issue196 technology solves vs creates problems[自由女神小组第4次作业]

hedou992UID: 2199425

ISSUE196 - "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
提纲：（字数536，用时：2.5hours）
科技解决的问题要比产生的问题多，它提高了人们的生活质量。
1.科技解决了许多人们生活中的问题。
2.即使是科技产生的问题最终还是需要新的科技来解决。
3.没有科技人们的生活将回到古时那种辛苦的日子。
结论。


While technology solves enormous problems that people counter with in the process of society's progress, it also creates some new, acute, or even severe problems inevitably. Though they may affect the quality of people's life, contrary to the beneficial facts, its disadvantage is in the second place. That is, technology promotes people’s life quality rather than threats or damages it.

Firstly, it is technology that gradually solves the problems that prevent people living better. To illustrate it, we can contrary people's life quality in nowadays to the ancient people. Let's take transportation as an example. In the old days, when someone has to go some place, he must walk to there or take a horse-vehicle if he had enough money. It would spend almost a month from Beijing to Nanjing. On the contrary, it will take you several hours by train or by car now. Obviously, it is technology make it convenient and efficient. Another example is medical condition. Somebody may be died of flu in ancient days while you may cure only take some pills. Today people's longer life is also a good case to demonstrate the technology's importance to the people life's quality.

Moreover, even if the problems that created by technology are need technology to work out. Industry in nowadays always emit the waste gas, water, or cinder. They will pollute the air, water, or soil if they have not been handed with before they disperse to the outside environment. In Japan, some researchers found an efficient way to decompose the waste gas into carbon and some useful materials. This advanced technology can not only decrease the polluting to the air, but it can also save raw material and even produce some new product. In another case, as we know, noise becomes a threat to the people’s health in the big city and near the industry area. However, a new material has been produced as an efficient way to prevent noise coming in house. From above, advanced technology is necessary to solve the problems that people faced, even though those created by previous technology.

In the last, technology makes our lives more comfortable and easy, and without it, people still lived in the hard time that ancient people lived. In that case, we can imagine the view is that it is a dark sea when the sun gets down; people still in a famine even though they already worked hard; they will suffer the severe hot day or cold day and have nothing to do with it; their survival even a problem, let alone the good life quality. Now, please look around yourself. What do you see? Computer, telephone, cell phone, clarified water, TV, Mp3, etc. All of these are the product of the modern technology. Without these, we even can not live in a modern society. So, we can say it is technology creates the modern lives.

To sum up, when a person complaint the problems that technology creates, he should think about the situation without technology. Though the problems that technology creates may do affect the quality of life, we should believe that the problems are eventually solved by new technology and our quality of life are promote by advanced technology.

alex_leeUID: 2227596

issue196 technology solves vs creates problems[自由女神小组第4次作业]
ISSUE196 - "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
提纲：（字数536，用时：2.5hours）
科技解决的问题要比产生的问题多，它提高了人们的生活质量。
1.科技解决了许多人们生活中的问题。
2.即使是科技产生的问题最终还是需要新的科技来解决。
3.没有科技人们的生活将回到古时那种辛苦的日子。
结论。


While technology solves enormous problems that people counter with [encounter] in the process of society's progress [“in the process of society’s progress”, 用法有点重复，不够简洁], it also creates some new, acute, or even severe problems inevitably. Though they may affect the quality of people's life, contrary to the beneficial facts, its disadvantage is in the second place [前面的写法会给人留下你准备写disadvantage of technology的错觉].  That is, technology promotes people’s life quality rather than threats or damages it.

Firstly, it is technology that gradually [表达什么意思？] solves the problems that prevent people living better. To illustrate it, we can contrary [adj.] people's life quality in [多余] nowadays to the ancient people [that of the ancients]. Let's take transportation as an example. In the old days, when someone has [时态]to go [to]some place, he must walk to there or take a horse-vehicle if he had enough money. It would spend [cost] almost a month from Beijing to Nanjing. On the contrary, it will take you several hours by train or by car now. Obviously, it is technology make it convenient and efficient. Another example is medical condition. Somebody may be died of flu in ancient days while you may cure only take some pills. Today people's longer life is also a good case to demonstrate the technology's importance to the people life's quality. [例子展开不够充分，论证不够有力。 你拿古代和现代比较，但是又没有突出古代和现代生活的差别是科技进步造成的。]

Moreover, even if the problems that created by technology are [去掉] need technology to work out.[从前到这一段的转折有点突兀] Industry in nowadays always emit [emits] the waste gas, water, or cinder. They will pollute the air, water, or soil if they have not been handed [handled?] with before they disperse to the outside environment. In Japan, some researchers found an efficient way to decompose the waste gas into carbon and some useful materials. This advanced technology can not only decrease the polluting to the air, but it can also save raw material and even produce some new product [products]. In another case, as we know, noise becomes a threat to the people’s health in the big city and near the industry area. However, a new material has been produced as an efficient way to prevent noise coming in house. From above, advanced technology is necessary to solve the problems that people faced, even though those created by previous technology. [这一段对论证你的论点有什么帮助吗？]

