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Who made the most significant events and trends in history possible ? The famous few or groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten? The author prefers the latter, and hence complains that the study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. I partly agree with this statement, which is a little extreme. In my opinion, the debate that who made the history, those few elite or the common majority, must be considered from a case-by-case point of view.弱弱的问一句case by case是啥意思?因事而异? 开头很不错值得学习学习...
To begin with, in the field of science, the achievements are mostly made by the few, and it is reasonable for the study of history to only focus on elites. This can be understood very easily. Since the research on science is so hard an endeavor, which calls for efforts, intellects, patience, enthusiasm, curiosity and the master of knowledge , only a few people can play this role well for their whole life. Every period of time, science and technology are advanced by a few talents---or called elites这句就有点多余了. The common people just share the results of those progress. Thus it is considerable to say that a few elites push the science forward.
However既然是分成了3个领域,段落之间的关系就应该是基本并列的吧,最多也只有小的起伏,而however语气太强点了吧?, in the realm of art or literature, it seems a little different that the few elites has to rely on majority at times. For example, one of the most famous artists, Beethoven, composed the famous music illustrating the light of moon by the inspiration which he encountered when walking outside. 修饰语太多太长,可以考虑分离出1-2个 He heard the sound of piano played by a blind girl and was moved by her experience, which turned out to be the impulse to compose music. Here is another example in the realm of literature. Balzac, knowknown as a noted realism writer in France, made his famous series of novels by the phenomena he saw in French society 这里应该对那些现象加以修饰了,应该和人民大众紧密的联系起来.. Like such achievement achievements, only the composer can not finish his work without inspiration, themes, sources, most of which come from the common people. From this sense, the accomplishments in the field of art or literature are partly attributed to the majority except for those elites. 论证的不错,例子也很好,不过还应注意修饰成分的取舍和位置的安排.
Further, the effect of people in the field of society makes much more significant than those of the two realms above. A famous example can illustrate this point of view well. The Normandy Campaign, the allied invasion of Europe in World War II, is considered to be rather crucial in the war history. It is well known that this military operation is led by General Eisenhower, however, we can never neglect the effects of the soldiers who made their great efforts in the beach, especially those encountering heavy resist resistence of German army. Without their fearless sacrifice, this campaign would never be success at any rate. So it is the same with other wars and social revolutions. The leaders use their intellects while the common people give their firm support even by sacrifice. Thus, the progress must be attributed to the majority as well as the minority. 写的很好.
In sum, the question that which of the two groups--- the few elites and the common people--- made the most significant contribution to the history has a case-by-case answer. So it is the same with that which groups should be paid more attention in the study of history. The most important point is who made the major contribution to the history.
很不错的一篇文章,例子都很经典,用词也很准确, 学习ing......:p,还要注意一些小毛病 |
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