issue130儿童社会化 考试逼近,仍旧超时,555~~~

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issue130 How children are socialized today determines the destiny of sociey. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can bring about  a better society.

I agree with the statement that the destiny of society is determined by how children are socialized nowadays, but therein exists controversy on how to raise children, who can bring us a better society
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Socialization is of essential importance for children's healthy development into their later life as adults. For one thing, socialization prepares them better for the corporation and teamwork. For another, on a psychological level, unless a child possesses an ego strong enough, he or she will to some extent feel distressed by virtue of being avoided by others, provided he or she fails to behave properly in groups. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, people need to be accepted, as well as to be loved, this is one of the typical needs that almost every human being, consciously or unconsciously, wants to be satisfied. Moreover, the importance of socialization lies in that there is almost no known area of life that social ability is not wanted. Even an isolated writer, for instance, has to make contact with his/her publishers.

In addition, since children are undoubtedly  the future of the society, what it might have brought to the society as a whole if such a process of socialization is absent in their early life path? Imagine, when the person-to-person interactions give their way to communication barriers, verbal or physical confrontations, then the society cannot function systematically as it is supposed to be. As a consequence, children, who later grow into adults and become members of society burdened with corresponding responsibilities and obligations, will plunge themselves into extraordinary difficulty when they need clothes, food, or whatever necessary for their sustenance. Further impossible is the share of knowledge, experience, and other valuable resources. Society, conceptualized as an organic group of people, then becomes a pile of pieces of fragments. That is why children’s socialization is so significant for the destiny of a society.
       
Now that socialization plays such a crucial role for both the society and children themselves, unsurprisingly people-those who are parents, school teachers, and communities-are focusing particularly close attention on how to raise children socially. Many home schooling are now condemned by educators for depriving children peer relationship necessary for socialization, and children are more and more encouraged to participated in activities performed in groups. All these efforts seem to be a sign of recognition that socialization is part and parcel of child rearing.
But are they really lead children to a desired direction? After all, people, no matter children or adults, is a dynamic concept changing with time and environmental factors. Given that children's identities and surroundings differ so much from ours, do we really know what is best for they and the future society? Maybe yes, maybe no. If no one is one hundred percent sure how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, why not give them enough space safe and free, and leave them alone?

In conclusion, socialization should be emphasized to foster children adapting better to their later life, and bringing a better society as well. But whether we have already learned how to raise children that live up to our expectations remains unknown, this is too complex and perplexed question to answer.

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issue130 How children are socialized today determines the destiny of sociey. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can bring about a better society.

I agree with the statement that the destiny of society is determined by how children are socialized nowadays, but therein exists controversy on how to raise children, who can bring us a better society
.
Socialization is of essential importance for children's healthy development into their later life as adults. For one thing, socialization prepares them better for the corporation and teamwork. For another, on athe psychological level, unless a child possesses an ego strong enough, he or she will to some extent feel distressed by virtue of being avoided by others, provided he or she fails to behave properly in groups. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, people need to be accepted, as well as to be loved, this is one of the typical needs that almost every human being, consciously or unconsciously, wants to be satisfied. Moreover, the importance of socialization lies in that there is almost no known area of life that social ability is not wantedrequired. Even an isolated writer, for instance, has to make contact with his/her publishers.

In addition, since children are undoubtedly the future of the society, what it might have brought to the society as a whole if such a process of socialization is absent in their early life path?我怎么感觉这个句子有问题呀 Imagine, 这个词不好,deletlewhen the person-to-person interactions give their way to communication barriers, verbal or physical confrontations, then the society cannot function systematically as it is supposed to be. As a consequence, children, who 时态later grow into adults and become members of society burdened with corresponding responsibilities and obligations, will plunge themselves into extraordinary difficulty when they need clothes, food, or whatever necessary for their sustenance. Further impossible is the share of knowledge, experience, and other valuable resources. Society, conceptualized as an organic group of people, then becomes a pile of pieces of fragments. That is why children’s socialization is so significant for the destiny of a society.

Now that socialization plays such a crucial role for both the society and children themselves, unsurprisingly people-those who are parents, school teachers, and communities-are focusing particularly close attention on how to raise children socially. Many home schooling are now condemned by educators for depriving children peer relationship necessary for socialization, and children are more and more encouraged to participated小错误 in activities performed in groups. All these efforts seem to be a sign of recognition that socialization is part and parcel of child rearing.

ButHowever,语法有问题 are they really lead children to a desired direction? After all, people, no matter children or adults, is a dynamic concept changing with time and environmental factors. Given that children's identities and surroundings differ so much from ours, do we really know what is best for they and the future society? Maybe yes, maybe no. If no one is one hundred percent sure how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, why not give them enough space safe and free, and leave them alone? leave them alone 能有助他们better socialized,这点应深入,有助自圆其说
In conclusion, socialization should be emphasized to foster children adapting better to their later life, and bringing a better society as well. But whether we have already learned how to raise children that live up to our expectations remains unknown, this is too complex and perplexed question to answer.

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