Issue41 [synergy小组]polymerwufan第六次作业

polymerwufanUID: 2219535

Issue41 Time: 45min  Words:407

According to the speaker, nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are very important in society because they can cater to certain human needs which cannot be addressed by mainstream science. I concede that these nonmainstream areas actually serve to appease, perhaps even inspire people in their lives, especially in today's society which are full of uncertainty and competition. However, overemphasizing the significance of them might bring about some negative influences to individuals as well as society as a whole.

Admittedly, these nonmainstream areas ofinquiry play a important role in society particularly when it comes to their function of appeasing people's stress and anxiousness about their study, works,and daily lives,--in short, their future lives. After all, time has its only direction and any experience in lives cannot be repeated by people's willingness. Therefore, when people encounter certain circumstance to have to make choice or decision, they might worry about whether their choice or decision is reasonable, and they might feel regret and remorse when the consequences of their choice or decision are be justified to be not sound ones. While the nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as fortune-telling and astrology, which can tell them what  will occur in people's future lives and what decision is the most reasonable one, actually serve as the compass of lives for people. So, the speaker's claim is somewhat reasonable to some extent.

Nevertheless, overemphasizing the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry must lead to negative effects on individuals, and even on the society as whole. Imagine that when a businessman who is enthusiastic in the fortune-telling make a significant decision in investment, merely complying the suggestion of fortune-telling while without any statistical analysis or other scientific calculation on cost and profit may spell fiasco to his or her business. Besides, nonmainstream would do harm to not only the individuals but also the society as a whole. Consider some extreme behaviors such as 911 event in America. Few would argue that such evil extremes usually stem from certain forms of psychic and paranormal pursuits. Obviously,overestimating the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry might be harmful to both individuals and society as a whole.

To sum up, the speaker overestimate the significance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry and overlooks some negative influences come from them. In my views, it is more reasonable for us to view these inquiries with a circumspect attitude.

[ 本帖最后由 polymerwufan 于 2006-12-12 18:12 编辑 ]

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

According to the speaker, nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are very important in society because they can cater to certain human needs which cannot be addressed by mainstream science. I concede that these nonmainstream areas actually serve to appease, perhaps even inspire people in their lives, especially in today's society which are full of uncertainty and competition. However, overemphasizing the significance of them might bring about some negative influences to individuals as well as society as a whole.

Admittedly, these nonmainstream areas ofinquiry play a important role in society particularly when it comes to their function of appeasing people's stress and anxiousness about their study, works,and daily lives,--in short, their future lives. After all, time has its only direction and any experience in lives cannot be repeated by people's willingness(没看懂,经验不能被愿望重复?). Therefore, when people encounter certain circumstance to have to make choice or decision, they might worry about whether their choice or decision is reasonable, and they might feel regret and remorse when the consequences of their choice or decision are be justified to be not sound ones. While the nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as fortune-telling and astrology, which can tell them what  will occur in people's future lives and what(which) decision is the most reasonable one, actually serve as the compass of lives for people. So, the speaker's claim is somewhat reasonable to some extent.

Nevertheless, overemphasizing the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry must lead to negative effects on individuals, and even on the society as whole. Imagine that when a businessman who is enthusiastic in the fortune-telling make a significant decision in investment, merely complying the suggestion of fortune-telling while without any statistical analysis or other scientific calculation on cost and profit may spell fiasco to his or her business(句子太长了,而且when引导了一个n长句子以后,就没下文了,). Besides, nonmainstream would do harm to not only the individuals but also the society as a whole. Consider some extreme behaviors such as 911 event in America. Few would argue that such evil extremes usually stem from certain forms of psychic and paranormal pursuits.911的事是和宗教信仰有关吧,和超自然研究有关吗 Obviously,overestimating the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry might be harmful to both individuals and society as a whole.

To sum up, the speaker overestimate the significance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry and overlooks some negative influences come from them. In my views, it is more reasonable for us to view these inquiries with a circumspect attitude.

结构不错,不过有模仿范文之嫌
你每次都限时成功,真的很佩服,我半天挤不出一句
提一点建议,感觉每次你的文章的内容不是很充实,是不是应该论证的更充分一些呢,多找些例子之类的

polymerwufanUID: 2219535

呵呵，westlife所言极是，我所有的文章基本上都是按照北美范文的路数下来的，大概是因为我北美范文是我主要的复习资料，并且我一开始就是从背诵范文例句开始着手准备作文的，理论上不会被判雷同吧，我现在也有点担心。
限时也不是每次都成功的，今天的Issue48就失败了，写了一半才发现speaker主要不是评价历史主要研究什么的问题，所以只能明天交了。
至于论证方面，确实是我的软肋，我知道的例子实在太少了，可能也与我主要看范文的习惯有关系，after all, 范文上的例子我们基本上无法应用.

