issue196 *自由女神小组第四次作业*

wonderfullnameUID: 2208232

issue196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
Outline:
1.       With the development of technology, it brings us more convenience and enjoy.
2.       Comparing with the benefit, technology creates more trouble.
3.       furthermore, it may threaten or even destroy the quality of life.

Technology, accompanying with the assimilation of human knowledge, has been developed to a higher level. While People take the advantage of technology, it troubles us more in our daily life. Considering the power of technology, it is believable that the technology may threaten or damage the quality of life.

With the development of technology, people have been enjoying the convenience and success in the ocean of the science technology. In the first industry revolution, the efficiency of workers improved so rapidly with the using of machine that factories achieved numerous profits, and meet the people’s large need. In the second industry revolution, scientists’ inventions propelled a larger world prosperity, then people tend to believe that if we want to live in a high quality life, we must depend on the technology advancement. Hence, specialists and scientists are absorbed in the invention that can make contribution to the social improvement. Admittedly, human’s creation and ingenious are limitless, now we are in the information period, almost all the behaviors and activities cannot be separated from the rapid information. Business, education, medicine, research, and political all the realms need the help of internet or something else related to the information.

However, when we take the advantage of the technology, we are gradually losing some benefits which are meaningful or even in the first important to us. We become lacking of deep communication, which it is important in human psychology, in that they communicate with each other by computers. Email becomes the very part of people life. They write to each other but just like a formation which is so boring and cannot express our very deeply emotion. The emotion only can flush when we communicate face to face. The most trouble which makes people headache in our daily life is the traffic jacking, on the one hand, people can get their determination in a short time and spare the time which they spend on walking or bicycle. On the other hand, because large numbers of cars rush on the road, people must wait for a long time and can do nothing. Comparing the waiting hours with the time spent on walking ,we can not figure out which is more wasting. But one thing is certain: the less the cars, the more health we are according to the poising air the cars produce.

Furthermore, Not only the technology can creates more trouble, but also it may damage or even destroy the quality of life. Are there more crucial when we see the soldiers use their weapons fight each other, they are recovered by the sophisticated machine? We have to admit that human beings are so ingenious that they can invent any thing which contribute to our social advancement, but meanwhile some of these inventions are devasting which human cannot handle them. For instance the human cloneand nuclear bomb.Once either of invention succeeds, human will pay the price at the expence of the disappear of the whole earth. And at that moment, people can do nothing except leaving themselves to the technology.

Technology severs us ,comforts us, even flatters us, though,it has the destorying power that may threaten our life quality which it gives us.We have to concede the technology contribution ,we need them to make our life better. Howover, in the mean time,we must figure out the possible methods before we enjoy technology benefits to hande some problems when the technology brings the harmfull effect.



[ 本帖最后由 wonderfullname 于 2007-1-16 13:19 编辑 ]

hemaUID: 2190745

issue196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
Outline:
1.       With the development of technology, it brings us more convenience and enjoy.
2.       Comparing with the benefit, technology creates more trouble.
3.       furthermore, it may threaten or even destroy the quality of life.

Technology, accompanying with the assimilation of human knowledge, has been developed to a higher level. While People take the advantage of technology, it troubles us more in our daily life. Considering the power of technology, it is believable that the technology may threaten or damage the quality of life.（开头段明确地表明作者观点，句式用得不错）

With the development of technology, people have been enjoying the convenience and success in the ocean of the science technology.（文采不错） In the first industry revolution, the efficiency of workers improved so rapidly with the using of machine that factories achieved numerous profits, and meet the people’s large need. In the second industry revolution, scientists’ inventions propelled a larger world prosperity, then people tend（时态对吗?） to believe that if we want to live in a high quality life, we must depend on the technology advancement. Hence, specialists and scientists are absorbed in the invention that can make contribution to the social improvement. Admittedly, human’s creation and ingenious are limitless, now we are in the information period, almost all the behaviors and activities cannot be separated from the rapid information. Business, education, medicine, research, and political all the realms need the help of internet or something else related to the information.(通过描写工业革命对人类生活的改变表现了科技对我们生活质量作出的贡献)

However, when we take the advantage of the technology, we are gradually losing some benefits which are meaningful or even in the first important to us.(表达感觉不妥) We become lacking of deep communication, which it is important in human psychology, in that they communicate with each other by computers. Email becomes a very part of people life. They write to each other but just like a formation which is so boring and cannot express our very deeply emotion. The emotion only can flush when we communicate face to face. The most trouble which makes people headache in our daily life is the traffic jacking, on the one hand, people can get their determination in a short time and spare the time which they spend on walking or bicycle. On the other hand, because large numbers of cars rush on the road, people must wait for a long time and can do nothing. Comparing the waiting hours with the time spent on walking ,we can not figure out which is more wasting. But one thing is certain: the less the cars, the more health we are according to the poising air the cars produce.（写到科技带来好处时，我们同时失去了很多。但个人觉得有点啰嗦）

Furthermore, Not only the technology can creates more trouble, but also it may damage or even destroy the quality of life. （not only 是不是应该放在the technology后面啊？）Are there more crucial when we see the soldiers use their weapons fight each other, they are recovered by the sophisticated machine? We have to admit that human beings are so ingenious that they can invent any thing which contribute to our social advancement, but meanwhile some of these inventions are devasting which human cannot handle them. For instance the human cloneand nuclear bomb. （没看明白）Once either of invention succeeds, human will pay the price at the expense of the disappear of the whole earth. And at that moment, people can do nothing except leaving themselves to the technology.（用了反问，强调了technology会威胁破坏我们的生活质量）

Technology severs us ,comforts us, even flatters us, though, it has the destorying power that may threaten our life quality which it gives us. We have to concede the technology contribution , we need them to make our life better. Howover, in the mean time, we must figure out the possible methods before we enjoy technology benefits to hande some problems when the technology brings the harmful effect.（最后总结，两面地分析了问题，但是最后总结的时候思想好像混乱，观点很模糊）
总得来说写得不错，继续努力，在语法方面要减少错误