issue104 同写 居然写了一个小时……

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看了主帖的分析之后写的，感觉写的时间太长而效果一般。请大家看看吧：）

It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears.
1 教育不仅仅是知识，同时也是道德和社会价值观的教育场地。（法律，道德）同时由于大学生往往是未来的社会中坚，所以对他们进行宣传定位是很有效的（调查）
2 但是青年人一般来说比较有叛逆性，可能反而挑战传统。例子，新青年在吸毒中占很大比例，绝大多数因为好奇和叛逆。这样适得其反
3 其他的渠道，例如媒体和网络等等。


Nowadays the function and effective of formal education is under fierce discussion. Some socialists insist that it is the primary proposal for a culture to perpetuate its specific value system through education, while the others hold opinions that it is far from enough to depend only on education to realize this purpose. As far as I am concerned, I tend to agree with the latter idea.

Admittedly, traditional education, as an important part of most people’s lives, plays a crucial role in the identification of social conventions for those people. Not only be places to study academic knowledge, colleges, universities and other schools are also providers of various classes of moral and legal information. Students can have a clear figure about what the social favors and what it fears in these educational places. For example, they will know that obeying rules, being honest and hardworking are good, while cheating, being vanish and lazy are bad. Obviously they will continue to practice in their daily lives as they are taught in school. Then, as a result, the social conventions are kept since those students are the future of their nations. Furthermore, they will try to perpetuate this value system to next generation, which means that the use of education is extraordinarily successful. A survey conducted by CYC (Chinese Young Commitment) in 1990 also supports my view, as about 87% respondents of this survey attribute their ideas of good and evil to the result of formal education in schools. Meanwhile, 90% parents say they will by the same way foster their children, from which we can see it is really effective for a society to use education as a tool.

However, the satisfied data mentioned above can only represent situation ten years before. As the world develops increasingly rapid, growing problems of education accompanied appears. Young people now are far more independent in mind than their ancestors. They have more own ideas to judge whether a phenomenon is positive or negative and would rather act against the social conventions than conform to them. A typical and somewhat extreme example is taking drugs. As I myself is a college student, I know that being addicted in drugs now in campus is not a shame but, to some degree, an honor to some adolescents. Pursuing for liberation from daily rules and restrictions by the family and school, they are eager to taste things not favored by the society in order to decide by themselves. In this case, education is no longer an ideal way for society to hold its criteria as the more it emphasizes, the more those young people want to topple it.

More ever, there is not only one way to achieve the goal of maintain formal standards. Although the development brings several new puzzles to educators, great technology nowadays may help a lot to the issue. Since new channels as internet web, TV program and so forth are provided for students to touch more about the outside world, they can receive related information about the criteria of right and wrong made by the society. Consequently, people may have equal possibility to be educated even outside formal educational places. However, this assumption needs careful preparation and long-term concern because they may be at the same time used to mislead children by criminal people.

Generally speaking, formal education is still a useful way to perpetuate the social standards now, but other factors are in need to be considered too. People had better focus on the education of children not only in school but also at home and other places so as to make a more satisfied result.

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It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears.


Nowadays the function and effectiveness of formal education is under fierce discussion. Some socialists insist that it is the primary proposal for a culture to perpetuate its specific value system through education, while the others hold opinions that it is far from enough to depend only on education to realize this purpose. As far as I am concerned, I tend to agree with the latter idea. [开头提出观点很明确。]

Admittedly, traditional education, as an important part of most people’s lives, plays a crucial role in the identification of social conventions for those people. Not only be places to study academic knowledge, colleges, universities and other schools are also providers of various classes of moral and legal information. Students can have a clear figure about what the social favors and what it fears in these educational places. For example, they will know that obeying rules, being honest and hardworking are good, while cheating, being vanish and lazy are bad. Obviously they will continue to practice in their daily lives as they are taught in school. Then, as a result, the social conventions are kept since those students are the future of their nations. Furthermore, they will try to perpetuate this value system to next generation, [这里的“一代传一代”提得很好，体现了perpetuate。] which means that the use of education is extraordinarily successful. A survey conducted by CYC (Chinese Young Commitment) in 1990 also supports my view, as about 87% respondents of this survey attribute their ideas of good and evil to the result of formal education in schools. Meanwhile, 90% parents say they will by the same way foster their children, from which we can see it is really effective for a society to use education as a tool.

However, the satisfied data mentioned above can only represent situation ten years before. As the world develops increasingly rapid, growing problems of education accompanied appears. Young people now are far more independent in mind than their ancestors. They have more own ideas to judge whether a phenomenon is positive or negative and would rather act against the social conventions than conform to them. A typical and somewhat extreme example is taking drugs. As I myself is a college student, I know that being addicted in drugs now in campus is not a shame but, to some degree, an honor to some adolescents. Pursuing for liberation from daily rules and restrictions by the family and school, they are eager to taste things not favored by the society in order to decide by themselves. In this case, education is no longer an ideal way for society to hold its criteria as the more it emphasizes, the more those young people want to topple it. [提出了正规教育面临的困难。]

Moreover, there is not only one way to achieve the goal of maintain formal standards. Although the development brings several new puzzles to educators, great technology nowadays may help a lot to the issue. Since new channels as Internet web, TV program and so forth are provided for students to touch more about the outside world, they can receive related information about the criteria of right and wrong made by the society. Consequently, people may have equal possibility to be educated even outside formal educational places. However, this assumption needs careful preparation and long-term concern because they may be at the same time used to mislead children by criminal people. [觉得对于你的立场、观点来说，这段还可以再加强论述。]

Generally speaking, formal education is still a useful way to perpetuate the social standards now, but other factors are in need to be considered too. People had better focus on the education of children not only in school but also at home and other places so as to make a more satisfied result. [与正文部分相比，结尾稍显单薄了些。]

觉得很大的一个优点是：文章的结构以及论述的顺序组织地很好。

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