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smailingfishUID: 2246243

130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

以下是encata对socialize的解释
socialize               

1.         intransitive verb take part in social activities: to take part in social activities, or behave in a friendly way to others
•  a group of friends who like to socialize after work
2.         transitive verb train somebody to be social: to give somebody the skills required for functioning successfully in society or in a particular society
•  socialize a child
3.         transitive verb make something publicly owned: to place something under public ownership or control

-so•cial•i•za•tion [sshəli záysh'n], noun
-so•cial•iz•er, noun


Microsoft? Encarta? 2007. ? 1993-2006 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved.



Totally agree
1.        What characterize a socialized child?
2.        How can socialized children determine the destiny of society?
3.        What are being done for parents to bring up their children?
4.        What should we do to better socialize a child thus to give a better future.

Socialization of children can always causes hot discussion all around the word since it is a rather important process that can determine the destiny of society. Almost all of people , whether young or old ,are involved in this activity, and, because everyone involved feels the power of socialization, perhaps there is no one can deny the importance of a socialization of a child. And, I am of the mind that lots of parents fail to raise their children.

From a newborn to an adult, one should learn how to behavior properly, how to get along with other people, how to make oneself recognized by others. What characterize a socialized person is that one must think independently and critically, behave properly, communicate with others effortlessly, and have a distinctive personality. All of these can guarantee them success, a bright future and an existence as an individual.

John Milton once said:" The childhood shows the man, as morning shows the day". This strikingly illustrate that the child is the future of society, and how the children are educated today determines how the society goes tomorrow. Perhaps that's the reason why a lot of civilized nations across the world view education as the most important priority. What one learns at an early age always has a lifelong impact on her or his life even when she or he becomes an adult, and as a result determine the destiny of society. George Washington was educated by his father to be honest and it is this excellent character that plays an important role to lead him to be a great man who gives a newborn of a nation and society. Young Abraham Lincoln was taught by his stepmother to be tolerant which contribute to his greatness, and determine the destiny of society ultimately. Once the children are educated properly, the society will show a bright future.

But both the parents and society fail to raise children to be socialized persons. The society is laying such a heavy burden on parents that they hardly have any time to educate their children. They are too busy to even have a word with children, let alone to educate them. Some even fail to set an example to kids to be honest. Lack of communication between parents and children often makes children emotionless. As a young person, one must spend almost eighteen years or more receiving education at school.  But as far as I am concerned, schools fails to provide enough skills for kids to handle social problems, and more effort should be put to help them to build up their moral standards.  In addition, the media, internet, and TV are always full of violence and sex which give children a bad environment and have a negative effect on the upbringing of a child.

Something needs to be done to better socialize a child, by both parents and society. To socialize children is to promise us a better future. Parents should spend more time with their children because the upbringing is a more important career, and at the same time society should take its responsibility to create a better growing environment.

这个题好像不太好写，不好好分析可能会跑题。建议大家搜索前辈们对这个题的讨论与分析， 应该会有所帮助。  呵呵， 我看了，可也不知道自己写的是不是跑题了，感觉好像没有跑  呵呵，欢迎大家猛拍哦  谢谢！

tianrushuiUID: 207550

占个座

piggy2006UID: 2272134

马上改哈~我这篇写得之郁闷~现在还没有勇气传到网上来哈~等先学习一下你的再说。。。^@^~

piggy2006UID: 2272134

Socialization of children can always causes hot discussion all around the word since it is a rather important process that can determine the destiny of society. Almost all of (the)people , whether young or old ,are involved in this activity, and, because everyone involved feels the power of socialization, perhaps there is no one can deny the importance of a socialization of a child. And, I am of the mind that lots of parents fail to raise their children.

From a newborn to an adult, one should learn how to behavior properly, how to get along with other people, how to make oneself recognized by others. What characterize a socialized person is that one must think independently and critically, behave properly, communicate with others effortlessly, and have a distinctive personality. All of these can guarantee them success, a bright future and an existence as an individual.

John Milton once said:" The childhood shows the man, as morning shows the day". This strikingly illustrate that the child is the future of society, and how the children are educated today determines how the society goes tomorrow. Perhaps that's the reason why a lot of civilized nations across the world view education as the most important priority. What one learns at an early age always has a lifelong impact on her or his life even when she or he becomes an adult, and as a result determine the destiny of society. George Washington was educated by his father to be honest and it is this excellent character that plays an important role to lead him to be a great man who gives a newborn of a nation and society. Young Abraham Lincoln was taught by his stepmother to be tolerant which contribute to his greatness, and determine the destiny of society ultimately. Once the children are educated properly, the society will show a bright future.

But both the parents and society fail to raise children to be socialized persons. The society is laying such a heavy burden on parents that they hardly have any time(有点怪。。。是不是把any去掉要好点。。。) to educate their children. They are too busy to even have a word with children, let alone to educate them(也是觉得有点怪。。。alone不是副词吗？~). Some even fail to set an example to kids to be honest. Lack of communication between parents and children often makes children emotionless. As a young person, one must spend almost eighteen years or more receiving education at school.  But as far as I am concerned, schools fails to provide enough skills for kids to handle social problems, and more effort should be put to help them to build up their moral standards.  In addition, the media, internet, and TV are always full of violence and sex which give children a bad environment and have a negative effect on the upbringing of a child.

