issue47 G89-8.10

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47."Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills

思路主要是讲the intellect 和non-intellect，写得还是很乱。

    Nowadays, the intellect and the non-intellect become the topics of the public. Which one is more important that should be emphasized in society? There must be a controversy. In my opinion, it is unfair to compare the intellect and the non-intellect that society needs both of them.
    The intellect which is on reasoning and other cognitive skills can motivate the society rapidly in many fields, especially in the fields of technology and productivity. This point of view is obvious in the research fields. The experts use their professional knowledge to cognize the world that when they discover something unusual, the abilities of reasoning and other cognitive skills are needed. Simply, they will carefully examine the process in which the new phenomenon comes from, use the intellect of reasoning, analysis and other cognitive skills to cognize it. Sometimes the results of their researches are meaningless, but most of them are used to develop the outstanding technological theories. With the attendance of mechanical science, the results of new technology will motivate the progress of productivity and the society reaches a higher level of production.
        However, the non-intellect which concentrates on emotion should not be ignored，to some extent, it represents the main thoughts of the society prior to the intellect. People consider emotion as their instincts. Everyone in the world has the ability of thinking, not only in the way of intellect but in the ways of communicating which is considered to be the representation of emotion. A man could not be separated from others, thus he communicates with others to share his happiness, sadness, enthusiasm and even loneness. All these aspects of the non-intellect influence one's perspectives, such as determination, choice, insistence and abandoning.
    Both the intellect and the non-intellect should be emphasized. The former helps people to cognize the world definitely and the later helps them to know themselves better. Without the intellect, as a member of the society, one could hardly take part into the social events because of the lack of ability of surviving by using technologies and the ability of accepting new methodologies. Meanwhile, it will lead serious problems to the public that if one who is far from the others lives in a non-communication world. That is, the non-intellect directly determines the mental world of man and it is coherent with what will the intellect represents.
    In conclusion, people are demanded the ability of the intellect on their daily life when they are working and doing researches, and the non-intellect help them to shape their own individual personalities which will benefit the intellect on the field of higher mental world. So it is wise to consider both of them to be the power of the society and each of them should not be ignored.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-10 at 17:35 ]

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ding!

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全文结构很好，但是感觉不到逻辑的合理性，象是一篇驳论文，开头和结尾很好，可是中间展开的不够清晰，段首句也就是主题句应该代表本段的主要内容，段尾句也应该和段首句呼应，最好是注意到这一点；
中间论据段的展开，段与段之间应该有很好的衔接，而不是每段独立，应该有一个明显的逻辑关系。
我说的比较苛刻，希望不要介意，另外，段内观点要明晰。