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TOPIC: ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
WORDS: 349          TIME: 0:50:00          DATE: 2007-1-16

Our social customs and ethics are determined, as well as influenced, by technologies. This has been shown through several clear aspects including communication, science and media. Such influence and determination can highly concealed through technologies in these eras.

During the development of communication, many inventions change our traditions to contact with each other, and further the social customs as a huge group of individuls[individuals]. Letters, in the form of physically wrriten[written], is now partly replacing by an electric form called electric mail. Without long-time transportation and high cost for it in the first form, the latter makes instant communication possible through which our communicational behavior has  become more convinient[convenient]. With the wide using of mobile phones, people can instantly make a necessary contact with who they want, perhaps calling for help while tourists in the wild or immediately reporting one heavy accident on the highway.

Science is another era where several technologies decide how far the researchers can walk in front. Without computers, biologists can not make experiments as controling[controlling] and observing otems[atoms/elements] and electrics, the rules of which can be utilized to make medicines to save our lives from illnesses. If network hasn't been punished yet, a mount of serious information, as the current war in Middle East where many American soldier engaged in or the national price decreasing, will not be known by us. All these seem to, directly or indirectly determined our contemporay[contemporary] life.

The media technology, in addition, is one of the other stuff highly influenc[influencing] our society. One example is wide owning of television in current families. Daily staring at this eletric[electric-powered] box for such a long time has become a larger number of people's second job. As another instance, video camera enable us to make such more accurate and convincing record of some certain times like the Bulls met the Lakers in the playoffs.

As considering the cases of foregoing areas including communication, scientific research and media technolog[technology], it is clear that technology has deeply determined our social customs and ethics. Technoloies[technologies] are, in reality, some form of skelerton[skeleton] of our daily lifes[lives].

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TOPIC: ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
WORDS: 349          TIME: 0:50:00          DATE: 2007-1-16
红色：不妥
蓝色：优点
绿色：my suggestions
Our social customs and ethics are determined, as well as influenced, by technologies. This has been shown through several clear aspects including communication, science and media. Such influence and determination can highly
concealed through technologies in these eras.
开篇点出自己接下来从哪几个方面展开，思路不错。

During the development of communication, many inventions change our traditions to contact with each other, and further the social customs as a huge group of individuls[individuals]. Letters, in the form of physically wrriten[written], is now partly replacing by an electric form called electric mail. Without long-time transportation and high cost for it in the first form, the latter makes instant communication possible through which our communicational behavior has  become more convinient[convenient]. With the wide using of mobile phones, people can instantly make a necessary contact with who they want, perhaps calling for help while tourists in the wild or reporting one heavy accident    immediately  on the highway.

Science is another era where several technologies decide how far the researchers can walk in front. Without computers, biologists can not make experiments as controling[controlling] and observing otems[atoms/elements] and electrics, the rules of which can be utilized to make medicines to save our lives from illnesses. If network hasn't been punished yet, a mount of serious information, as the current war in Middle East where many American soldier engaged in or the national price decreasing, will not be known by us. All these seem to, directly or indirectly determined our contemporay[contemporary] life.
关于决定道德方面缺乏好的例子来支撑

The media technology, in addition, is one of the other stuff highly influenc[influencing] our society. One example is wide owning of television in current families. Daily staring at this eletric[electric-powered] box for such a long time has become a larger number of people's second job. As another instance, video camera enable us to make such more accurate and convincing record of some certain times like the Bulls met the Lakers in the playoffs.
还是觉得没有支持论点，论点是influence but actually determine social customs and ethics

As considering the cases of foregoing areas including communication, scientific research and media technolog[technology], it is clear that technology has deeply determined our social customs and ethics. Technoloies[technologies] are, in reality, some form of skelerton[skeleton] of our daily lifes[lives].

和上篇一样，字数有待提高，而且，可以在组织一下全文。加油！！

[ 本帖最后由 graduate06 于 2007-1-18 02:45 编辑 ]