Something needs to be done to better socialize a child, by both parents and society. To socialize children is to promise us a better future. Parents should spend more time with their children because the upbringing is a more important career, and at the same time society should take its responsibility to create a better growing environment.

总的来说我觉得你思路很清晰。但是你强调parents对孩子的影响比较多，举得两个例子都是跟parents教育有关的，但children are socialized不仅仅是parents的教育，还有学校跟社会，而且应该说讨论社会化，学校跟社会对孩子的教育应该主要来说，那个we不是仅仅指孩子家长。而你在论述观点的时候花很多笔墨写parents的教育，把学校跟社会一带而过。在这一点上我觉得你应该改进一下。。。当然如果你有你的想法就指点下我哈。我还没教，基本行文结构跟你一样，但重在说社会学校对孩子的影响教育。

smailingfishUID: 2246243

any 我感觉应该没问题
至于 let alone,是固定短语，意思是“更不用说，更谈不上”

至于重点写家长，主要是觉得如果都写得话，字数就太多了 呵呵
谢谢你的建议哦~~

sfgbinUID: 2130542

占个坐,今天没时间了,明天来拍.呵呵

eric_panUID: 2270415

感觉楼主写得已经很好了，结构清楚，例子很得体，比偶好多了，加油吧

sfgbinUID: 2130542

楼主的整篇文章分析的很好。但是最后一段好像没写完，有点虎头蛇尾的感觉，另外好像没有进行总结，和一般的结构有点不一样。

lzen5UID: 2216060

i am running out of time, so i will just make some breif comments.

Socialization of children can always causes hot discussion all around the world since it is a rather important process that can determine the destiny of society. Almost all of people , whether young or old ,are involved in this activity, and, because everyone involved feels the power of socialization, perhaps there is no one can deny the importance of a socialization of a child. And, (yyou dont start a sentence with "and", use however.) I am of the mind that lots of parents fail to raise their children (i think you are saying the parents failed to raise the children in the best way they could, but not failed to raise their children at all,).

From a newborn to an adult, one should learn how to behavior properly (how to behave), how to get along with other people, how to make oneself recognized by others (this is not a topic sentence). What characterizes a socialized person is that one must think independently and critically, behave properly, communicate with others effortlessly, and have a distinctive personality. All of these can guarantee them success, a bright future and an existence as an individual (syntax not ideal).

John Milton once said:" The childhood shows the man, as morning shows the day". (this is not a topic sentence) This strikingly illustrates that the child is (children are) the future of society, and how the children are educated today determines how the society goes tomorrow. Perhaps that's the reason why a lot of civilized nations across the world view education as the most important priority. What one learns at an early age always has a lifelong impact on her or his life even when she or he becomes an adult, and as a result determine the destiny of society. George Washington was educated by his father to be honest and it is this excellent character that plays an important role to lead him to be a great man who gives a newborn of a nation and society. Young Abraham Lincoln was taught by his stepmother to be tolerant which contribute to his greatness, and determine the destiny of society ultimately. Once the children are educated properly, the society will show a bright future.

But both the parents and society fail to raise children to be socialized persons. The society is laying such a heavy burden on parents that they hardly have any time to educate their children. They are too busy to even have a word with children, let alone to educate them. Some even fail to set an example to kids to be honest. Lack of communication between parents and children often makes children emotionless. As a young person, one must spend almost eighteen years or more receiving education at school.  But as far as I am concerned, schools fails to provide enough skills for kids to handle social problems, and more effort should be put to help them to build up their moral standards.  In addition, the media, internet, and TV are always full of violence and sex which give children a bad environment and have a negative effect on the upbringing of a child.

Something needs to be done to better socialize a child, by both parents and society. To socialize children is to promise us a better future. Parents should spend more time with their children because the upbringing is a more important career, and at the same time society should take its responsibility to create a better growing environment.

i think you are a bit off the topic,

i suggest following arguments

For

1. the social context is important in shaping a person.

against

1.The level of socialisation does not define a person and his/her contribution to the society
.
2. Everyone is a unique individual, A stereotypic "model" will not work in bring up a stereotypic "good child".

there you go.

lzen5UID: 2216060

by the way, I LOVE you introduction. Something different from the usual that everybody else use here.

tianrushuiUID: 207550

lz写得很好了，都不知道该怎么改了。
有一点同piggy2006就是写父母写得太多了，可以和其他的平衡一下。然后还有一点就是第二段可以更展开一些，要突出socialization对destiny of society的决定性作用

smailingfishUID: 2246243

回eric_pan      ： 过奖了你，我其实是准备了好多材料后才写出的
回sfgbin         ：最后一段写得时候确实有点急，说得很对，虎头蛇尾。谢谢
回lzen5          ：谢谢你，修改的很好，建议也很不一般，对我很有启发，谢谢。
回tianrushui  ：过奖了，大家一块加油~~ 谢谢你的建议，我会认真考虑的。

[ 本帖最后由 smailingfish 于 2006-12-16 00:18 编辑 ]