[0610G--unlimited gre works 战队作文大帖]

sly60321UID: 2228803

我亲爱的3号战友，请注意您发作业链接的格式，看看别的战友的发法。
还有，您的题号130是不对的，应该是51。
不过还好130以后要写的，下次我们写130时你就写51。

[ 本帖最后由 sly60321 于 2006-7-17 21:18 编辑 ]

harbersideUID: 2151376

sly60321UID: 2228803

Youth is the hope of the society and the future of the society. Without youth our society would have no meaning at all. Our society is[a] big family and is composed of children and adults. In other words children in[in去掉] today will be becoming[be becoming 改为become] adult[adults] tomorrow. However, it is questionable to[改为that] how to bring up our children to build up our prosperous society. Some people state that we don’t know how to raise children, while others point out that our children can be prepared for the society with our help. In my opinion, one thing has two sides and we should be critically thinking that to some extent we know how to rear our children for future better society.

Our society is equipped with better facilities and infrasctures[拼写错误] to our children. Besides that, more and more parents with higher education know how to teach their children to be qualified citizen in the future. During weekend, parents lead their children [to] go to museum to learn history stories, go to farm house to know how the vegetable are planted and grown. In the school, teachers with specific knowledge ask questions during class time and stimulate the enthusiasms[这个词应该不可数] of children to hover[在海洋中盘旋似乎不妥] the sea of knowledge. And school provides the course-moralistics[course of moralistics about]-how to behave in the society. With all these[用一个all就可以了] helps children in the society absorb these nutritions[不可数] to better growth[grow better].

Unfortunately, we don’t know how to raise children to[改为for] tomorrow society[貌似和前一段矛盾了，可以换种说法比方说目前还存在一些弊端]. As parents we all want to provide as much as possible for our children to live in[ to live in去掉]. However, this is always against our will to better prepare them for the competitive society. For example, since China carried out the Family Planning (only one child policy) children lost many merits, such as self-reliance and self-confidence, these result from the indulgence of grandparents and parents. With little obstacles our children are hesitant to take action or try to avoid from [from去掉]taking duties. If let this situation happen, it is no doubt our society is fraught with citizens without responsibilities. Therefore, only providing food to our children is not enough.[这句话有点chinglish]

In conclusion, to raise children is [a]very tuff task not only for parents but also for our society. Although the difficulties confront us, we are sure to say we can raise our children who can be beneficial for the future society.
[例子对论点的支持还可以。
字数少了些，另外语法错误，拼写错误比较多，可以在发之前先在word里改一下。
论证深度不够，另外对于How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. 可展开分析。
才第一篇好好加油！]

queeniezUID: 2203712

要写argument吗？怎么大家都只发了issue呢？

jakamUID: 2217362

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-497075-1-2.html

sly60321UID: 2228803

直接编辑第一张跟帖把新作业链接贴进去就可以了，不用另外开一帖，谢谢配合。
看一下我的作业链接帖就明白了。

sly60321UID: 2228803

argument未作要求，不过写了的话也可以把链接帖近来，有兴趣的队友去看一看，
或者对哪篇argument的错误有疑问也可以来探讨。

fenghua9801UID: 2191885

大家帖作文的时候能否把提纲也列一下，一来将来好复习，二来可以方便改作文的战友

xupeng66UID: 2193287

issue:https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D101
argument:https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D102

emeraUID: 2202047

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

sly60321UID: 2228803

请大家按照要求贴作业，把链接用编辑贴到作业链接帖里，不用每次单开一帖贴链接 。
不清楚的话看看我的作业链接帖就明白了。

sly60321UID: 2228803

3号战友这几天出差，不能交改作业。
特此通知。

sly60321UID: 2228803

不错，支持一个。大家发前列下提纲好吧。

[ 本帖最后由 sly60321 于 2006-7-19 02:34 编辑 ]

georgiayzhUID: 2225237

请问队长:我可以加入这个小组吗? 我是8月9号考.时间很紧,希望队长同意~~~
谢谢谢谢了!!!!
能不能带上我, 我准备的有点晚,不过昨天正好写了issue51,希望~~~~~~~
我会努力写作业,努力帮其他组员改作业的.
留下我的联系方式 email: aphrodite-yzh@hotmail.com
                    qq  :114441613

[ 本帖最后由 georgiayzh 于 2006-7-20 00:42 编辑 ]

sly60321UID: 2228803

另外，新加10号georgiayzh

[ 本帖最后由 sly60321 于 2006-7-20 08:05 编辑 ]