Issue41 【CSMY作文互改小组】第四次作业 有拍必回

siyuandingUID: 2154137

Issue41
"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
研究界的一些非主流领域，比如星象学、占卜术和意念及超自然探索，在社会中起到了很重要的作用，因为它们满足了人们无法从主流科学获得的需求。

观点 有保留的反对
提纲
1、面对多变的世界以及未卜的将来，人们的确从非主流研究领域那里得到某种程度的慰藉
2、但是，它带来的好处远远不能抵偿它所带来的坏影响：A 过于依赖它会麻痹人的精神；B 而且，他会使人们安于现状，摧毁人们战胜困难并继续前进的勇气
3、随着主流科学的发展，人们能够通过理性思想解释越来越多的现象事物，以前一些不可推测的现象已经被人们所掌控和利用，

Do the nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy human some certain needs that are not addressed by mainstream science? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that these areas of inquiry could meet people's curiosity about the outside world on one hand and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness on the other hand. However, the speaker overlooks the potential harm they inflict on their participants and on society. And along with the progress of science the needs they provided will be addressed by the mainstream science in the end.

I agree with the speaker with respect to some certain satisfaction given by the nonmainstream areas of inquiry. In the first place, nonmainstream areas of inquiry meet people's curiosity by giving them interpretations no matter how ridiculous they actually might be. It is our human's nature to pursue the answers for what we do not know. Numerous natural phenomena remain mysterious and cannot be explained logically by modern science which has made extraordinary progress to the extent beyond our ancestors' imagination. Where do we come originally? Does the Loch Ness Monster really exist? Are there any other forms of lives in other celestial bodies we cannot reach? And what is the destiny of us human beings in the future? Unless man could fathom out answers for all these, there would be everlasting acquirement for the nonmainstream areas of inquiry.

On the second place, these areas of inquiry can console people and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness. People cannot understand why so many persons with kind heart have to die away because of outside unexpected violence, they also cannot figure out the reason why millions of innocent people still have a miserable live and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure, and again people cannot fathom the reason why some certain groups are deprived of fundamental rights as a human being due to difference of sex, age, race or geographic origin. When their effort thriving for rights of survival or equality seem to be hopeless, nonmainstream areas of inquiry then serves as a prefect sanctuary for their spiritual injuries to be healed.

However, the excessive beliefs in nonmainstream areas of inquiry would seriously encumber the development of society and science. It is common thought that our society has dramatically changed by modern science and technology, and human has made extraordinary progress in knowledge and technology over the recent decades. Nonmainstream areas of inquiry yet have never been supported by any substantial evidence, neither deciphered by any logic, which is the basis of human critical thinking. These areas of inquiry may even distort nature to the extent that the unacceptable interpretations cover the truth entirely and people prone to hold the belief that everything is controlled by supernatural power and they can do nothing. For example, when one believing in divinity falls sick terribly, instead of calling for a doctor he or she might pray for the help of divinity or even believe that it be his or her destiny and await the death coming. Moreover, if people frustrated with career pursuing attribute all their loses to the fortune, and thus view their lives as a game, which prevents them from continual investigation of the world, the progress of society will not continue. Consequently, it is quite reasonable that human society would probably return to the savage time.

Finally, our society is undergoing a process of rapid development where mainstream science serves a leading role. Agriculture provides people with food and clothes; architecture protects people from winds and rains; industry endows people with various industrial productions; a variety of natural and social sciences has made people's life colorful and beautiful. Furthermore, people could give proper interpretations on some mysterious phenomena whose nature has ever been distorted by nonmainstream areas of inquiry. The prediction of floods and droughts, which used to rely on astrology and fortune-telling, has become a task of the science called meteorology. With the development of astronomy, the previous inaccessible star movement gradually becomes clear and understandable and astrology begins to lose its fundamental theories accordingly. Psychical research becomes popular over recent decades, scientific investigation of alleged phenomena and events that appear to be unaccountable for by conventional physical, biological, psychological theories. Although so many phenomena still remain mysterious, human being will find the answers along with the progress of science.

In sum, the speaker's assertion is not without merit that the nonmainstream areas of inquiry such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits cater to people's needs in the psychological respect. However, the potential harm they bring about overshadows the psychological merits of those pursuits. And such rewards could gradually be addressed by the mainstream science.

