Issue208 ScorpionSky--Hamming组 号外号外,冲刺第四篇终于出炉了!~~~

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Issue 208
"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
人们的眼神、穿着和动作都揭示了他们的态度和兴趣。你可以透过观察一个社会中人们的外貌和举止来认识该社会的理念和价值观。以小见大

The speaker asserts that, to some extent, one’s look, dress and act could represent its attitudes and interests, and mass of citizens’ appearance and behavior could reflect their country’s ideas and values. I fundamentally agree with this assertion. To visualize such a scene following, when you accidentally meet a man on road, who wearing a full dress, first, you could not be able to think he like a beggar. Further more, if you have a chance to talk with him meanwhile from this conversation you know that he is going to honor at (or partake of) a banquet. He must have given you an impression of have, and you are unaware attributing him to the rich, privileged, and fashionable social class.

We always inclined to drop ourselves in such a similar sense subliminal. The real reason of the fact is that, even though more and more appealing to equal rights and individual freedom, human still accustomed to distinct people into different classes, usually by their figures, wears and means they dealing matters. Distinct pursuing and ideas shaped different life styles, diverse life styles determined people’s variety of speech ways, appearances and attitude. Meanwhile, those varieties of shells all limited focus on the central values of the society they belonged to. In counter, this process and confine enabled us to draw general judgement to one individual, (如何表达呢？)at first glance, through his or her exterior figure.

Along with the rapid improving of society, occupations have been compartmentalized into sorts of pieces. Moreover, those plant’s workers, company’s employees, business men and sports’ players are gradually much easier to be distinct than ever before. Consider, for instance, lawyers usually intend to dress in formal, thought and talk in a cautious way; computer programmers always love to wear jeans, besides, observed that coffee and cigarette never leave them alone. Finally showing, a classic represent of example to evident my issue, the artists, who seems extremely difference—monstrous hairstyle, fashion dressing or differ expression—which made them very flash among normal people.

Not only individual attitudes and interests could be mirrored by their dress, look and act, but also a whole society’s ideas and values could be. And they always reflected by their unique culture. For instance, when it comes to the Chinese-language films--Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon (2000), which directed by Ang lee, people maybe recollected such a scene, men and women dressed in robes and both braided their hair. Date to one hundred years ago, most Chinese still were in such a way appearance, step by step, China was experienced several war times, country liberation, culture revolution and reform and opening, now, at the full speed of economy construction. Following such a process, the people of China experienced dressing from robes to sun yat sen's uniform, then to clothes only in color of gray, blue and green, and these days nearly everyone is wearing with a western-style way. Chinese ideas also undergone a way from simply show their loyalty to the communism faith and their political leaders to incline to their individual life qualities. Consequently, human’s appearance and behavior are overall keep a same pace with the changes of their social reforms.

To sum up, although all boys and girls educated that it is not proper to judge people with their appearance, but usually it is a realistic law generalized based on our consistent experience. On the other hand, there are, even seldom, indeed some cheaters pretended themselves under the good figures and good manners when they violate others interests. Thereby, people must bright eyes to avoid make a prejudice with a person at first meeting and master such a law could contribute you to judge different cultures and values of the world.

[ 本帖最后由 ScorpionSky 于 2007-1-19 13:07 编辑 ]

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"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
人们的眼神、穿着和动作都揭示了他们的态度和兴趣。你可以透过观察一个社会中人们的外貌和举止来认识该社会的理念和价值观。以小见大
红色：不妥
蓝色：优点
绿色：my suggestions

The speaker asserts that, to some extent, one’s look, dress and act could represent its attitudes and interests, and mass of citizens’ appearance and behavior could reflect their country’s ideas and values. I fundamentally agree with this assertion. To visualize such a scene following, when you accidentally meet a man on road, who wearing a full dress, first, you could not be able to think he like a beggar. Further more, if you have a chance to talk with him meanwhile from this conversation you know that he is going to honor at (or partake of) a banquet. He must have given you an impression of have???, and you are unaware attributing him to the rich, privileged, and fashionable social class.
第一段主要说出自己的论点。

We always inclined to drop ourselves in such a similar sense subliminal. The real reason of the fact is that, even though more and more appealing to equal rights and individual freedom, human still accustomed to distinct people into different classes, usually by their figures, wears and means they dealing matters. Distinct pursuing and ideas shaped different life styles, diverse life styles determined people’s variety of speech ways, appearances and attitude. Meanwhile, those varieties of shells all limited focus on the central values of the society they belonged to. In counter,  due to the process and confine, we often judge one individual, at first glance, through his or her exterior figure appearance .

Along with the rapid improving of society, occupations have been compartmentalized into sorts of
pieces. Moreover, those plant’s workers, company’s employees, business men and sports’ players are gradually much easier to be distinct than ever before. Consider, for instance, lawyers usually intend to dress in formal, thought and talk in a cautious way; computer programmers always love to wear jeans, besides, observed that coffee and cigarette never leave them alone. Finally showing, a classic represent of example to evident形容词 my issue, the artists, who seems extremely difference—monstrous hairstyle, fashion dressing or differ expression—which made them very flash among normal people.
Jim and John may seem to be very different from each other, but they'd both do anything for money—they pee in the same pot, really.
吉姆和约翰看上去不一样，但他们干什么都是为了钱—其实他们非常相似。



Not only individual attitudes and interests could be mirrored by their dress, look and act, but also a whole society’s ideas and values could be. And they always reflected by their unique culture. For instance, when it comes to the Chinese-language films--Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon (2000), which directed by Ang lee, people maybe recollected such a scene, men and women dressed in robes and both braided their hair. Date to one hundred years ago, most Chinese still were in such a way appearance,反映了什么？？ step by step, China was experienced several war times, country liberation, culture revolution and reform and opening, now, at the full speed of economy construction. Following such a process, the people of China experienced dressing from robes to sun yat sen's uniform, then to clothes only in color of gray, blue and green, and these days nearly everyone is wearing with a western-style way. Chinese ideas also undergone a way from simply show their loyalty to the communism faith and their political leaders to incline to their individual life qualities. Consequently, human’s appearance and behavior are overall keep a same pace with the changes of their social reforms.
总体来说这个例子挺好，细节方面再修改一下，让例子更好的服务论点。

To sum up, although all boys and girls educated that it is not proper to judge people with their appearance, but usually it is a realistic law generalized形容词 based on our consistent experience此句不通顺. On the other hand, there are, even seldom, indeed some cheaters pretended themselves under the good figures and good manners when they violate others interests. Thereby, people must bright eyes to avoid make a prejudice with a person at first meeting and master such a law could contribute you to judge different cultures and values of the world.
不错的结尾
前两段有些空，后面的都不错，个人认为，目前的开头不太好。注意一下一些基本的用法错误。