argument76 十二月高强组第四周周一作业,请拍!

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题目：ARGUMENT 76 - The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.

"A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin."
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1, 看上去像个广告而不是合理的建议， 没有详细的分析与对比，很片面。
2 调查不可信，
A  report 而不是科学检测
B  样本代表性
C  就算有效不一定是因为肥皂
The arguer asserts that Luxess is effective in improving the condition of facial skin. Based on the facts that the arguer provides, I cannot concede with this assertion since the evidence and reasoning is flawed in several points.

At first glance, this argument is much like an advertisement rather that credible article. Form the argument, I find no clue about whether that it is a well-established conclusion that based on detailed analysis and equally compare with others since this argument provides no other products for compare and contrast. The standpoint of the arguer is one-sided from the evidence he has provided. If it is really an advertisement, it is unpersuasive since the aim of advertisement is to promote sales rather than provide sound suggestion, if so, we could totally neglect this assertion made by the arguer since advertisement itself is unconvincing.

In addition, the study that the arguer cites is also specious in several points. On the first place, the conclusion that the soap is effective is entirely based on the report of the volunteers which is lack of the scientific measurement of the effectiveness. Common sense informs me that the feels about self-appearance are always not accurate since the mood and the state of mind always influence their feelings. When in high mode, people may feel better about themselves even their actual skin conditions is not as good. Without any convincing measurements of the skin condition, we cannot agree that the soap is truly effective. On the second place, the participants are all volunteers that may be not representative of the whole population. Since the customers of this soap may be all kinds of people in different race, of different complexions, and in different ages. Whereas the volunteers may mostly belong to a certain group such as middle age women, or with collar ladies. The arguer has to assure us that the soap will beneficial to all kind of people before we agree with his assertion. Barely based on the samples of random volunteers, I could not conclude that the soap is effective to the whole population.

Moreover, even if the condition of facial skin actually improved during using such soap, it is not necessary mean that the soap is the cause of the improvement. There are many other factors that may effect the facial skin condition， for example, the weather, spiritual state and the diet. Perhaps the participants eat a more health diet during the study that lead to the improvement of the skin. Perhaps the weather there during the study is mild and comfortable. Perhaps the participants are more conscious about their facial skin in the study.  All the facts listed above could cause the improvement of the condition of facial skin, without ruling out other possibilities that may be the reason, the arguer could not persuade me that the soap in effective.

To sum up, the arguer’s state is logically flawed as well as lacking the evidence. To strengthen the argument, the arguer has to provide more convincing studies and more specific data.  

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The arguer asserts that Luxess is effective in improving the condition of facial skin. Based on the facts that the arguer provides, I cannot concede with this assertion since the evidence and reasoning is(are) flawed in several points.

At first glance, this argument is much like an advertisement rather that(than) credible article.(好象没说过ARGUMENT不可以是广告吧. 你要找的是文章的逻辑错误而不是文章的目的有什么不对) Form the argument, I find no clue about whether that it is a well-established conclusion that based on detailed analysis and equally compare with others since this argument provides no other products for compare and contrast.(验证产品有效不一定要拿别的产品来对比吧?) The standpoint of the arguer is one-sided from the evidence he has provided. If it is really an advertisement, it is unpersuasive since the aim of advertisement is to promote sales rather than provide sound suggestion, if so, we could totally neglect this assertion made by the arguer since advertisement itself is unconvincing.(个人认为此攻击点不成立, 而且你也没提出很有力的反驳. 没有理由因为一篇文章是广告就推翻它, 相反, 优秀的广告应该是逻辑严密论证合理的, 每期的BusinessWeek上都有大版面的Special Advertisement, 其严密程度不亚于某些学术性文章.)

In addition, the study that the arguer cites is also specious(华而不实的?这个词用在这很怪) in several points. On the first place, the conclusion that the soap is effective is entirely based on the report of the volunteers which is lack of the scientific measurement of the effectiveness. Common sense informs me that the feels about self-appearance are always not accurate since the mood and the state of mind always influence their feelings. When in high mode, people may feel better about themselves even their actual skin conditions is not as good  (as so). Without any convincing measurements of the skin condition, we cannot agree that the soap is truly effective(the soap?). On the second place, the participants are all volunteers that may be not representative of the whole population. Since the customers of this soap may be all kinds of people in different race, of different complexions, and in different ages. Whereas the volunteers may mostly belong to a certain group such as middle age women, or with collar ladies. The arguer has to assure us that the soap will beneficial to all kind of people before we agree with his assertion. Barely based on the samples of random volunteers, I could not conclude that the soap is effective to the whole population.
(作者没说过Luxess是soap吧? 另外样本的representative和结果的可靠性为什么放在一段? 两者不是同一个逻辑点的东西, 应该分段)

Moreover, even if the condition of facial skin (is) actually improved during using such soap(s), it is not necessary mean that the soap is the cause of the improvement. There are many other factors that may effect the facial skin condition， for example, the weather, spiritual state and the diet. Perhaps the participants eat a more health diet during the study that lead to the improvement of the skin. Perhaps the weather there during the study is mild and comfortable. Perhaps the participants are more conscious about their facial skin in the study. (这三句可以用分句来写) All the facts listed above could cause the improvement of the condition of facial skin, without ruling out other possibilities that may be the reason, the arguer could not persuade me that the soap in effective.

To sum up, the arguer’s state is logically flawed as well as lacking the evidence. To strengthen the argument, the arguer has to provide more convincing studies and more specific data.  

怀疑你把题看错了, 题目里说被测试者是先用香皂洗脸然后再加Luxess, Luxess是face cream.
攻击方式基本没什么问题, 不过第一个攻击点不能成立. 感觉这道题不太好写, 因为攻击点太少了, 虽然很容易就能找出来但写起来也没多少字.

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谢谢lastangel的指正，我的确把题目看错了，第一段论证的也很不好，很汗阿。。。
谢谢！以后一定小心了！