参考资料
同主题写作第十一期－－issue41

[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-16 03:26 编辑 ]

西西UID: 196939

Issue41
"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
研究界的一些非主流领域，比如星象学、占卜术和意念及超自然探索，在社会中起到了很重要的作用，因为它们满足了人们无法从主流科学获得的需求。

观点 有保留的反对
提纲
1、面对多变的世界以及未卜的将来，人们的确从非主流研究领域那里得到某种程度的慰藉
2、但是，它带来的好处远远不能抵偿它所带来的坏影响：A 过于依赖它会麻痹人的精神；B 而且，他会使人们安于现状，摧毁人们战胜困难并继续前进的勇气
3、随着主流科学的发展，人们能够通过理性思想解释越来越多的现象事物，以前一些不可推测的现象已经被人们所掌控和利用，
788个字啊~~~羡慕啊~~~呵呵，下面我就用力拍了阿~
Do the nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy human some certainsome 和certain重复使用了，只用certain就好 needs that are not addressed by mainstream science?设问开头比较新，但是不够清晰，如果说does it true…会不会更好 It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that these areas of inquiry could meet people's正式用法不要’s，最好用of curiosity about the outside world on one hand and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness on the other hand. However, the speaker overlooks the potential harm they inflict on their participants and on society. And along with the progressdevelopment~ of science the needs they provided will be addressed by the mainstream science in the end.最后一句太绝对了，不是所有的问题都能够被科技进步解决，首先马克思主义告诉我们，我们只能无限的接近真理，但是永远不可能得到那个绝对真理。其次，很多东西科技永远不能解决，for example, 预知未来~right？即使这些非主流预测的不准~呵呵

I agree with the speaker with respect to some certain satisfaction given served，好多范文这个词用得还挺多的~by the nonmainstream areas of inquiry. In the first place, nonmainstream areas of inquiry meet people's curiosity by giving them interpretations no matter how ridiculous they actually might be. It is our human's nature to pursue the answers for what we do not know. Numerous natural phenomena呵呵，复数是这样写的阿~谢了 remain mysterious and cannot be explained logically by modern science which has made extraordinary progress to the extent beyond our ancestors' imagination. Where do we come originallyoriginate from 是不好点阿，我也不清楚了? Does the Loch Ness Monster really exist? Are there any other forms of lives in other celestial bodies we cannot reach? And what is the destiny of us human beings in the future? Unless man could fathom out answers for all these, there would be everlasting acquirement for the nonmainstream areas of inquiry.一连串的反问，方式很赞

On the second place, these areas of inquiry can console people and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness. People cannot understand why so many persons with kind heart so many kind-hearted 就行了，罗嗦了~have to die away because of outside unexpected violence, they also cannot figure out the reasons why millions of innocent people still have a miserable live and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure？exposure干啥？曝光？, and again people cannot fathom the reason why some certain groups are deprived of fundamental rights as a human being due to difference of sex, age, race or geographic origin.这些等级的产生不是因为不知道，而是因为无知被利用了~对吧？应该放在害处部分好点吧 When their effort thriving for什么意思 ？兴旺？ rights of survival or equality seem to be hopeless, nonmainstream areas of inquiry then serves as a prefect sanctuary forwhere their spiritual injuries to be healedbeing healed.

However, the excessiveextreme beliefs in nonmainstream areas of inquiry would seriously encumber the development of society and science. It is common thought别扭~ that our society has dramatically changed by modern science and technology, and human has made extraordinary progress in knowledge and technology over the recent decades. Nonmainstream areas of inquiry yet have never been supported by any substantial evidence, neither deciphered by any logiclogically deciphered更好, which is the basis of human critical thinking. These areas of inquiry may even distort nature to the extent that the unacceptable interpretations cover the truth entirely and people prone to hold the belief that everything is controlled by supernatural power and they can do nothing宿命论，deterministic~你说的太复杂了. For example, when one believing in divinity falls sick?生病 be sick吧 terribly, instead of calling for visitinga doctor he or she might pray for the help of divinity or even believe that it be his or her destiny and await the death coming. Moreover, if people frustrated with career pursuing attribute all their loseslost to the fortune, and thus view their lives as a game, which prevents them from continual investigation of the world, the progress of society will not continue. Consequently, it is quite reasonable that human society would probably return to the savage time.很罗嗦~~~明明可以说的简单点的

Finally, our society is undergoing a process of rapid development where？where mainstream science servesas a leading role. Agriculture provides people with food and clothes; architecture protects people from winds and rains; industry endows people with various industrial productions; a variety of natural and social sciences has made people's life colorful and beautiful. Furthermore, people could give proper interpretations on some mysterious phenomena whose nature has ever been distorted by nonmainstream areas of inquiry. The prediction of floods and droughts, which used to rely on astrology and fortune-telling, has become a task of the science called meteorology. With the development of astronomy, the previous inaccessible star movement gradually becomes clear and understandable and astrology begins to lose its fundamental theories accordingly. Psychical research becomes popular over recent decades, scientific investigation of alleged phenomena and events that appear to be unaccountable for by conventional physical, biological, psychological theories. Although so many phenomena still

