ARGUMENT179

michel_shaoUID: 204704

179The following is a memorandum written by the director of personnel to the president of the Cedar Corporation.
'It would be a mistake to rehire the Good-Taste Company to supply the food in our employee cafeteria next year. It is the second most expensive caterer in the city. In addition, its prices have risen in each of the last three years, and it refuses to provide meals for people on special diets. Just last month three employees complained to me that they no longer eat in the cafeteria because they find the experience 'unbearable.' Our company should instead hire Discount Foods. Discount is a family-owned local company and it offers a varied menu of fish and poultry. I recently tasted a sample lunch at one of the many companies that Discount serves and it was delicious-an indication that hiring Discount will lead to improved employee satisfaction.'

限时间超了１３分钟，希望大家多指点！
提纲：
1.价格不是决定质量的唯一标准；价格上涨可能是由于原料上涨。
2抱怨可能不是因为 Good-Taste Company，即使是，三个人也很少，不足以代表所有
3即使Good-Taste Company不行Discount也未必是好选择

In this memo the director recommends that the Cedar Corporation should rehire Discount Foods to supply the food in the employee cafeteria instead of the previous Good-Taste Company. To support this recommendation the author points out that the price of Good-Taste is very high. The author also cites a fact that three employees complained about eating in the cafeteria. In addition, the author suggests that a sample lunch of Discount was delicious,thus hiring Discount will improve employee satisfaction. As it stands, the argument suffers from several critical flaws as follows.

In the first place, the author unfairly assumes that the price of a company decides the quality of service. Perhaps though Good-Taste is the second expensive caterer in the city, the taste and the quality may be one of the best companies. Moreover, the rise of price in Good-Taste may because the food materials have risen in recent years. Lacking any information about other companies' price and food, he director's conclusion that the Good-Taste is not suitable for Cedar Corporation is unconvinced.

In the second place, the three complaints that the director cites in the memo cannot indicated that the employees are discontent about the Good-Taste. Without provide effective evidence that the complaints are displeasure about the food of Good-Taste, it is entirely possible that employees are unsatisfied about the environment of the cafeteria. Even if the three complaints are angry because of Good-taste, the author does not offer the total number of the employees of Cedar Corporation. Perhaps most employees are satisfied about the food. In short, the author fails to provide enough evidence to support that employees are not content about Good-Taste.

Finally, even the Good-Taste is not suitable for Cedar Corporation any more, it is unfairly to assume that the Discount will be a better choice. The director only cites an evidence that one sample lunch of the Discount is delicious. However only a sample can not indicated the whole food quality of Discount. Without provide other information about food of Discount, it is entirely possible that in order to cater the author's favor, Discount make this special sample lunch. In short, the evidence of a sample lunch can not convince me that the Discount will satisfy most of employees in Cedar Corporation.

To sum up, the author's recommendation is based on several unconvinced assumptions. To strengthen this view, the author must offer more information about the price and quality of the Good-taste and the Discount. The author must also present effective evidence that most employees indeed dislike the food supplied by Good-Taste. To better evaluate the recommendation, I need to know the most employees' attitudes about Discount.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-22 at 18:42 ]

禾日因心UID: 174510

LZ ，我先占个位，A的题目等我琢磨后，再来和你讨论哈

meteor18_leeUID: 189655

In this memo the director recommends that the Cedar Corporation should rehire (为什么是rehire啊，题目有说吗) Discount Foods to supply the food in the employee cafeteria instead of the previous Good-Taste Company. To support this recommendation the author points out that the price of Good-Taste is very high. The author also cites a fact that three employees complained about eating in the cafeteria. In addition, the author suggests that a sample lunch of Discount was delicious, thus hiring Discount will improve employee satisfaction. As it stands, the argument suffers from several critical flaws as follows.（虽然听了孙远给的开头是这样的模板，但是我想这样的开头还是太长了，重点放在正文攻击的好，但是如果正文写完了再写开头有时间写这多也可以吧，总的来说提倡简洁明了的开头）

In the first place, the author unfairly assumes that the price of a company decides the quality of service. Perhaps though （Perhaps和后面的may be重复） Good-Taste is the second expensive caterer in the city, the taste and the quality may be one of the best companies. Moreover, the rise of price in Good-Taste may because the food materials have risen in recent years. Lacking any information about other companies' price and food, he director's conclusion that the Good-Taste is not suitable for Cedar Corporation is unconvinced.（不错，有理有据，不过结尾句前要再分析一句可能会更丰满些，不然这个other好像有点突兀）
In the second place, the three complaints that the director cites in the memo cannot indicated that the （加个all） employees are discontent about the Good-Taste. Without provide effective evidence that the complaints are displeasure about the food of Good-Taste, it is entirely possible that employees are unsatisfied about the environment of the cafeteria. Even if the three complaints are angry because of Good-taste, the author does not offer （offer用在这里怪怪的，跟宾语不搭）the total number of the employees of Cedar Corporation. Perhaps most employees are satisfied about the food. In short, the author fails to provide enough evidence to support that employees are not content about Good-Taste. （argument的特征语言掌握得很好啊！）

Finally, even the Good-Taste is not suitable for Cedar Corporation any more, it is unfairly to assume that the Discount will be a better choice. The director only cites an evidence that one sample lunch of the Discount is delicious. However only a sample can not indicated the whole food quality of Discount. Without provide other information about food of Discount, it is entirely possible that in order to cater the author's favor, Discount make this special sample lunch. In short, the evidence of a sample lunch can not convince me that the Discount will satisfy most of employees in Cedar Corporation.

To sum up, the author's recommendation is based on several unconvinced assumptions. To strengthen this view, the author must offer more information about the price and quality of the Good-taste and the Discount. The author must also present effective evidence that most employees indeed dislike the food supplied by Good-Taste. To better evaluate the recommendation, I need to know the most employees' attitudes about Discount. （不错不错，很八股）

我觉得还不错啊，错误攻击得没问题，记得两年前上新的方讲过的题，比较好写，楼主限时了多久，练了多少篇啊，我还没开始限时，才写了1A，1I，唉！据说上了考场一激动都能写完不会超时，呵呵，上帝保佑啊！
我的（这两篇均未限时）
Issue208：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=323617
argument169：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=324824&extra=page%3D1
多谢！

michel_shaoUID: 204704

谢谢meteor18_lee
超时了10多分钟，希望考试时候不会超时！
而且本人写ISSUE不但超时而且写的烂，自己都堆着不愿再看

我也觉得第一段要写很久，但只是把题目改写一下，又长又没有意思。
语言部分我会再注意。

meteor18_leeUID: 189655

LZ写了一堆issue了啊，pf啊！
分享一下限时经验啊，就是抓着一道题不管三七二十一就开写么？我是不是先该把题库看完再开写，限时写的题至少是自己看过的题？
作业我每次都不能按时交，5555

michel_shaoUID: 204704

我写了部分题的中文错误
其实我是先把主要攻击点找出来再写，而且固定了开头和结尾。

后来我又试了按新东方老师的说法，先打开头结尾和每段的T。S，发现超时更少了，但是为了不超时，字数也没有写够：（


主要是ISSUE啊，大家怎么准备语言和例子的？？