Issue39 这个ISSUE是第二遍写，自已认为不错。哪位能帮我评价一下。必回拍

sailmywayUID: 161122

Issue39 "The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree."
Syllabus:        [560 words]
1.        One can not access to such integrated educational resources elsewhere as universities.
2.        Besides the knowledge and skills, students can gain a lot beneficial to their growth.
3.        In addition, for most of us, no matter we learn by ourselves or by attending universities, ultimately, we would have to take jobs in society. Nowadays, more and more people flock into universities for higher education. As to this phenomenon, however, some people claim that the intellectual benefits of taking part in a higher learning institutes has been overestimated and people usually could learn more by self-learning than by attending university for four years. In my opinion, however, the benefits could bring us would never be exaggerated compared to learning by oneself.
        To begin with, any one could not access an educational system as integrated as in a university. First of all, the universities usually provide their students a well-designed learning plan which anyone would hardly reach by himself. In a society with great advance science and technology as ours, any academic fields cover a variety of knowledge and principles, among which the beginner would feel confused the moment they enter this field as they do not know what should be taken to learn in the first place, what should followed, and what skills are essential for mastering this fields. In university, the experience professors usually give lectures for freshmen to explain these questions and instruct them about effective learning procedure by providing well-designed curriculum and carefully selected learning materials. Therefore learning in a university dwarfs self-learning in this point. Moreover, the universities usually can provide their students with necessary experimental facilities in order that students can verify what they learn from the class and books or scrutinize certain new ideas. However, many of setups for experiments are so expensive that they are unaffordable for most individuals. In addition, the libraries in universities are the sea of knowledge covering almost all the academic fields, where a university student can swim in the knowledge sea freely and inspirationally by reading various books and magazines. At the side of self-learners, however, they do not have this merit as to their learning, because the public libraries they can access usually failed to stock professional books as extensive and complete as university libraries do.
        Moreover, the intellectual benefits of attending higher education are far more than those. In university, students usually are cultivated the sense of both competition and cooperation. Students may compete for a union chairman, for a scholarship, or for just for a high grade and so forth. The sense of competition developed in students is not only helpful for their learning but also conducive for their future careers. At the same time, students also cooperate together to finish a program or paper which any single one might feel hard to achieve. The importance for one to develop a sense of cooperation has been widely recognized. The benefits of attending a university is also reflected by the emotional and moral education the university conduct. These kinds of education can help students to establish a rational and healthy outlook, which in turn benefit their learning and the future career development.
        Finally, no matter we learn by attending a university or by self-learning, we would ultimately step into the society. A degree diploma would usually gain the social recognition about our professional knowledge and skills and enable us more competent for obtain ideal positions.
        In the final analysis, we could never exaggerate the intellectual benefits the higher education could bring us compared to self-learning. The universities could not only provide learners an integrated educational system but also enhance their competent ability. All of which self-learning could hardly be comparable.

staralwaysUID: 193479

"The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree."

Nowadays, more and more people flock into universities for higher education. As to this phenomenon, however, some people claim that the intellectual benefits of taking part in a higher learning institutes has been overestimated and people usually could learn more by self-learning than by attending university for four years. In my opinion, however, the benefits could bring us would never be exaggerated compared to learning by oneself.  [开头提出观点很明确。]

To begin with, any one could not access an educational system as integrated as in a university. [TS句很清晰。] First of all, the universities usually provide their students a well-designed learning plan which anyone would hardly reach by himself. In a society with great advanced science and technology as ours, any academic fields cover a variety of knowledge and principles, among which the beginner would feel confused the moment they enter this field as they do not know what should be taken to learn in the first place, what should followed, and what skills are essential for mastering this fields. In university, the experience professors usually give lectures for freshmen to explain these questions and instruct them about effective learning procedure by providing well-designed curriculum and carefully selected learning materials. Therefore learning in a university dwarfs self-learning in this point. Moreover, the universities usually can provide their students with necessary experimental facilities in order that students can verify what they learn from the class and books or scrutinize certain new ideas. However, many of setups for experiments are so expensive that they are unaffordable for most individuals. In addition, the libraries in universities are the sea of knowledge covering almost all the academic fields, where a university student can swim in the knowledge sea freely and inspirationally by reading various books and magazines. At the side of self-learners, however, they do not have this merit as to their learning, because the public libraries they can access usually failed to stock professional books as extensive and complete as university libraries do. [这段的论述很精彩，很有层次感。]

Moreover, the intellectual benefits of attending higher education are far more than those. In university, students usually are cultivated the sense of both competition and cooperation. Students may compete for a union chairman, for a scholarship, or for just for a high grade and so forth. The sense of competition developed in students is not only helpful for their learning but also conducive for their future careers. At the same time, students also cooperate together to finish a program or a paper which any single one might feel hard to achieve. The importance for one to develop a sense of cooperation has been widely recognized. The benefits of attending a university is also reflected by the emotional and moral education the university conduct. These kinds of education can help students to establish a rational and healthy outlook, which in turn benefit their learning and the future career development. [觉得关于情感方面的教育可以单独拿出来作为一段。]

Finally, no matter we learn by attending a university or by self-learning, we would ultimately step into the society. A degree diploma would usually gain the social recognition about our professional knowledge and skills and enable us more competent for obtain ideal positions. [这段稍显单薄，觉得可以直接并到结尾里去。]

In the final analysis, we could never exaggerate the intellectual benefits the higher education could bring us compared to self-learning. The universities could not only provide learners an integrated educational system but also enhance their competent ability. All of which self-learning could hardly be comparable. [结尾中规中矩。]

另外，有点虎头蛇尾的感觉。