西西UID: 196939

晕了，网络太差了，最后一段改的没有穿上去！:confused:
可是我已经删了。555

siyuandingUID: 2154137

Do the nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy human some certainsome 和certain重复使用了，只用certain就好[ 你的质疑很对，意思是有点重，但有这样的用法，请看Basically, there's certain - there are basically some certain needs for looking at Internet；Doesn't have to be 100% serious, I just wanna be able to have some fun with someone who can cater to some certain needs Wink where was I?? oh, yeah. New Year's day...；the balance of the nature besides meeting some certain needs. google上找的。我这样处理是为了下面论证留余地，或者说是强调一下一部分主流科学的确没解决，而一部分逐渐解决了。不知道这样解释是否满意？]needs that are not addressed by mainstream science?设问开头比较新，但是不够清晰，如果说does it true…会不会更好 [翻了许多北美范文，都是这样直接问的，以从句的形式问简得很少，而且应该是is it true 吧] It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that these areas of inquiry could meet people's正式用法不要’s，最好用of [用google查了一下没见到curiosity of people，全是people’s curiosity，而且of是物的“的”的吧]curiosity about the outside world on one hand and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness on the other hand. However, the speaker overlooks the potential harm they inflict on their participants and on society. And along with the progressdevelopment~[ 两可]of science the needs they provided will be addressed by the mainstream science in the end.最后一句太绝对了，不是所有的问题都能够被科技进步解决，首先马克思主义告诉我们，我们只能无限的接近真理，但是永远不可能得到那个绝对真理。其次，很多东西科技永远不能解决，for example, 预知未来~right？即使这些非主流预测的不准~呵呵[你说得很对，严重赞成，这是我的失误，most of the needs they provided might be...]

I agree with the speaker with respect to some certain satisfaction given served，好多范文这个词用得还挺多的~[请看：But Mill states that the satisfaction given by higher pleasures is such that we “would not resign it for any quantity of other pleasures.”； global ratings of overall patient satisfaction given by the. adult and child SPs for the 3 groups of residents are shown ... ；Although this is a very impressive statistic I was, and still am concerned about the relatively lower level of satisfaction given by the parents of middle school students. ...serve the role 吧]by the nonmainstream areas of inquiry. In the first place, nonmainstream areas of inquiry meet people's curiosity by giving them interpretations no matter how ridiculous they actually might be. It is our human's nature to pursue the answers for what we do not know. Numerous natural phenomena呵呵，复数是这样写的阿~谢了[不是这样写的吗] remain mysterious and cannot be explained logically by modern science which has made extraordinary progress to the extent beyond our ancestors' imagination. Where do we come originallyoriginate from 是不好点阿，我也不清楚了[都行吧，好象你得更好]? Does the Loch Ness Monster really exist? Are there any other forms of lives in other celestial bodies we cannot reach? And what is the destiny of us human beings in the future? Unless man could fathom out answers for all these, there would be everlasting acquirement for the nonmainstream areas of inquiry.一连串的反问，方式很赞

On the second place, these areas of inquiry can console people and relieve people's fears for the unknown and helplessness. People cannot understand why so many persons with kind heart so many kind-hearted 就行了，罗嗦了~[对，你的更地道]have to die away because of outside unexpected violence, they also cannot figure out the reasons why millions of innocent people still have a miserable live and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure？exposure干啥？曝光？,[“寒冷”之意，George W. Bush then perpetrated an illegal war against the country of Afghanistan, killing thousands of innocent civilians, women and children, mostly from starvation and exposure...; Unprepared for such a dangerous joumey，many died of starvation and exposure to the cold weather...] and again people cannot fathom the reason why some certain groups are deprived of fundamental rights as a human being due to difference of sex, age, race or geographic origin.这些等级的产生不是因为不知道，而是因为无知被利用了~对吧？应该放在害处部分好点吧[我在举例说人们遇到的无奈，你说的是更深层次的问题] When their effort thriving for什么意思 ？兴旺？[efforts striving for]rights of survival or equality seem to be hopeless, nonmainstream areas of inquiry then serves as a prefect sanctuary forwhere their spiritual injuries to be healedbeing healed.[对]

