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[i习作temp] issue38 【FLAMY JULY小组】第一次作业 [复制链接]

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Television has exerted an indispensable influence in the era of electricity. I agree with the speaker that comparing with books, television indeed presents some advantages for people to learn more efficiently and effectively. However, I must point out that it is not convincible for the speaker to hold the argument that books will be rendered obsolete, that is, people can learn as much as by watching television as they can by reading books.

Firstly, I have to admit that there are certain advantages that television surpasses books. In fact, the way people learn has changed a lot after the invention of television, in that it provides us with visual pictures and videos, through which people could obtain dynamic, colorful knowledge. Many people, especially children, find this type of knowledge much more convenient and interesting to remember. Besides, movies and documentaries adapted from novels offer opportunities for audience to understand the synopses of books without spending much time reading them. In addition, television even facilitates the illiterate and the blind, for they can watch or hear the program without reading the words.

Notwithstanding the foregoing advantages given by television, it is rather inappropriate to overlook the respects in which books are inherently superior to other things. What should be emphasized is the relatively low cost of books, which enables people to continue learning even though there is no electricity or television sets. So it is books that give the poor and those live in remote areas the right to learn. Besides, books are obviously more portable and durable than television sets. As a result, it is possible for one to use small pieces of time to study. For example, one can accomplish several pages when sitting in the subway and enjoy the pleasure of reading.

Another compelling argument against the speaker’s claim is that books are more suitable for people, especially for teenagers, to form a positive view of life, because books can be selected and controlled more easily. For example, in order to help teenagers to learn well, Parents, teachers and editors find it their duty to look through the content of books carefully, and try their best to conduct teenagers to read books that are most helpful. Television, on the other hand, prefers attractive information to healthy knowledge. Owners and managers of television medias pay much attention to sensational and profitable programs, which seems more of appealing and exciting than sensible and rational. This can be demonstrated by many recreation programs and operas, through which people are pleased with relaxing thoroughly instead of thinking carefully.

Finally, comparing with television programs, in which views and information are changing rapidly, books are more likely to inform us with steady views and knowledge. Thus space is preserved for later generations to study and think. For instance, in some countries, praises towards one occupied the television when he was the leader of the country, but after his failure in the election, criticisms were coming up on many official programs. At this time, how could we acquire an objective evaluation of this figure simply by watching television? Perhaps the only thing that remains objective is his published works, with which one has the opportunity to ponder before the idea of his own is formed.

From what have been discussed above, I draw the conclusion that television can be more welcomed as a means of learning than books in some aspects. However, neither of them can render the other one obsolete because they are quite different: the television is more efficient, attractive and changeable while books are rather intellectual, educational and perpetual. Thus, they are both required by people willing to learn.

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发表于 2006-7-5 15:08:16 |只看该作者
Television has exerted an indispensable influence in the era of electricity. I agree with the speaker that comparing with books, television indeed presents some advantages for people to learn more efficiently and effectively. However, I must point
out that it is not convincible for the speaker to hold the argument that books will be rendered obsolete, that is, people can learn as much as by watching television as they can by reading books.

Firstly, I have to admit that there are certain advantages that television surpasses books. In fact, the way people learn has changed a lot after the invention of television, in that(是指代television的定语从句么,如果是的话应该用which) it provides us
with visual pictures and videos, through which people could obtain dynamic, colorful knowledge.(两个定语从句嵌套感觉有点拗口)Many people, especially children, find this type of knowledge much more convenient and interesting to remember. Besides, movies and documentaries adapted from novels offer opportunities for audience to understand the synopses(synopsis) of books without spending much time reading them. In addition, television even facilitates the illiterate and the blind, for they can watch or hear the program without reading the words.(这个例子挺好)

Notwithstanding the foregoing advantages given by television, it is rather inappropriate to overlook the respects in which books are inherently superior to other things. What should be emphasized is the relatively low cost of books, which enables people to continue learning even though there is no electricity or television sets. So it is books that give the poor and those live in remote areas the right to learn. Besides, books are obviously more portable and durable than television sets. As a result, it is possible for one to use small pieces of time to study. For example, one can accomplish several pages when sitting in the subway and enjoy the pleasure of reading.

Another compelling argument against the speaker’s claim is that books are more suitable for people, especially for(这个for是否稍嫌多余) teenagers, to form a positive view of life, because books can be selected and controlled more easily. For example, in order to help teenagers to learn well, Parents, teachers and editors find it their duty to look through the content of books carefully, and try their best to conduct teenagers to read books that are most helpful. Television, on the other hand, prefers attractive information to healthy knowledge. Owners and managers of television medias pay much attention to sensational and profitable programs, which seems more of appealing and exciting than sensible and rational. This can be demonstrated by many recreation programs and operas, through which people are pleased with relaxing thoroughly instead of thinking carefully.

Finally, comparing(compared?) with television programs, in which views and information are changing rapidly, books are more likely to inform us with steady views and knowledge. Thus space is preserved for later generations to study and think. For instance, in some countries, praises towards one occupied the television when he was the leader of the country, but after his failure in the election, criticisms were coming up on many official programs. At this time, how could we acquire an objective evaluation of this figure simply by watching television? Perhaps the only thing that remains objective is his published works, with which one has the opportunity to ponder before the idea of his own is formed. (这个例子不错,电视节目的时效性太强)
From what have been discussed above, I draw the conclusion that television can be more welcomed as a means of learning than books in some aspects. However, neither of them can render the other one obsolete because they are quite different: the television is more efficient, attractive and changeable while books are rather intellectual, educational and perpetual. Thus, they are both required by people willing to learn.(结尾同前面的呼应很强)

写得真不错,论证很严密,词汇丰富表达得体,以我的水平很难做出太多修改。。。把你这篇文章收藏了,好好学习下,呵呵
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发表于 2006-7-5 18:14:51 |只看该作者

真是太谢谢了

真的很感谢你这么鼓励我,我好感动啊,嗯,重新有动力了!

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