In the last, technology makes our lives more comfortable and easy, and without it, people still lived in the hard time that ancient people lived. In that case, we can imagine the view is [去掉] that it is a dark sea when the sun gets down; people still in a famine even though they already worked hard; they will suffer the severe hot day or cold day and have nothing to do with it; their survival even a problem, let alone the good life quality. Now, please look around yourself. What do you see? Computer, telephone, cell phone, clarified water, TV, Mp3, etc. All of these are the product of the modern technology. Without these, we even can not live in a modern society. So, we can say it is technology creates the modern lives. [和body第一段仿佛是在说同一个问题]

To sum up, when a person complaint [complains] the problems that technology creates, he should think about the situation without technology. Though the problems that technology creates may do affect the quality of life, we should believe that the problems are eventually solved by new technology and our quality of life are promote by advanced technology.

总结： 我觉得论证没有很好的扣题，没有很好地把technology的advantage 与 disadvantage 对比。Body段有点混乱，好像一直在一点上纠缠。
例子没有充分展开。
用词有一些错误，包括时态，主谓，词性， 楼主下次注意哦。
发帖时段与段空一行，好看点。


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rebecca0302UID: 2249779

issue196 technology solves vs creates problems[自由女神小组第4次作业]

ISSUE196 - "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
提纲：（字数536，用时：2.5hours）
科技解决的问题要比产生的问题多，它提高了人们的生活质量。
1.科技解决了许多人们生活中的问题。
2.即使是科技产生的问题最终还是需要新的科技来解决。
3.没有科技人们的生活将回到古时那种辛苦的日子。
结论。

While technology solves enormous problems that people <counter with> encounter in the process of society's progress, it also creates some new, acute, or even severe problems inevitably. Though they may affect the quality of people's life, contrary to the beneficial facts, its disadvantage is in the second place. That is, technology promotes people’s life quality rather than threats or damages it.　开头段，用让步状语，提出论点：科技利大于弊
Firstly,论点 it is technology that gradually solves the 去掉　problems that prevent people living better. 论据To illustrate it, we can <contrary>compair people's life quality in nowadays <to >with the ancient people. 将今人和古人生活做比较　Let's take transportation as an example. In the old days, when someone has to <go some place>move from one place to another　, he must walk to there or take a horse-vehicle if he had enough money. he must to go there by horse-vehicle ,if he had enough money,or even on foot.是不是这样表示要好些 It would spend almost a month from Beijing to Nanjing. On the contrary, it will take you several hours by train or by car now. Obviously, it is technology that makes it more convenient and efficient. Another example is medical condition. Somebody may be died of flu in ancient days while you may cure only taking some pills. Today people's longer life is also a good case to demonstrate the technology's importance to the people life's quality. 古今对比　说明科技解决了问题提高人们生活水平　
Moreover, even if the problems that created by technology are去掉 need technology to work out. Industry in nowadays always emit the waste gas, water, or cinder. They will pollute the air, water, or soil if they have not been<handed with>handled before they disperse to the outside environment. In Japan, some researchers found an efficient way to decompose the waste gas into carbon and some useful materials. This advanced technology can not only decrease the polluting to the air, but去掉it can also save raw materialＳ and even produce some new product. In another case, as we know, noise <becomes>has become a threat to the去掉 people’s health in the big city and near the industry area. However, a new material has been produced as an efficient way to prevent noise coming in house. From above, advanced technology is necessary to solve the problems that people faced, even though those created by previous technology.科技产生的影响，科技也能解决．例子展开论证
In the last, technology makes our lives more comfortable and easy, and　去掉 without it, people would still lived live in the hard time that ancient people lived. In that case, we can imagine the view is that it is a dark sea when the sun gets down; people still in a famine even though they already worked hard; they will suffer the severe hot day or cold day and have nothing to do with it; their survival even a problem, let alone the good life quality. Now, please look around yourself. What do you see? Computer, telephone, cell phone, clarified water, TV, Mp3, etc. All of these are the product of the modern technology. Without these, we even can not live in a modern society. So, we can say it is technology creates the modern lives.科技创造了摩登时代
To sum up, when a person complaintＳ the problems that technology creates, he should think about the situation without technology. Though the problems that technology creates may do affect the quality of life, we should believe that the problems are eventually solved by new technology and our quality of life are promote by advanced technology.最后点题

总结
文章写得不错．结构清晰有条理，段与段联系紧密，但要注意句子的简洁表达，例子需要更加简洁典型，运用例子的层次性．
组长加油哦！