关于文章中的问题,我们讨论一下:
After all, time has its only direction and any experience in lives cannot be repeated by people's willingness, 这句话我是想表达: "时间的方向只有一个,任何经历都不能随人们的意愿而重现" 主要是想表达人们做的决定和选择的后果是不能改变的,无论好与坏,因此人们每次在做决定前都会感到不安.不过我实在想不出合理的表达方法,大家帮忙想一下.
Imagine that {when a businessman [who is enthusiastic in the fortune-telling ] make a significant decision in investment，} merely complying the suggestion of fortune-telling [while without any statistical analysis or other scientific calculation on cost and profit] may spell fiasco to his or her business.
这句话是这样的 Imagine that 引导一个从句，这是句子的主干，以想象中的现象作为论据。其从句的主干是complying the suggestion...may spell fiasco, 仅仅遵照算命的建议意味着失败，前面的when引导时间状语从句，其主语是businessman，后面who引导定语从句修饰主语，整个从句谓语部分是make a dicision, 后面的merely complying ...是作为条件状语从句来修饰谓语make a dicision的。

[ 本帖最后由 polymerwufan 于 2006-12-13 17:40 编辑 ]

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

After all, time has its only direction and any experience in lives cannot be repeated by people's willingness, 这句话我是想表达: "时间的方向只有一个,任何经历都不能随人们的意愿而重现" 主要是想表达人们做的决定和选择的后果是不能改变的,无论好与坏,因此人们每次在做决定前都会感到不安.不过我实在想不出合理的表达方法,大家帮忙想一下
time has only one direction and never turns back,experiences happened already no longer have the chance to recur at one's pleasue.我改的也不好

Imagine that {when a businessman [who is enthusiastic in the fortune-telling ] make a significant decision in investment，} merely complying the suggestion of fortune-telling [while without any statistical analysis or other scientific calculation on cost and profit] may spell fiasco to his or her business.
终于看懂了,哎,太长了,很绕啊,能不能分成两句写呢

不好意思,这几天考试每时间回复,现在补上

sky2007UID: 2206968

According to the speaker, nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are very important in society because they can cater to certain human needs which cannot be addressed by mainstream science. I concede that these nonmainstream areas actually serve to appease, perhaps even inspire people in their lives, especially in today's society which are full of uncertainty and competition. However, overemphasizing the significance of them might bring about some negative influences to individuals as well as society as a whole.

Admittedly, these nonmainstream areas ofinquiry play a important role in society particularly when it comes to their function of appeasing people's stress and anxiousnessanxiety about their study, work,and daily lives,--in short, their future lives在这里这句话有些累赘. After all, time has its only direction and any experience in lives cannot be repeated by people's willingness. Therefore, when people encounter certain circumstance to have to make choice or decision, they might worry about whether their choice or decision is reasonable, and they might feel regret and remorse when the consequences of their choice or decision are be justified to be not sound ones. While the nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as fortune-telling and astrology, which can tell them what  will occur in people's future lives and what decision is the most reasonable one, actually serve as the compass of lives for people. So, the speaker's claim is somewhat reasonable to some extent和前文中所提到的精神寄托没有结合起来.

Nevertheless, overemphasizing the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry must lead to negative effects on individuals, and even on the society as whole和第一段中的话重复了，能否换种说法. Imagine that when a businessman who is enthusiastic in the fortune-telling make a significant decision in investment, merely complying the suggestion of fortune-telling while without any statistical analysis or other scientific calculation on cost and profit may spell fiasco to his or her business. Besides, nonmainstream would do harm to not only the individuals but also the society as a whole. Consider some extreme behaviors such as 911 event in America. Few would argue that such evil extremes usually stem from certain forms of psychic and paranormal pursuits. Obviously,overestimating the importance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry might be harmful to both individuals and society as a whole.这段的论证比较无力，商人投资的例子略显苍白，关于非主流科学的危害还没有阐释得透彻

To sum up, the speaker overestimate the significance of nonmainstream areas of inquiry and overlooks some negative influences comeresult from them. In my views, it is more reasonable for us to view these inquiries with a circumspect attitude.楼主的文章脉络还是很清晰，只是论证还要多些，加强说服力。

[ 本帖最后由 sky2007 于 2006-12-21 15:21 编辑 ]