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Along with the development of science and technology, sharing knowledge and experiences with other field fields of study become more and more significant in scientific research. Considering the difficulty of research by single way,感觉这里的意思是用一种方法研究,想表达的可能是仅靠学科内知识发展该学科,换个词比较好 many scientists begin to realize that the importance of knowledge which brought by outsiders from other field of study. I think all the researchers no matter what field did they belong to should cooperate with other researchers, that could makes great contribution to the development of science这句是中心句吗?怎么重点转到researchers了?或许还是不要延伸比较好,题目里是fields, 不要换成science.
First of all, we should notice that variety of fields was divided by people themselves many years ago. In that time, scientists could build some milestones 用的好for scientific research by concentrating on one field. But after many great progress of science are made,过去完成是否更合适? scientists are cognizant of the truth that single way of study is not enough to make advancement until outsiders bring their knowledge from other fields. In fact, sciences in various 换个词吧,本段段首刚用过fields are inextricably related. Learning the interaction of the variety of disciplines could make good efforts for science in the modern society.
As we know, more and more breakthroughs are made by studying the interaction of disciplines. According to the latest survey, published by the magazine called Nature, shows that more than eighty percent of scientific research fruits due to sharing knowledge and experience in another or several field of study.这个例子好贴切哦For example, a biologist did some researches on the structure of the DNA molecule by X-ray which was used for detecting the structure of element by physical scientist in 1953. The result of the experiment was quite amazing that it could help people to analyze the heredity functions of human being. A biologist, a chemist and a physical scientist shared the 1962 Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine for this discovery. It is a clear evidence to prove that sharing knowledge and experience could advance science and technology.这句是不是放到段首做TS比较好?
Bringing some knowledge and experience from other field of study could help scientists make some good result of the study, sometimes the new result may feed back to the original field.段首句之前最好来点表示与上面段落逻辑关系的词句 As we know, electronics rapidly developed in the early 1940s because of the Second World War. In order to doing a lot of calculations, the Defense Department of USA generated a new machine called ENIAC, which is the first computer in the world. The great machine which was made by radio tube played an important role for solving difficult problem in military affairs and material science. And then, the transistor was invented by the technologist due to the great breakthrough of the material science. Because of great performance of the transistor, the ability of the newer computer was much stronger than ENIAC. That also could prove the advantage of interaction of disciplines. 没找到问题:victory:
In a sum, we could conclude that scientist 用复数should share their knowledge and experience before research. Otherwise, the study may not advance due to the restriction of mind. The more cooperation they make, the more advancement of science and technology they obtain.
感觉语言很流畅,比我好多了,说不出什么
结构也是比较清晰的,只是几个例证段之间的逻辑关系不是很明白,特别是讲反作用的,是不是比前一段要重要一点啊?
另外,不知道Issue中能不能将原题延伸出去讲的?比如楼主一直用的是the scientist shoule 表达题目里面的field of study.
楼主的例子举得好漂亮啊,要好好向你学习!
就这些了,个人的意见,不对请指教,共同进步!
不好意思,昨天熬夜今天一直头晕晕的,到现在才改好,请多多包涵:)
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