很熟练，批驳也很到位。GOOD！


In addition, the arguer fails to convince us that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students. There is no causal relationship between the level of morale and keeping the schools all-female. As we know, in society, men and women supplement each other in many fields and commoncommon 是指事物很普通，没什么特别之处，这里是说通常情况，最好用usually make great contributions to the development of society. It is highly possible that only keeping female will decrease morale among students because the disadvantages of females can not be effective overcome by themselves. If the male students can be enrolled in the school, all the students can make great progress by the cooperation between the male and female.后面半句between the male and female完全没有必要 What's more, the female students may be better accustomed to the society if the male students can study in the schools, which help the female students learn how to get along with the male and collaborate with the male students.这个论证有理有据，不错！~


Thirdly, the arguer fails to justify that keeping the college all-female will convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially. Even though half of the alumni opposed coeducation, 这里最好再加一个词衔接一下，比如it still means thatit means that at least the other half of the alumni is supporting不该用进行态吧？ the coeducation. It is highly like that the alumni who advocate coeducation are those who often donate money to colleges while the alumni opposing coeducation seldom donate money to school, which implies that if the school take the measure of coeducation, it is likely that the school can in fact receive more financial supporting from the alumni who support coeducation.

To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To better evaluate the conclusion, the arguer must present more information to justify that the students indeed intended school to remain all-female. In addition, the arguer should provides more evidence to demonstrate that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among the students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially.


总的来说，文章的逻辑清晰论证有力，就是再注意一下语言方面的一些小毛病就OK了！加油！
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connieUID: 203382

In the argument, the arguer advocates that Grove College should preserve its tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. While it seems reasonable at the first sight, a careful examination will reveal how groundless the conclusion is.第一段应该把作者的论据什么的列出来才好驳吧


In the first place, there is no sufficient evidence to demonstrate that the students wanted the schools to remain all female. The survey cited in the argument lacks credibility as it is too vague. Firstly, we do not know the size of amount of respondents in the survey. It is perhaps that the total number of respondents is so limited tat the result of survey is not reliable. Besides, we doubt the representative of the sample in the survey. The arguer tells little regarding detailed information about the people selected in the survey such as their age, grades and so on. For instance, perhaps, all the respondents are in the same grades such as Grade 1, which means that the sample in not representative thus the survey is not reliable. Thirdly, we do not know whether the respondents tell their genuine ideas .It is highly likely that the girls are too shy to express their real thinking about the survey. Accordingly, without showing the detailed information about these aspects, we can not accept the conclusion.


In addition, the arguer fails to convince us that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students. There is no causal relationship between the level of morale and keeping the schools all-female. As we know, in society, men and women supplement each other in many fields and common make great contributions to the development of society这句后半句没有看懂. It is highly possible that only keeping female will decrease morale among students because the disadvantages of females can not be effective overcome by themselves. If the male students can be enrolled in the school, all the students can make great progress by the cooperation between the male and female. What's more, the female students may be better accustomed to the society if the male students can study in the schools, which help the female students learn how to get along with the male and collaborate with the male students.这段是在证明没有联系吗，感觉怎么好象是在说有联系呀


Thirdly, the arguer fails to justify that keeping the college all-female will convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially. Even though half of the alumni opposed coeducation, it means that at least the other half of the alumni is supporting the coeducation. It is highly like highly like好象不对吧，用more likely比较好that the alumni who advocate coeducation are those who often donate money to colleges while the alumni opposing coeducation seldom donate money to school, which implies that if the school take the measure of coeducation, it is likely that the school can in fact receive more financial supporting from the alumni who support coeducation. 这个句子太长了点，结构有些不太清楚了

To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To better evaluate the conclusion, the arguer must present more information to justify that the students indeed intended school to remain all-female. In addition, the arguer should provides more evidence to demonstrate that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among the students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially.
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