issue208 G-89-互助社-19日写作

huangdaoUID: 190018

感觉这个题目 很不好写 最近越写越差了 唉

Issue208
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：52分25秒     450words
从2005年7月19日9时39分到2005年7月19日10时52分
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The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.
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1 赞同题目
2 人的行为表示他们的态度和兴趣
3 社会特点可以从人的行为看出
4 社会的特点可以从人的集合－企业，团体等的行为看出
5 总结
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Fundamentally agree with the speaker, I concede people could recognize the attitudes and interests from the look, dress, and act of others. Similarly, a society's ideas and values could be noticed through the appearance and behaviors of its people directly or indirectly.

First of all, by observing a person's look, dress, and act, to some extent experienced people could know much about his or her attitudes and interests. From individual's daily dress and look, the person's attitude of life could be recognized. If the one's dress is always tidy, suitable, and clean, except the possibility that someone could help him or her to clean them, that would mean he or she has a healthy habit to wash clothes or keep them clean. And through a person's gentle act, the fact that the one received well family or school education is revealed. Thereby, in some fields, the attitude and interests could be known to others from the people's look, dress, and act.

The society to some extent is similar with individual, for observing the appearance and behavior of its people, the so. Sometimes these feathers could be recognized directly by the people, sometimes indirectly by the appearance and behavior of group of people, like community, nation, and so on. On the one hand, the common appearance and behavior of reveal the characters of the society. Like France, the romantic behavior of its people express the romance of the society, meanwhile the leisure style of people's life reveals the society's other character, the free and leisure phenomenon for everyone. While in USA, which is famous for its various cultures and customs, people could enjoy their own cultures and the different appearance and behavior of them release the character of the society.

On the other hand, the act of group people organized, which may appear as company, community, and so forth, could also reveal the characters of society. That means indirect ways of people express the feathers of the society. The two well-known CPU manufacture companies, Intel and AMD, are keeping fierce competing with each other, and the behavior express spirit of the free competition in the society. And the giant of software industry, Microsoft, always maintain a belief that offer the best to the customers, and this reveals the same value of the society. Therefore, the society's ideas and values to some extent could be recognized through the appearance and behavior of its people and other form of group people, like company etc.

To conclude, similar to the fact that to some extent the people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, under some states the appearance and behavior of a society's people could also express its ideas and values
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meteor18_leeUID: 189655

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Fundamentally agree with the speaker, I concede (that) people could recognize the attitudes and interests from the look, dress, and act of others. Similarly, a society's ideas and values could be noticed through the appearance and behaviors of its people directly or indirectly.

First of all, by observing a person's look, dress, and act, to some extent experienced people could know much about his or her attitudes and interests. From individual's daily dress and look, the person's attitude of life could be recognized. (这句话其实就是在重复第一句话，不如删掉，切入例证的好)If the (去掉the) one's dress is always tidy, suitable, and clean, except (for) the possibility that someone could help him or her to clean them,(实在是很不地道的句子，但是还是想不出怎么改，抱歉啊) that would mean he or she has a healthy habit to wash clothes or keep them clean (clean换个词吧，比如neat). And through a person's gentle act (act换个behavior,词汇多样一些如何？) , the fact that the one received well family or school education is revealed. (我的建议，整句改成: And a person's gentle behavior reveals a well family or school education in his or her life.) Thereby, in some fields, the (the改成people's) attitude and interests could be known to others from the people's (people's改成their) look, dress, and act. （感觉语言不太丰富）

The society to some extent is similar with individual, for observing the appearance and behavior of its people, the so. （看不懂这里） Sometimes these feathers (these feathers?那些？哪些？感觉上文没交代啊) could be recognized directly by the people, sometimes indirectly by the appearance and behavior of group of people, like community, nation, and so on. On the one hand, the common appearance and behavior of (去掉of是不是通些?) reveal the characters of the society. Like France, the romantic behavior of its people express the romance of the society, meanwhile the leisure style of people's life reveals the society's other character, the free and leisure phenomenon for everyone. While in USA, which is famous for its various cultures and customs, people could enjoy their own cultures and the different appearance and behavior of them release the character of the society. （举例子的两句话都村子指代不清的情况，有点无从下手，请再思考一下，也请高人指点啊！）
On the other hand, the act of group people organized, which may appear as company, community, and so forth, could also reveal the characters of society. That means indirect ways of people express the feathers of the society. The two well-known CPU manufacture companies, Intel and AMD, are keeping fierce (fiercely) competing with each other, and the behavior express spirit of the free competition (the spirit of free competition) in the society. And the giant of software industry, Microsoft, always maintain a belief that (belief of) offer (offering) the best to the customers, and this reveals the same value of the society. Therefore, the society's ideas and values to some extent could be recognized through the appearance and behavior of its people and other form of group people, like company etc.

To conclude, similar to the fact that to some extent the people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, under some states the appearance and behavior of a society's people could also express its ideas and values. (总体感觉论证得不够有力哦，的确是个难题目，限时写出来很不错了，加油哦，预祝考试成功)

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