However, the excessiveextreme[两可] beliefs in nonmainstream areas of inquiry would seriously encumber the development of society and science. It is common[commonly] thought别扭~ that our society has dramatically changed by modern science and technology, and human has made extraordinary progress in knowledge and technology over the recent decades. Nonmainstream areas of inquiry yet have never been supported by any substantial evidence, neither deciphered by any logic[逻辑]logically deciphered更好, which is the basis of human critical thinking. These areas of inquiry may even distort nature to the extent that the unacceptable interpretations cover the truth entirely and people prone to hold the belief that everything is controlled by supernatural power and they can do nothing宿命论，deterministic~你说的太复杂了. For example, when one believing in divinity falls sick?生病 be sick吧[我得更贴切] terribly, instead of calling for visiting[对]a doctor he or she might pray for the help of divinity or even believe that it be his or her destiny and await the death coming. Moreover, if people frustrated with career pursuing attribute all their loses lost[failure] to the fortune, and thus view their lives as a game, which prevents them from continual investigation of the world, the progress of society will not continue. Consequently, it is quite reasonable that human society would probably return to the savage time.很罗嗦~~~明明可以说的简单点的

Finally, our society is undergoing a process of rapid development where？where mainstream science servesas[ The Office for Institutional Diversity and International Education serves a leading role in promoting an institutional culture that values and supports diversity.; Rural Utilities Service RUS serves a leading role in improving the quality of life and. promoting economic development in rural areas of Utah by offering...] a leading role. Agriculture provides people with food and clothes; architecture protects people from winds and rains; industry endows people with various industrial productions; a variety of natural and social sciences has made people's life colorful and beautiful. Furthermore, people could give proper interpretations on some mysterious phenomena whose nature has ever been distorted by nonmainstream areas of inquiry. The prediction of floods and droughts, which used to rely on astrology and fortune-telling, has become a task of the science called meteorology. With the development of astronomy, the previous inaccessible star movement gradually becomes clear and understandable and astrology begins to lose its fundamental theories accordingly. Psychical research becomes popular over recent decades, scientific investigation of alleged phenomena and events that appear to be unaccountable for by conventional physical, biological, psychological theories. Although so many phenomena st
[花了很多时间吧，谢谢你，把你的大作也贴出了，我来回拍]


[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-18 02:06 编辑 ]

西西UID: 196939

:) 呵呵，你 好厉害啊~我改的时候就是按照自己的感觉来的~没想到你这么认真呢~我也写了这篇，但是字数不多，发了你看看。呵呵~你单词的用法都在google上搜吗？

meichengyuUID: 2121098

have to die away because of outside unexpected violence, they also cannot figure out the reasons why millions of innocent people still have a miserable live and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure？exposure干啥？曝光？,[“寒冷”之意，George W. Bush then perpetrated an illegal war against the country of Afghanistan, killing thousands of innocent civilians, women and children, mostly from starvation and exposure...; Unprepared for such a dangerous joumey，many died of starvation and exposure to the cold weather...]  这里不对吧，exposure我查了美国传统词典和韦氏，本身没有“寒冷”的意思，只是表示“暴露，无掩蔽，无保护：暴露的状况，尤指暴露于恶劣天气或其它自然界的危害“，你引用的文章中的第一个exposure是指无遮掩，无防备，第二个则是指暴露于寒冷中，你用在文章中并不怎么合意思~

siyuandingUID: 2154137

have to die away because of outside unexpected violence, they also cannot figure out the reasons why millions of innocent people still have a miserable live and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure？exposure干啥？曝光？,[“寒冷”之意，George W. Bush then perpetrated an illegal war against the country of Afghanistan, killing thousands of innocent civilians, women and children, mostly from starvation and exposure...; Unprepared for such a dangerous joumey，many died of starvation and exposure to the cold weather...]  这里不对吧，exposure我查了美国传统词典和韦氏，本身没有“寒冷”的意思，只是表示“暴露，无掩蔽，无保护：暴露的状况，尤指暴露于恶劣天气或其它自然界的危害“，你引用的文章中的第一个exposure是指无遮掩，无防备，第二个则是指暴露于寒冷中，你用在文章中并不怎么合意思~

meichenyu同学，你的追根刨底之精神可谓一流，赞一个—我觉得学英语就需要有这样的精神
回归正题，首先肯定有starvation and exposure这样的用法；其次，我觉得如果要理解一句英文的话，不仅要从每个词去理解，而且还要从上下文去理解，不可能英语经过翻译之后，每个英文单词都有相应的确切的中文对应：在这里，exposure从字面上的确是暴露或无遮掩的意思，但一经与starvation[饥饿]合用，是不是意思就具体化了

[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-19 00:41 编辑 ]