Issue121 Liquidshile--Hamming组 冲刺作业第三次 总第十篇 留链互拍感激不尽！

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ISSUE121
“At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.”

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有保留的反对观点：在过去得确是自然灾难导致了物种的灭绝，比如恐龙的灭绝，人类无法插手，但不意味着人类现在也可以不管。现代人类的活动加速也造成了很多物种的灭绝，人类要为此而负责。但不是所有的物种灭绝都与人类有关，也有自然选择的结果。

有些动物的灭绝的确与人类无关，比如恐龙，但是现代大量物种的灭绝都是人类活动的结果，污染杀死海洋生物….，人类的贪婪导致的偷猎，大象，藏羚羊…

保护动物最终受益的是人类，物种多样性的好处… 同是也是人性的体现…

但是人类面临的亟待解决的问题有很多不可能也没有能力保护那么多要被自然淘汰的物种，只能尽力而为
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Although I agree with the assertion that many species have died out because of natural processes, we can not ignore the influence of human activities. In my opinion, our society should make great effort to help these endangered species within the range of possibilities.

Admittedly, some of the endangered species vanished because they can not adapt well to the natural environment, like dinosaur, which were extinct more than 60 million years as a result of drastically changing of environment they relied on. However, human activities accelerate this trend. Following the development of science and technology, especially in modern world, human activities like traffic, manufacture, reclamationand so on have polluted the environment on which the survival of natural species depend. For example, burning and cutting down rainforest are inevitably followed by many plants and animals extinction because many rainforest species cannot survive outside the forest. In addition, some of human activities directly lead to the decrease of natural species. In order to satisfy the greedy appetite of human, numerous rare wild animals were killed by people. In order to acquire valuable fur of Tibetan antelope, people endlessly hunt this kind of antelope, which is a very rare species. The number of Tibetan antelope has been decrease highly in the beginning of 1990s. Therefore, we should be responsible for the extinction of natural species, and we have a duty to help the endangered species.

In fact, protection of endangered species and maintaining species diversity and richness is important for the extinction of human being. Save the endangered species could help to keep the balance of ecosystem. It has been proved by the biologists that an ecosystem with various species would be more stable than the one which have only a few kinds of lives, and could be able to prevent itself from destruction of accidents. The earth we lived is a largest ecosystem, an ecosystem is stable with diverse species would give human being an ideal environment to live and breed offspring. Hence, from the standpoint of our benefits, we should endeavor to save species which might be in danger of extinction.

Nevertheless, although our society should protect the endangered species, there are still other urgent problems needed our society to solve, like poverty, famine, conflict and terrorism. Limited resources prevent our society from saving every endangered species, most of whose destiny are decided by the law of nature. According to the statistical data, one species disappeared in every two hours on earth. We can not handle such a severe problem and ensure all endangered species survival. Moreover, since most of these extinction are the result of Darwin’s “natural selective”, we have no good reason to against this basic law of nature. From this point of view, there is no justification to human beings to make extraordinary efforts only saving these endangered species.

While many species vanished as a result of natural selective, we have to acknowledge that human activities accelerate this trend. For our own benefits, we need to endeavor to protect these species within the range of our ability, and then protect our ecosystem upon which our survival depended.


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Issue121 Liquidshile--Hamming组 冲刺作业第三次 总第十篇 留链互拍感激不尽！

ISSUE121
“At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.”

+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Outline :

有保留的反对观点：在过去得确是自然灾难导致了物种的灭绝，比如恐龙的灭绝，人类无法插手，但不意味着人类现在也可以不管。现代人类的活动加速也造成了很多物种的灭绝，人类要为此而负责。但不是所有的物种灭绝都与人类有关，也有自然选择的结果。

有些动物的灭绝的确与人类无关，比如恐龙，但是现代大量物种的灭绝都是人类活动的结果，污染杀死海洋生物….，人类的贪婪导致的偷猎，大象，藏羚羊…

保护动物最终受益的是人类，物种多样性的好处… 同是也是人性的体现…

但是人类面临的亟待解决的问题有很多不可能也没有能力保护那么多要被自然淘汰的物种，只能尽力而为
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红色：不妥
蓝色：优点
绿色：my suggestions
WORDS : 520
Although I agree with the assertion that many species have died out because of natural processes, we can not ignore the influence of human activities. In my opinion, our society should make great effort to help these endangered species within the range of possibilities.

Admittedly, some of the endangered species vanished because they can not adapt well to the natural environment, like dinosaur, which were extinct more than 60 million years as a result of drastically changing of environment they relied on. However, human activities accelerate this trend. Following the development of science and technology, especially in modern world, human activities like traffic, manufacture,
reclamation and so on have polluted the environment on which the survival of natural species depend. For example, burning and cutting down rainforest are inevitably followed by many plants and animals extinction because many rainforest species cannot survive outside the forest. In addition, some of human activities directly lead to the decrease of natural species. In order to satisfy the greedy appetite of human, numerous rare wild animals were killed by people. In order to acquire valuable fur of Tibetan antelope, people endlessly hunt this kind of antelope, which is a very rare species. The number of Tibetan antelope has been decrease highly in the beginning of 1990s. Therefore, we should be responsible for the extinction of natural species, and we have a duty to help the endangered species.
dinosaur每篇都用，建议换一个：剑齿虎，人类出现以前的都行；这一段你是让步，就应该说有哪些生物灭亡与人无关，然后举例，再论证，
下端在转折。一段之内，不要有两层意思为好。

In fact, protection of endangered species and maintaining species diversity and richness is important for the extinction of human being. Save the endangered species could help to keep the balance of ecosystem. It has been proved by the biologists that an ecosystem with various species would be more stable than the one which have only a few kinds of lives, and could be able to prevent itself from destruction of accidents. The earth we lived is a largest ecosystem, an ecosystem is stable with diverse species would give human being an ideal environment to live and breed offspring. Hence, from the standpoint of our benefits, we should endeavor to save species which might be in danger of extinction.
人类社会为了挽救濒危物种而付出的巨大努力，尤其是以大量的资金和工作机会为代价，这样做是毫无道理的。
个人感觉还是不够切题，题中并没有否认没好处，只是说他不够紧迫，我们应该去把眼前问题解决好。
修瑞把这篇分类为：当务之急（资金、工作）和长远考虑（物种）

Nevertheless, although our society should protect the endangered species, there are still other urgent problems needed our society to solve, like poverty, famine, conflict and terrorism. Limited resources prevent our society from saving every endangered species, most of whose destiny are decided by the law of nature. According to the statistical data, one species disappeared in every two hours on earth. We can not handle such a severe problem and ensure all endangered species survival. Moreover, since most of these extinction are the result of Darwin’s “natural selective”, we have no good reason to against this basic law of nature. From this point of view, there is no justification to human beings to make extraordinary efforts only saving these endangered species.

整体思路有点乱：第一段让步，之后转折，这段又转回去了。

While many species vanished as a result of natural selective, we have to acknowledge that human activities accelerate this trend. For our own benefits, we need to endeavor to protect these species within the range of our ability, and then protect our ecosystem upon which our survival depended.

建议：有保留的反对，那你就+ -  -, 你现在是 - - +，而且第一个还是有正有负
其实，主要是为了模式化，好考试，老外这么写肯定没事。