Argument205寄托四人组 8月21日作业

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从2005年7月21日15时55分到2005年7月21日16时32分
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The following appeared in a recommendation from the president of Amburg's Chamber of Commerce.
'Last October the city of Belleville installed high intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined almost immediately. The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on bicycles in its business district but the rate of vandalism there remains constant. Since high intensity lighting is apparently the most effective way to combat crime, we should install such lighting throughout Amburg. By reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods in our city.'
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In this argument, through a comparison between the two cities, the arguer recommends that the city of Belleville should adopt the same measure of installing more lighting throughout the neighborhoods as the city of Amburg. The reasoning, however, suffers from several major critical flaws. A failure to work out the most efficient measures to be taken would seriously hinder the city from conquering the crime and further revitalizing the neighborhoods.

In the first place, the author fails to prove that there is a causal relationship between the installation of high intensity lighting in the central business district and the decline of vandalism. More lighting could help reduce vandalism，but this may not be the only measure taken. It is quite possible that besides adding more lights, Belleville has adopted a series of other measures to deal with various crimes, for instance, increasing police patrols on the roads, implementing the laws and regulations to give more severe punishments on vandalism and other forms of crimes, and offer more efficient education on the morality so that people could realize the immorality of vandalism etc.

In the second place, it is too hasty for the author to conclude that the police patrols on bicycles in the business districts of Amburg have not exerted any positive influence on lowering the vandalism rate and other types of crimes. No comparison concerning the crime rate before this measure and after the enforcement of it is offered to show there is no progress. Furthermore, even if this measure does contribute little to control vandalism, it doe not mean it could not help control other types of crimes because the general public more often do not consider vandalism as a type of crime rather a issue of morality. Thus the local government could begin to change the situation through more education on vandalism first.

Finally, the arguer fails to consider other measures against crimes and ways to revitalize the neighborhoods in the city. Lighting could be one efficient way to combat the vandalism and other forms of crime, however, to control the crime requires far more measures simply than this. The governmental implementation and strict enforcement of laws, more police and facilities guarding the public safety and the general public's awareness all help conquer the problem of crimes. Furthermore, even if the crime rate is lowered, this alone could not revitalize the declining neighborhoods. To deal with this problem, first it is necessary to find out the causes of the decline of this area. The factors of under-developed commerce, bad environment, lack of public facilities etc. could all lead to the decline. It would not help change the situation if attention is only paid on controlling the crimes.

In sum, the analysis in this argument is unconvincing due to its flawed reasoning. To better evaluate the argument, a logical comparison on the measures taken by the two should be made. In addition, a more complete research can be carried out to find out the efficient ways to deal with the crimes and to revitalize the city.

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In this argument, through a comparison between the two cities, the arguer recommends that the city of Belleville should install the same lighting….adopt the same measure of installing more lighting throughout the neighborhoods as the city of Amburg. The reasoning, however, suffers from several major critical flaws. A failure to work out the most efficient measuresno s- to be taken delete to be takenwould seriously hinder the city from conquering the crime and further revitalizing the neighborhoods.

In the first place, the author fails to prove that there is a causal relationship between the installation of high intensity lighting in the central business district and the decline of vandalism. More lighting could help reduce vandalism，but this may not be the only measure taken.后面都分析的很透彻 It is quite possible that besides adding more lights, Belleville has adopted a series of other measures to deal with various crimes, for instance, increasing police patrols on the roads, implementing the laws and regulations to give more severe punishments on vandalism and other forms of crimes, and offer more efficient education on the morality so that people could realize the immorality of vandalism etc.
开头的两句改一下。第2句说灯光不是唯一的原因，可能 有其他的原因。。。要不然还是因果关系。
In the second place, it is too hasty for the author to conclude that the police patrols on bicycles in the business districts of Amburg have not exerted any positive influence on lowering the vandalism rate and other types of crimes. No comparison concerning the crime rate before this measure and after the enforcement of it is offered to show there is no progress.不明白了，题目不是说rate remains constant么？ Furthermore, even if this measure does contribute little to control vandalism, it doe not mean it could not help control other types of crimes because the general public more often do not consider vandalism as a type of crime rather a issue of morality. Thus the local government could begin to change the situation through more education on vandalism first.
这一段的FURTHER MORE也不明白啊。不认为V是犯罪和巡警对其他犯罪的控制有什么关系？认为V有可能不是犯罪，这也牵强了点。
Finally, the arguer fails to consider other measures against crimes and ways to revitalize the neighborhoods in the city. Lighting could be one efficient way to combat the vandalism and other forms of crime, however, to control the crime requires far more measures simply than this.恩那，和你的ts 跑了。应该是有其他的方法吧，怎么成了仅有灯光是不够的？ The governmental implementation and strict enforcement of laws, more police and facilities guarding the public safety and the general public's awareness all help conquer the problem of crimes. Furthermore, even if the crime rate is lowered, this alone could not revitalize the declining neighborhoods. To deal with this problem, first it is necessary to find out the causes of the decline of this area. The factors of under-developed commerce, bad environment, lack of public facilities etc. could all lead to the decline. It would not help change the situation if attention is only paid on controlling the crimes.
后半部分分析的好！
In sum, the analysis in this argument is unconvincing due to its flawed reasoning. To better evaluate the argument, a logical comparison on the measures taken by the two should be made. In addition, a more complete research can be carried out to find out the efficient ways to deal with the crimes and to revitalize the city.
第2段没看明白。
先说灯光和V没有直接的关系。
其次，灯光对V有效，对别的犯罪有没有效？可能A城的V犯罪绿低的可怕，砂仁放火的罪倒是不少。
或许B的V 罪下降后，还比A城的高很多？
给你补充下
每段的后面都分析的呀好，开头可以再减少摸版的姐姐，恩恩